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Review #1, by Weasleys Forever Those little pills...

17th April 2008:
Powerfully written. Very dark.

Actually very well written. Luna is portrayed as always being close to the edge, and now she has been driven mad by Voldemort.

Keep writing.

Author's Response: thanks so much for the review. I'm going to be happy all day. if i drink coffee I will fly threw the roof? I'm writing a song fic about snape. I hope you will read once it's validated. thanks. Gypsy_mask

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Review #2, by luvjamesnoliver Those little pills...

16th April 2008:
I really liked your story. It's a diffrent writing style then what I'm used to but wonderful none the less. There are a few grammer and spelling mistakes, but hey everyone makes them.
Keep up the good work you have some promising talent!

Author's Response: My edited version is still waiting to be validated. I'm glad you liked it and took the time to review. thanks. ~*~

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Review #3, by harrylilyjames Those little pills...

9th April 2008:
Hey!!
Ok, before i started rambling, i really liked this story- i never ever read a story like it before. so its different and it shows that you have a good imagination.
The ending i love, its soo sad, poor Luna =[.

But i did spot a good amount of mistakes, i picked out a few of them and tried, as best I could. I hope they help you.

out side- this should be 'outside'
threw my heart- 'threw'- is as in the action 'she threw the ball' but in this sentence you want to use 'through' as it went 'through' the fence.
lives- should be lifes
sense her mother- 'sense' is in, smell, touch, hear etc. The one you want to use is 'since' as in 'since 1990 it has been horrible'
fished work- i think this was just a typo, finished?

hope you keep writing, because this was a good story. =]

Author's Response: Thankyou. Great advise for grammer and spelling. Not my two strong subjects. I slept though english. Maybe cause i had a horrable English teacher. I'm actully waiting for the edioted version to be accepted. After I read you're review I went and edioted it again. Thanks again for takeing the time to review.

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Review #4, by dogsrox94 Those little pills...

23rd March 2008:
wow. where'd this inspiration come from? it's really good writing...

Author's Response: You ask me where the inspiration came from? It came from my own thoughts and emotions when i'm really upset. It spawned this story. Thanks for the review^_^

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