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Review #1, by charlottetrips Chapter One: December 24th~11:37 P.M. ~ Headquarters of the Order

11th March 2012:
Hi there! I don't know if you're still around the forums because I saw this was written in 2008 but thought I'd at least write a review since there's none posted.

This was very stream of consciousness which makes sense as it is a diary entry. The voice is very bleak and very depressing which fits with what she's describing here.

I would suggest spacing out some things and also slowing down a little. You definitely threw a lot at me. The story is gripping but could be more so with a little more care taken.

You have a good handle on a pretty dark subject so please continue. I'll be interested to see where this goes.


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