so cute!!! great job. james is HOTAuthor's Response: wow! thanks! =D
lol! haha! yeah he is... except he's fictional... and almost 40 right now... sorry to burst ur bubble!
anyway, i totally agree with u anyway! lol =D
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too short. very much too shortAuthor's Response: sorry you thought it was too short.
it was very to the point, and thats just my style of writing. im more of an action writer rather then description.
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Cool. It's kinda satisfying and cliff hanger-y at the same time...Author's Response: awesome =]
cause we all kinda know what happens after that... and if we don't, there are like 600 stories here to tell us! lol
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hahaha thats hilarious :)Author's Response: glad u thought so! i aim to please! =D
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That was so funny!
Great Job! *claps hands*Author's Response: thanks!
glad it could amuse you =D
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This seemed to move a bit too fast, even if Lily secretly liked him, he pretty much jumped her, and she probably would have reacted a bit differently - like slapping her. I did find it funny though, James is just classic. Good work!
-CaitlinAuthor's Response: yeah, it was sort of... but just imagine she's been wanting him for a while but will never admit it? it sort of makes sense... get my drift?
thanks, glad you found it funny!! =]
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This was a great little chapter. It showed James' character really well, and Lily's. I loved the way Sirius helped James plot; that was genius. Overeall, I loved this. Id' suggest you try and fix the spacing, it's a little distracting. But I still love this. Way to go. You should be proud, the writing is fabulous!!!Author's Response: awesome! thanks!! =D
i luv their charactres! they're so comedic!
ok - on my to-do list (the very long list, lol) fix spacing!! sorry if it was distracting, i'll try and fix that as soon as possible!
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Haha that was very funny! And a very good piece from a James's (a boy's) point of view. I really liked how James threw Lily off by saying that "Shut Up, Potter" would mean telling herself to shut up in the future. That was very funny. :]
I also loved this part:
I was confused, she obviously had. What was the point in denying it? Then it was as if a light bulb had gone off in my head. Girl psychology!
A very good first attempt from a boy's point of view! This was truly funny, and I liked how you ended it with just James saying, "You know you want me." I think that Sirius, Lily, and James were all in character, even though you simply referred to Sirius, since he wasn't really in the story.
Great job. 10/10.
~EstrellaAuthor's Response: lol! that was a fav of mine as well. i luv writing this chap =]
i know boys would probably find it insulting how i wrote his mind so abrupt and slightly clueless. =]
im glad they're in character. nothing i hate more is a story with charactres not being themselves. i just really hope none of mine are out of character!
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nice story. sweet and simple. it didnt end rite though. u shood really write more. it was really good. =]Author's Response: thanxx
maybe i will!!
thanxx 4 reveiwing!
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This was interesting, I've seen the idea before - however you need another chapter or two where they end up together because it feels a bit incomplete as it is. Otherwise good work!Author's Response: another chapter or two??
gladly, i will try and write another chapter. i have been meaning to do it, but i've never gotten around to it!
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Nice I like it...keep up the good work.Author's Response: thanxx!!
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Do you boys actually read this type of fanfic? That would be kind of weird in my opinion. I thought it was great! I was hoping Lily would say 'yes'...Oh well! :7) Keep writing! :7)Author's Response: im not a boy if u meant that by 'you boys' !!
lily is a bit awful to james, when u first read it in the 5th book i thot it was funny, buh when u see shes like that all the time, shes really mean!!
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interesting . . . good. it would be better, in my opinion, if there was like a follow-up ch., you know? still, good.Author's Response: i thnk i might make one...i've gotten a few reveiws suggsting that...
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I loved this it was very nice and funny. Also at the moment i was listening to Sara Bareilles': Love song so that made it even better! Definately a 10 bazillion! Keep up the great work and write more stories like this one.Author's Response: thank u!!
now ur juss maing me grin from ear to ear!!
i love getting reveiws like this!!
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YAY good idea, kinda short though yea youcan definatly write more scenes like that cuz it sounds like how a guy would think and so im gunna read your other story:)Author's Response: thank u!!
good to know im adequate n not juss embarrassing!!
thanxx 4 the erveiw!!
soz 4 the lentth, buh i didnt know wat else 2 write! Report Review
you are very good for the first time!Author's Response: aww!!
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i thought that it was pretty goodAuthor's Response: thanxx 4 the reveiw!! Report Review
What a great idea this story was. The kissy scene seemed fine to me. I WANT MORE!Author's Response: more?
i feel great that im such a good writer u want moer, buh i dont c any more...wat am i supposed to write??
hw she wants james even more now...hmmm not a bad idea... Report Review
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