Oooo, a cliffie...I don't think I like this Selina.
However, I really do like this story! 'Pickled in a jar...' I was dying with that, oh, the mental imagery you have inflicted, ha!
I am liking Adira, especially during her hostile banter with Sirius - 'then I'll kick your arse next Thursday!' - priceless! I like that she stands up to a point, but is sensitive to the confrontation and not just full of that explosive anger I often read. Well done! And now I have another fave story :))Author's Response: Aw thanks. I love that people like Adria cos she's based on my best friend (the pickle jar comment is actually hers!!!!). I'm a bit stuck on chap 2 of this fic and want to get Thatl posted, but I'll update asap. Report Review
omg. Poor adria!. What happend? when, how? where? why?. I can totally imagine Sirius doing that. usually i dont support Sirius's gfs in other stories but in this one i actually feel whats shes feeling if you get what i mean..
Love it 100/10 :DAuthor's Response: Ahhh- that may come up in chap 2 which is WIP. I'm glad you empathise with her as she is based on one of my best friends. Thanks for reviewing. Report Review
I really want to know what Adria is supposed to have done now lol, update soon!
I love your banner by the way, can you tell me how to get into contact with Alora? because I really need a banner for my story
thanksAuthor's Response: Thanks. I put in a request in The Dark Arts Report Review
i like it good job
update soon. plz
pretty please with
a cherry on top or
whatever you likeAuthor's Response: Its being written but poss when the queue opens as you asked so nicely :-) Thanks xx Report Review
very good cant wait for more do update soon :)Author's Response: Thanks- chapter 2 is being written... Report Review
Excellent so far. Keep up the good work. I hope Sirius and Adria can patch it up. Although, I think they probably will. Update soon, please.Author's Response: Thank you- writing chapter 2 at the mo... Report Review
*feels happily distracted from work rubbish* Hi there! Let me just say, this was a fabulous start, and it’s absolutely convinced me that I want to keep reading this story. It was light, humorous and refreshing, and I enjoyed every bit of it. The humor especially was extremely well placed and very tasteful (I’m really not the person who enjoys all kinds of humor). I’ve rarely come across stories that have made me laugh, but this was definitely one of them. Adria is a very funny and interesting character, not like most annoying OCs (and yes, I have a thing against OCs – too many MS probably), and I liked reading about her. I already have some suspicions about the misunderstanding between her and Sirius, but I’m looking forward to reading the juicy details. I know there will be plenty of them. Adria/Sirius was very well written, as was James/Lily. And…*offers cookie* - that’s for not making James call Lily “Lily Flower”. Cause that’s just…wrong. *gag* I have spotted the Heads’ Dorm Cliche, but oddly enough, I didn’t mind it. There’s plenty of lovely qualities in this story to make up for that. I would recommend paying a little attention on the spelling – you’ve skipped a few letters here and there – and the spacing. I loved the way you wrote the characters – Peter was awesome, I laughed my -***- off every time he said/did something. I just love clumsy Peter. Sirius was also well written, I can picture him doing/saying everything he did/said. James was great, Remus was also very good. Lily was a tad OOC, but since I hate canon Lily, I enjoyed Lily in this story. Much more pleasant than the actual Lily. I also liked the relationships you developed between the characters. Sirius/Adria is very interesting, seeing as there aren’t many stories that start with a break-up. Most of them are just “girl falls for boy, boy falls for girl, they live happily ever after”. The friendships are well portrayed, nothing forced down the reader’s throat or anything. There isn’t much I can criticize overall, except for the spacing, which is a little pet peeve of mine. The dialogue was excellent, I’ve rarely seen dialogue flowing so naturally in a story. The sarcasm was great, not too much but not too little, most of it was very original, and all of it was funny and entertaining. I’m really looking forward to more of this story, and I WILL be back to read the following chapters. This story is just too enjoyable not to read. Besides, I want to know who Selina is and what happened between Adria and Sirius. All in all, this story was funny and interesting, and a lovely distraction from the evil work. I’ll give you a 9/10, and congrats for the awesome, awesome humor. Hugs! CJAuthor's Response: Thanks so much- I'm so glad you liked Adria cos she's based on my best friend from uni (yes she is that sarcastic and random- much of her dialogue was a direct quote, all done with her permission though!). I wrote Lily like that because she fits in with Adria more, and I also don't particularly like 'Lily-flower' unless James is using it to deliberately annoy her.
With the spacing, I find it easier to write like that I'm afraid and my computer seems to space it more when pasting. I've gone back and changed a couple of s.p.g mistakes I've noticed so hopefully that should validate soon.
I'm not sure when it'll update cos I'm focusing on another story at the mo, but once I know more where this is going I'll post. :-) Thanks for what is officially my longest (and one of my nicest reivews). Oh and thanks for the cookie. Yumxxx
New story to distract me from my law work =) yay!
I wondered what she is supposed to have done, that I am sure she never actually did- you've got me on the girls' side already! Great start.Author's Response: He he this is all part of the plan...though James and Sirius might not be entirely yo blame...
Glad to have been of assistance lol Report Review
I love it! Sirius is dreamy...lol I'm a little confused though. Why don't they like each other...I guess I'll just have to wait. I love the line, "The atmosphere in the compartment could be cut with a knife." In that one line I got a perfect picture of how it looked in there. Really excellentAuthor's Response: I love Sirius!!! He he. You'll just have to wait and see, there might well be some history.... Thanks for reviewingx Report Review
oh the tension! great first chapter *sigh* i will be checking back for me, of course. and who's Selina? crikey, a lot to think about there :)Author's Response: Aha... you will just have to wait and see who Selina is... Thanks, I'm glad you like it. Report Review
Great beginning there would love to see more on this storyline and the relationship. She's a fiesty oneAuthor's Response: I'm on it don't worry!!! Hmmm...I wonder where I can get some ideas from.... Report Review
Oh, I love this story? I wonder what it was that Selina said...but I don't like her already! Another fab chapter by my favourite author in my favourite era!!
xxxAuthor's Response: *blushes* Thank you so much again. I have an inkling it wasn't very nice.... Report Review
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