Reading Reviews for End to Immortality
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Review #1, by essenni Immortality's End

15th August 2009:
Definitely original idea. I think the story deserves attention. It was only a bit hard to read their speech. And didn't Flamels agree too fast to destroy the stone? I think it is a hard decision to end your life when you have a chance to live longer, no matter how long you have already lived.

Author's Response: Thanks for the compliments :) Yeah, I had issues writing the speech; I'm no history buff and I think I might've botched my attempt at 13th century dialects terribly. The Flamels reaching a decision...the point (I tried to do it subtly, maybe too subtle?) I tried to make was that Elle reached it, and she had already thought about it: after 600 years of life, I'd think that you'd have already thought of death for a very very long time...but then again I don't even have 6% of that time under my belt, so I wouldn't really know :) Thank you for your kind review!

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Review #2, by RonsGirlFriday Immortality's End

22nd March 2009:
Wonderful descriptions of Perenelle and her house. The image of the fireplace and the chairs at the end is especially lovely! I don't know how to express it exactly right, but I think you managed to tell a really compelling little story even though the moment you're writing about seems to span only a few minutes. The only way I can think to put my finger on it, is that your writing about Perenelle (including her dialogue, her apparel, the way she thinks about her husband, and the "smoothly worn" rocking chair) evokes a powerful image of a very long and well-lived life. 10/10

Author's Response: Thank you for the review!! I am glad you liked it...and it called my attention to the fact that I actually messed up =O This story was originally much longer when I wrote it a year or so ago, but apparently I only posted half (which apparently pleased you =D) But looking back I liked the latter bit (more dialogue, actually goes in more depth on the characters) so I will be adding that, too, in a moment! But a \\\'thousand thanks\\\' for the wonderful review!

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