I want her to end up wit Blaise !! Report Review
PLEASE PLEASE PLEASE PLEASE! Hurry up and write more. I am dying to know more.AH its driving me insaneAuthor's Response: i am reallysorry but i discontinued that story :'< i wasnt getting the response i wante to it, but thanks so much Report Review
Your page so I can e-mail you.Author's Response: g a n b o u b a @ t d s . n e t
take out the spaces, and there's my e-mail! Report Review
Okay, but I'm not sure how to access that...Author's Response: hm... what do you mean? Report Review
I don't know about finishing it for you, but we could collaborate. I don't really know what you're seeking to accomplish, ultimately, but between us, we could get it there with a little romance, a little intrigue, a lot of adventure, and perhaps even a little humor.
I think we need to take this in a series of objectives to bring about the climax and resolution of our story. Obviously, that wall is central to this story, but going over that cliff kind of confuses me. I think I'll have to go back and read all of it again and take some notes. How do I get my e-mail addy to you?
SheilaAuthor's Response: mines on my page. I don't feel wierd about putting it out here, so you can just send me an e-mail and i'll try and respond.
And i think i can finish the story now! :p i've tried to go to the library after school and write, but it's not going as well as i planned, but i'll manage.
i'll wait for an e-mail
grace Report Review
As short as this is, you could have tacked it onto the last chapter, but since you didn't, you need to expand this one. Who in Sam Hill is Elena?Author's Response: lol. ok so i've been grounded from my computer, and i'm typing this as quickly as possible at the library. I've written out a plot somewhat on how i want this to go, but i'm not 100% sure. i'm finishing this part now Report Review
Wow.your story is really great.
Please write more because I have to know what happens. All the twists in the tale are great although at the very very start of the story I was a bit confused, but that passed quickly and I can't wait for more.Author's Response: wow thanks a ton! i really really hop that i can get started again in January, i don't want this story to go to waste. :( i'll try and update! Report Review
Okay, so you like my idea. You're wondering, though, how Hermione's going to get to the other side of that wall, right? She can run like the wind--what's to say she can't leap or climb too? Maybe not in a single bound, but she's got some amazing physical abilities and I'm sure the agility to go with them.
She has to (somehow) contact either Harry, Ron, or Ginny to let them know she's not...er...dead and set up some kind of clandestine meeting so she can explain everything. Of course, there's going to be some outrage to be resolved, but she has to convince them that this is the only way to save the Wizarding community.
It's far-fetched, but then again...it's fan-fic. Anything goes.
SheilaAuthor's Response: wow you have some really amazing ideas, but i don't know if i'm going to be able to write again until January(or at least post up chapters).
my parents took away ,my internet so i can't get on the computer at my house, but i wil try to finish up these next few chapters and post them up during a study hall or something. But i really want to use these ideas. They are amazing. and maybe if i have to completely get rid of my story (like my parents are asking because they think this is stupid to write on a site) then i will for sure let you complete this because we are on the same page as to my story. Report Review
Former in sake review !
Eh?Author's Response: hah yes! thank you!!! :)
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I Like The Use Of The Word RapingAuthor's Response: thanks :)
-slove Report Review
O.k I Will Admit It YOu Were Right About Me Liking This Story
Dont Know What I Am On About Go To The Story At The Bottom Of Your Page And Read The Last Chapters ReveiwsAuthor's Response: haha thanks, but i'm confused about the last part. what? Report Review
At some point, this is going to get REALLY ugly. Ugly to the point of almost hopeless for the Order and the free Wizarding Community. Since Hermione's loyalties do lie with the Order, there is a way, but it's an extreme measure.
Hermione needs to make contact with Harry and Ron at some point. There has to be some kind of meeting and meeting of the minds. She needs to tell them, her best friends, what has happened to her and where she's been and what she's been up to.
My idea is this: It has gotten so bad for the Order, decimated as it is, that Hermione devises the most outrageous plan imaginable. She needs to create more vampires, starting with Harry and Ron. If they're going to be a team again, this may be the only way. In turn, Harry will need to bring Ginny in.
Now...obviously, it can't be as cut and dry as all that. There needs to be doubt, fear, conflict, and then resolve. Again, it's a matter of doing what's RIGHT as opposed to what's easy. What would be easy? Giving up, running?
As for Blaise and Draco...that's anybody's guess. You've pretty much left it open for anything to happen. They sky's the limit on that.Author's Response: hmmm... i likey this splan, haha. But how would she get over to the other side??? that's the confusing part Report Review
When you want to know what the idea is that I'm holding back on, let me know and I'll tell you. Since this review thing doesn't like e-mail addies included, I'm not sure how to tell you without blabbing it to the world. Any ideas?Author's Response: yea i want to hear your ideas, but i don't have any ideas Report Review
it was totally great. whats with draco though? cnt wait til u update itAuthor's Response: lol. You'll find out... :) thanks for reviewing Report Review
Whoa...slow down. This is looking a bit rushed. This is your story, but consider something. Blaise wants to do the Cliff Mortor thing right off. I'm guessing he either wants out or he's really out to do Hermione and the Order in.
Hermione's too smart to just go off half-cocked like that. She was right to tell Blaise they need to accomplish this mission before they do that, the reason being that they have to gain Voldemort's trust. I'm thinking Nagini is on to Hermione and that's why she hates her so much--not to mention the fact that Hermione is a vampire.
Again, these are just some thoughts your story has provoked, but I'm going to hold back on the one I half-mentioned before. Good job.Author's Response: yea, i think that i've had the idea of Blais epossibly betraying her, but i think i shot that one down. And yea, your right about the whole thing withhermione. I wwanted her to come off more cautious, but that didn't turn out to well obviosly. lol. me and my beta are still editing, and we are going to go back and fix this kind of stuff, so keep giving advice!
And i think i will elaborate more on hermione and Nagina. it's coming up in futher chapters...
Thanks! Report Review
Hermione vs. Nagini...that's a tale in itself. Please elaborate. I've had some thoughts as to how Hermione can use her condition to help Harry, Ron, and the Order, but its kind of sad at the same time. But since this is YOUR story, I'll withhold them. Perhaps we might be thinking the same thing.
Good story. This is getting really exciting.Author's Response: yea maybe, and don't be afraid to throw some thoughts out their, i could always use the help. Report Review
It appears to me that Blaise has the hots for Hermione--at least he's showing that; however...Draco might be a pursuit, especially if Blaise is either killed or betrays her. Just play it by ear and FOLLOW your heart.
You have a good story, even though it's a bit confusing--especially about that wall. At some point, you might want to clue us in as to where that wall came from and what its purpose is...and who put it up. I'm thinking Voldemort?
Also, you have some spelling, usage, and grammatical issues that make your story confusing sometimes. I'd suggest a trusted friend to be a proofreader for you. It's hard for a writer to proof his or her own work.
Otherwise, good job!Author's Response: thank you for the tips i will use them :) Report Review
Hermione a vampire in a world going to hell. Intriguing. I shall read on.Author's Response: lol. thanks Report Review
i think it was kinda of boring to the end but maybe thats' just because i'm tired but it was goodAuthor's Response: yea, i agree with you, but the next chapter is where its going to start to pick up. Report Review
Personally, I liked it. For the most part, the chapter was great, but I think Voldemort's POV should have been more eerie. It seemed to be a bit too cheerful for it being the Dark Lord. You did a good job at giving his reactions and how he felt, but it could have been a bit darker from his POV. Other than that, I think it was wonderful. And I cannot wait for you to continue. This is a Hermione/Blaise story right? Because that ship has recently become one of my favorites, and that makes me more excited for you to continue on with the story.Author's Response: Thank you for the advice. = ) the reason that i was trying to make him more cheerful than normal is because he had just gottan what he wanted, and was finally the ruler of the wizarding world.
Yes, it is a blaise/Hermoiine story. = )
p.s hermione/blaise is my favorite! Report Review
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