i love this so much i have always wanted the harry/ginny and hermione/ron relationships to be more intiment

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Really well written truth or dare story :) enjoyed it a lot :D

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this is so cute =]] Love it!!!

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very cute! good job!

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That was dumb.
The beginning and middle were okay but the end was just stupid.

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This was a really great one-shot!

The characterizations of all the main characters was excellant. You wrote them exactly like twins of their book-selfs. You just wrote them to character in a natural, not forced way.

Your writing was excellant as well. Your writing style is very descriptive, and your two opening paragraphs really show this. Those two paragraphs were supurb actually. You did a great job on those two paragraphs, and the rest of the story.

There was no mistake grammar wise, or at least very few 'cause I didn't see any, and the same goes for spelling. You had a nice decent length for this too. Pace was quite good, though some conversations and parts were a tad bit rushed. Another small mistake I saw was that when Ginny asked Hermione and Ron to play truth or dare, Ron promptly answered, but I thought he was a sleep a few minutes before that?

Other then that, this is really good, and very sweet at the very end with Ginny and Harry. 9/10

Author's Response: Hi there! I'm so sorry for taking so long to respond to your review. It's been so crazy around here that I haven't had time to sleep, let alone respond to reviews...

Anyway, I'm so glad that you liked this one-shot. Characterization is something I really try hard to perfect so it's nice to know that I did a good job with that.

Also, thanks for pointing out that thing about Ron being asleep. That's what I get for writing while I'm half-asleep and then submitting...;)

Thanks for the wonderful review!

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nice and very cute :)

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Not a bad story ... a bit short. It seems well written. I like how you kept it simple, even with the bit when Seamus and Lavender hook up. Good Job 10/10

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This is an interesting idea for a story. The way you describe the scene is well written. I like the way you leave us to interpret what Ron and Hermione do in the hall. Even though they don't kiss until the very end of Deathly Hallows it is still ingenious. The way you ended the story is good and I like how Lavender and Seamus go off to "pack" even though it doesn't mention when Seamus joins the game.

Author's Response: Hi there!

Thanks for leaving a review! I'm glad you liked this one-shot. I always like truth-or-dare stories - as corny as they can be at times ;) - so I decided to try my own hand at it and this is what I ended up with.

Thanks again!

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Your descripitions and characterizations are good. I like your plot idea to get Ron and Hermione together as well as getting Harry and Ginny together. I do wonder where Hermione and Ron went off to and what their dare was. Oh well, its always left up to the imagination, eh? Good story, all in all. I'm glad I read it.

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Thanks for stopping by and leaving a review!
I'm happy to hear that you enjoyed this little one-shot of mine. I had fun writing it so I hope you had fun reading it!

Thanks again!
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Truth and dare fics are always fun to read and yours was no expection. I liked the sneakiness of Ginny in gradually getting rid of everyone to leave her alone with Harry lol.

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I too love Truth or Dare fics and I finally decided to write one for myself. Glad you liked it!

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A truth after all! :-) Keep some randomness going, its nice to break up the grey storys...

jen

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Firstly, thank you for reviewing my story, I really appreciated it :)
I really enjoyed this story, the description in it was great, but I think the dialogue sounded a bit forced... or maybe that's because I'm tired and I can only read in fragments. But, yes, the overall impact of this story was very good, and I thought that the last scene was very cute. I really want to know what Hermione's dare was though!

-fancycherriiebud

Author's Response: Well thanks so much for returning the review. It's very sweet of you. I'm glad that you enjoyed the story and I do see what you're saying about the dialogue. It is partly intentional because everyone is a bit uncomfortable at the beginning and I tried to make them speak as though they were a bit anxious and uncomfortable. Also, I'm happy that you liked the last scene... It's one of my favorites :)

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This is a very sweet and fluffy story. It's lighthearted which is very welcome because there is enough darkness in the HP series as it is. I just love seeing the kids enjoying themselves. Also, I do ship Harry/Ginny, so I found this rather enjoyable.

I thought there was going to be a bit more tension given that Dean had gone out with Ginny and Lavander with Ron though, but I like how you (on Ginny's behalf) manage to get rid of all the others bit by bit.

The only comment I will make with regard to the style is that you use, in my opinion, too many "every"s in the first paragraph. Repetition as an stylistic tool can be quite powerful but I would limit the repetition to about 3 instances. I only noticed this because I did that myself once and then I changed it because I realised that this was the case.

Overall, very fun story, very enjoyable to read.

Author's Response: Well firstly, thank you so much for taking the time to leave a review. Secondly I'm glad you liked reading this one-shot. I will definitely go back and fix that first paragraph. I understand what you mean about the repetition. Anyway, thanks so much for leaving your thoughts :)

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Nice. Well written. A delightful piece.

Keep writing.

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Oh this really good

well done

keep on writing

*hugs*

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Yay! Finally! A good Truth and Dare story, without the instant making out and over the top stiffness! :)

I love the way you wrote a cliche (a very over used one in fanfiction, at that), and managed to make it fun, and almost completely believable.

The only criticism I'm going to give you about the actualy plot is that the whole Seamus/Lavender thing happened rather fast in the game. Perhaps you could have made the game really boring at the beginning because everyone was too scared/nervous to make it interesting. And eventually loosened people up.

I though the whole Seamus/Lavender kissing and "packing" thing rather entertaining as, you know, it was unexpected and rather awkwardly cute.

The only other things I would comment about, is the speech of the character - it's rather formal. And also I noticed a few ", ..." which is not really very good punctuation. I would suggest either removing the comma or the ellipsis.

Besides those few thing, I really liked it! :)

Well done!

7/10

Author's Response: Well thanks!

What a kind review. I'm so glad you liked it :) Thanks for the feedback and I will definitely go back and take a look for the punctuation. I really appreciate your thoughts!

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That was writen really well. I thought the ending was really cute! 10/10 :)

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great one shot, the element of surprise with Seamus and Lavendar, everyone leaving the game before it was "over".
thanks.

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Cute story! At first I was confused as to Hermionie's dare, but it all tied in really well. :)

Author's Response: Well thank you! I tried to make it tie in and I'm glad you thought it did!

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and what happened with Ron and Hermione... what was her dare?

Author's Response: This is something I tried to leave up to your imagination. For now, it's up to you!

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"return to their homes for a few moths of summer vacation"

And will those moths lay their eggs, and produce a new generation of caterpillers? You can't count on a spell checker to catch all mistakes. It will always miss the words that are spelled correctly, but which are the wrong words. Now I'll have to be looking for to/too/two, there/their/they're, wandering/wondering, and dozens of other traps like this. You've got to read and read and read your work to catch these mistakes, or use a beta.

And, since I found this one for you, I expect you to click my reviewer name above, and try to catch a couple in one of my stories! :=)

Author's Response: A girl can make a mistake can't she? :) Thanks for the advice though and I will check out your stories at first chance I get!

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hahaha! this is a great story! I love playing truth or dare!

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This is so good! I loved every moment of it. It was hilarious when Ginny told the first year she loved him! So funny! However, I am wondering where Hermione took Ron? Obviously, it was to let Ginny and Harry have peace, but maybe they went somewhere to snog...I don't know. Anyways, this was great!

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Okay, first of all, I have to say that this was better than the usual truth or dare story. You actually made a good effort to write the characters realisticly.

It was predictable, but it was cute! There were some spelling/grammar issues, and a couple awkward sentences, but overall, I thought it was a nice story. Keep trying!

Author's Response: Thanks! I did try to make the characters realistic and I'm glad it worked out. Thanks for reviewing!

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