I think you captured Draco's character in this entirely. He's always been a coward and I would certainly believe he would do this to his fellow Death Eaters.Author's Response: I always thought that people characterized him wrongly, so I'm glad you like how I've portrayed him. Thanks! Report Review
I absolutely love this. It was really well written and one of the more creative one-shots that I've ever read. I think you perfectly captured Draco's character and I'm glad that you chose to show another side of him. Not many people can acurately portray a character that we, honestly, know next to nothing about and make it so realistic. Great job!
~RAuthor's Response: I know, right? We hardly know anything about him and yet he\\\'s developed this sort of persona through fan fiction alone. Thanks for reviewing!! Report Review
HOORAY! EVIL DRACO!
This is what I've been missing... (sighs with contentment)
I'm so delighted I can't even be critical.
Where did the poem come from; did you write it?
Cheers!!!Author's Response: Thanks for the review! I'm so glad you liked it. Yes, I wrote the poem (sonnet, actually). =) Report Review
Wow, that Draco has become a bad a**. :P I like the overall idea, I can imagine him being like that after everything that had happened in his life.
However, I do find it unconvincing that the Wizengamot would get emotional or believe him... That's just my opinion. Oh, and I found a little typo to help out: 'Shuttering as the icy drink slid down her throat and warmed in her stomach, she dropped the bottle and it shattered on the stone floor.' Shuddering, you mean.
Otherwise, it's a cool one-shot. I rarely imagine Draco too smart or that cunning... so it's good to see him in this light. :) Great job, Chelsea. *hugs* Keep it up.Author's Response: Thanks, Lyn! I didn't really know how to make it more believable, so I just left it... *shrugs* I'm glad you had some constructive criticism though. =) *huggles* Report Review
I've been wondering when this would be posted at long last, ever since seeing it on SAYS. I completely intended to critique it... but got sidetracked... so... *cough* Chelsea, this is fabulous. Amazing. Love love love love love love LOVE it!
I thought this was absolutely spectacular. In case you didn't realize that. It's rare enough that I read Draco fics, but the few ones I do read are usually amazing. This is no exception. I honestly think this is the most accurate, chilling characterization of Draco I've ever seen. Not that I've seen that much, but the cliches and the triteness of other fics almost completely turned me off to that character. But this... spectacular. He's absolutely completely absolutely in-character and... damn, I can't believe how excited I am about this. He's just perfect. I have rarely been this impressed with anyone's Draco - and this was just... *fangirls*
But I'll shut up about Draco for a split second, just to rant about Daphne. I am just... *squee* (Can you tell I'm lost for words?) I think Jessi said this, but the way you structured the story was amazing, especially using Daphne. She's practically an OC, since we know next to nothing about her, and the way you wrote her was beautiful. And - this is going to sound random - but I LOVED how she had strawberry blonde hair. It was just a gorgeous detail. *shuts up*
I hated her from the very beginning, before she even spoke. Maybe it was the way she let the butterbeer drop on the floor... I just despised the lot of them. Another great thing about this masterpiece. The characterizations are simply fantastic, so canon but so twisted. An insightful... *cough* insight ;) ... into their minds and their society immediately after the downfall. How amazing is it that I hated these characters so much with almost no prodding? Perhaps it's just what was established in canon. I rather think that's what you were going for, because there's (comparatively speaking) very little narrative and dialogue with other characters. Were you building on what we know of the Death Eaters and twisting them so we revile them and are confused about Draco and SO HAPPY Pansy's jealous and... things... *cough* (Yes, I'm still lost for words). Yeah, you seemed to distort these characters in the narration.
I am making SO much sense, aren't I? :P
And then: the end. Wow. I was so hopelessly confused and completely at a loss as to what would happen by the end. The list, the Wizengamot, the story, then the revelation that it was all a lie, then the double crosser has been double crossed... absolutely thrilling and completely clever and really, really astonishing... *hearts*
I am SO happy I finally read this properly. Chelsea, you are a tragedy genius. *cheers in an uber fangirly manner* It's such a shame that your fics aren't reviewed as often because they COMPLTELY deserve it and I for one am in love! *huggleglompsquishtackles and then returns to cheering fangirlishly*
And let me add, you are officially one of my favorite authors now, thanks to this. *hyper and happy*Author's Response: Sidetracked, eh? Well next time I'm going to hunt you down... :P
ZOMGSQUEEGUBBYHUGGLEGLOMPSQUISHES! I am SO glad you liked it, because I was really unsure of it. I felt kind of daring, like I was writing something I shouldn't. That probably doesn't make any sense... Point is, I really wanted to write something that didn't portray Draco as one of those icky Slytherin sex gods. Blegh. This is HOW I SEE HIM.
Ahem. Anyway... Thank you SO SO SO SOOOOOO much for the uber fantastic spectacularly awesome review! I'm totally your fangirl, too!!!! *huggles Gubby* Report Review
Oh wow, that was way cool, I have to admit. You really had me spinning in there trying to figure out what was going on, but in a good way. That was excellent, definetly 10/10 material.Author's Response: I was kind of spinning while writing it, too. :P Thanks for the review, Kristen! Report Review
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