Reading Reviews for Rose's First Year At Hogwarts
  
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Review #1, by crazychick_1947 The First Day of School
19th March 2008:
it was okay but it seemed a bit rushed & didn't have any emotion whatsoever especially when she became friends with Alica Longbottom, The Sorting Ceramony & talking to Scorpius it's just the chapter went to fast u didn't focuse on the 1 bit for 2 long other that that lol i enjoyed it

Author's Response: I know I was trying not to put all lot in the first chapter but I know I need to slow down.

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Review #2, by Rosie The First Day of School
19th March 2008:
This is good.

But,

maybe a beta would make it better?


It seems a little rushed and stilted. Particularly Rose and Alicia becoming friends, the sorting ceremony and the last bit.

Maybe slow down the pace a bit?

There are also a few americanisms in there e.g. mom and semester - but that is only a teeny thing

Anyway, its a promising start - look forward to the next chapter!

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