Wow, dude. That was amazing. =D

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Amazing. Yet cruel with a twist. I liked it very much.

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...wow... just - wow. I'm at a loss for words. not sure if it's in a good way or a bad way. Were angry or upset when you wrote this? Having a bad day?

Author's Response: Not really, I had read the first volume of the Hell Girl manga and then I just randomly had a thought: "What if Hermione sent Umbridge to Hell?" And so, I just decided to write it.

I really hope that's in a good way.

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Hmm.. Slightly disturbing but interesting. Very interesting.

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omg totaly awesome hermione was so devius nd tht old hag umbridge got what she deserved

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This reminds me of the line in the epic

"To God this deed and so Satan my soul"


Very modern--pseudoclassical values taken to the logical and horrific conclusion: the coldness of reason against the hatefulness of beauty as a result of emotion. Well done. The only flaw that I can find is a very superficial one: the crest ought to be visible to Hermione yet invisible to everyone else so that she go mad or else give her pain when she commits sins so that she think she repent. 10/10

Author's Response: Hm..that's a good point. I never thought of it like that. Thank you.

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I wonder, what if Hermione joined a convent or something after school. It might save her immortal soul, and prevent her marrying Ron Weasley, of all people.

You could do a little series on this. Maybe you can find something to give Dumbledore and snape a little taste of punishment. It won't be that hard to find justification for either. Dumbledore plotted genocide with a Dark Lord, he served his friends a double helping of betrayal (he robbed James of the cloak that would have protected them and then raised their baby like a pig for the slaughter). Snape was just plain evil. He tortured kids for fun, and took pride in betraying and killing people (ie. Emmeline Vance in book 6).

P.S. I hope you get the next chapter of In Time up soon. I can't wait!

Author's Response: Those are some good ideas, I wouldn't to that to Snape though. Maybe Dumbledore depending on my mood. Still it gives me something to think about, I wasn't reallly planning on continuing this but I've been rethinking on that lately, so we'll just have to see what happens. And I have been working on In Time, I just have other stories I'm working on and a new one coming out soon so I've been pretty busy, but I am working on it.

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