Such a good story, and really bittersweet. I loved it! Especially the ending, it summed everything up very nicely. I think you're an amazing writer!

Author's Response: Awww, thank you so much! Such an amazing compliment! This is actually one of my favorite one-shots. I was planning a sequel but I think may spoil the novelty of this one. Thank you for the review!!

Kay~

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wow, I loved your story!! I always thought Lily should either have been with Severus or Remus, so I liked the idea of Remily :-)

I'm sorry, I'm no good at writing reviews, but your story was awesome :) 10/10!

Author's Response: Thank you!! *hugs* I always thought Lily should be with Sev (though that would take away from the tragic-ness of it), but Remus/Lily is so cute I cant resist it either XD. No worries about how you word it hun, the fact that you took time to review says it all :). Thank you so much!

Kay~

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I was exploring your author's page after I reviewed your parody and I found this. As much as I despise Lily being paired with another Marauder than James, the summary interested me.

And you made me cry.

You made me cry! With a ship that I normally despise! How on earth do you do that?

I'm not crying anymore, thank goodness, so I can tell you what I think. It's really excellent. I - you have no idea how much I love this. It's so well done, honestly - the dialogue is absolutely incredible. The way you weave in between Remus's thoughts and Lily's is seamless, and the way the ending ties so closely to the rest of the story is - again, amazing. You wrote it all so well. If you want the plain truth, this wasn't what I expected your non-parody stuff to be like - but you've shocked me, in an absolutely wonderful way.

I don't think I really have anything else important to say. But honestly, making me cry with a ship I usually won't tolerate... that's never happened before. Ever.

Amazing job.

Blaire

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Aw, that was so sweet. I adore Remus/ Lily and that was really believable. So sad, yet so beautiful. Alot of people try and make Remily and Sirily really angsty and forbidden and although that was forbidden I felt like it had a deeper meaning than just the whole "I can't be with you because James likes you". That was part of it but... Ah, it's hard to explain!! I just found this so much more believable than a lot of the Remily's.
You obviously put alot of thought into it and it paid off. A great read, 10/10 and into my favourites!

Author's Response: Thank you! I love Remily and Sirily also but there are hardly any Remily's on the site. lol I understand what you mean. It was kind of forbidden but not in the overly angsty way lol. I tried to make it believable because a lot of people think that it would be virtually impossible and I have no idea why they think that. Remily and Sirily could easily have happened. I've been working on it for two months -_- so I'm thrilled you enjoyed it! Thanks for adding it to your favs as well :D
*hugs and cokies*

Kay~

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Love the story! It is so poignant and sweet, and I can imagine it really happening with Lily and Remus. However, there were a few distracting spelling and grammar errors, so you might want to proofread it, or have someone beta it. 10/10 anyway!

Author's Response: Thank you so much! ^_^ It hasn't been beta-ed yet but I'll get it done. Mistakes distract me too so I know how annoying they can be :P. I'm thrilled you liked it *hugs*

Kay~

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This is absolutely fantastic. The fact that it all came full circle was a key aspect. “- but you and I both know that even though it’s unseen, it doesn’t change the fact that it’s still there…”

Definitely one of my top ten favorites!

Author's Response: Thanks you so much! *hugs* I'm glad you enjoyed it and think so highly of it! That means a lot to me^_^

kay~

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Hello! I am here to review as requested.

I've never read a Remus/Lily before, since I'm not a fan of the Marauders era, but now you've got me liking this ship. I loved Lily's personality and Remus too. It was very bittersweet, with Remus liking Lily but knowing he can't because his best friend loves her and he is a werewolf. The scenes in the snow were written very well. For some reason I can't see the chapter image! I would like to see what inspired you :) Anyway, I couldn't find any grammar/spelling mistakes. GREAT job. Keep writing!

~queen_luna

Author's Response: Hi! I didn't know that you weren't a fan of the marauders lol sorry but yeah *cheers* you like the ship ;) its one of my favs. Remus is such a sweet character and I always thought that if he liked Lily more than just a friend, he's the type of person that wouldn't let anything happen even if she wanted because he was so loyal to James XD. I just put in the chater image and re-submitted this chapter into the queue. I could tell you when it's up if you'd lke :D

Thanks for the review!

kay~

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Here I am as you requested. :)

This one-shot was very well done; I really enjoyed the flow and plot of it. It was also beautifully written, and well thought out. The description was prefect, and I'm big on description though I think you came up to the challenge. All-in-all, an extremely good one-shot.

Hope I helped.10/10

Browneyes

Author's Response: Hi! I'm glad you liked it ^_^. Description was a challenge for me so I'm thrilled to hear it met your expectations. Thanks for the review!

kay~

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let me first start off by saying how much i enjoyed this !! i had butterflies, i smiled to myself, i was sad ... this is probably my favourite remily. what a great way to start off my review thread! thank you!

you drew me into the story right away with your description of lily walking in the snow. her and remus's world was created immediately, and i knew it was wonderful even though i couldn't really find the metaphor i wanted for it ... and then you put it brilliantly: a snowglobe. it was the perfect setting for a remus/lily to happen, and i think the fact that you're so aware of the fact (as are the characters) that it could never really happen for them made it all the more sweet and sad at the same time. i know i'm gushing, but the setting really was just absolutely perfect!

i don't want to write you a novel, so i'll try to control myself with the rest of this. (1) i think you did a great job with characterization - remus, for me, was exactly the way i imagine him in his teenage years (love him!), and i really like the way you made lily visibly arrogant to him, instead of doing what many do and having him think she's just this perfect, immaculate being. (2) there was really a perfect balance of dialogue, action and description. i was drawn in until the end, and the pace seemed completely right. i felt like it was all unfolding before me. (3) i loved the way you reprised their conversation about the moon. it was really the perfect way to end it, and it was made all the more sad by lily's "i'm so sorry". aaah, sigh. just wonderful!

my only piece of criticism (literally) would be to be careful with tense. this is written in the present, which is really effective for the story, but it's also a little trickier when trying to use the past within it. for example: "His eyes grow wide when he realizes what he had said." i'm pointing this one out to you because you did it a few times, so it could probably help you out in your next writing endeavours. since it's in the present, it should be "when he realizes what he HAS said." :)

overall, as i've already told you, i absolutely loved this read! i hope you continue to write, because you do it beautifully.

Author's Response: wow o_o. What a wonderful review!!!!! I'm blushing! Remily was always one of my favorite pairings after POA ^_^. I always liked that Remus and Lily had so much in common and could have easily been involved.

I was a bit worried about all the snow because I live on an island and wouldn't know snow if it crawled up and bit me on the butt :p.The picture that actually inspired me was this really beautiful, snowy, white scene. I plan to put it as the chapter image but I cant until the queue re-opens. It was really breath taking and looked really romantic and I'm a sucker for romance hehe, especially tragic ones that can't happen. Like Remily *sniff* and Sirily.

Remus is my fav too ;D. I always thought Lily would come off arrogant to Remus because he's so shy and not to James cuz he's arrogant too lol. I was actually practicing dialogue in this one since I suck at it >.< .

I like present tense because it kinda puts you in the story cuz the events are happening right before your eyes but I'm still learning the tenses :p. I'll get this beta-ed :)

Thank you sooo very much for the wonderful words ^_^. They made my day!

Really glad you like it *hugs* *hands out cookies, milk, chocolate, fudge, brownies and apple pie*

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That was the most adorable story ever! I've always loved the Remus/Lily paring, and you wrote it perfectly. Loved it!

-Nat

Author's Response: I've always had a soft spot for it as well but sadly, they are way too few Remilys on this site :(. Thanks for reviewing! I'm glad you liked it :D. *hands out cookie*

kay~

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