I'm heartbroken, that was amzing. Simply amazing Report Review
Oh my god that was awesome! that last scene could have rivaled nicholas sparks' books! loved it!!! Report Review
Oh my wizard god. I read your story in a day and at the end, it truly made me smile. (: thank you for writing this! x Report Review
ahaha she will be very surprised when she does fall for him. 10/10! Report Review
WOW! I just read this whole story in an hour, and I fell in love with it! You are an amazing author! Report Review
Mark my words, I only review completed stories, and the ones i like are few but this easily became one of my favorites. It was magical to say the least ;) You made the characters perfect, and the storyline was realistic, which is far more impressive than just writing a good line. Excellent job. Report Review
That was amazing. Although incredibly cheesy, I think that it was good cheese. But did you have to write that bit at the end. It made me want to cry :( Haha, nah I don't mind that bit at the end, I think it made the chapter even more incredible, I swear I was tearing up.
I love this story :)
kabillion and 1/10 Report Review
Beatuiful story well done :)
-Lallen Report Review
I really enjoyed this chapter! It was very entertaining :) Report Review
Totally freaking awesome! That ... was ... just ... WOW
I loved the rain scene, very dramatic and very cool.
Great ending to a beautiful thing. Almost as if it were real, like the way I wish that the story had ended with James and Lily not dieing and Sirius & Remus keeping their loves and not dieing either, (But I do love Remus&Tonks later on so...)
Loved itAuthor's Response: I'm so glad you liked it! Thanks for such a lovely review. :) Report Review
Filled with angst, love, confusion; a happy yet not ending; in other words, a very good story. I'm not saying that there's nothing I wouldn't change, but what I am saying is that even though the happy-yet-not ending left me a tad bit unsatisfied, it was worth reading. Very realistic, too, which I congratulate you on. Most of these stories are horribly unrealistic and make me angry, but the way Lily ran from the love was perfect. Really, I'm just glad that you didn't ruin the ending (even if the gathered crowd was more than a little cliched...).Author's Response: Thanks! This was my first story, and I have to admit I'm a little ashamed of it. I'm so glad you liked it! That's really nice to hear. :) x Report Review
OK THAT ROCKED MY WORLD! but I am still confused about the whole first chapter kiss thing, explaino pleaseo!!! thankoAuthor's Response: Haha, glad you liked it. Thanks for the review! Report Review
OMG!! I'm SOO confused!! When did the first kiss happen, you know the one in the first chapter? Ya, that one. When did/does that happen? Has it even happened yet? I'm SOOO confused!!! Please respond, oh ya and other than that it's AMAZING!Author's Response: Okay. The structuring in this story is pretty weird, I need to go through and edit it. Sorry.
The kiss in Chapter 1 actually happens after Chapter 14 (their argument), at the beginning of Chapter 15. Lily hears the Slytherin plan to ambush James, and follows him, leading to the scene you read about in Chapter 1. Their first kiss actually happens in Chapter 8, at Sirius' party.
It's confusing, I know! Hope that helps though. Thank you for reviewing. :) Report Review
You just made my day!!! I was totally upset that our hockey team could possibly lose this gold medal (the olympics), but this story just made my day!! I long to read more!Author's Response: Glad it helped! Haha, thanks for reviewing. :) Report Review
what an amazing story. incredably wonderful, ur writing style is beautiful and phnemonally well- written. the plot was brilliantly thought out, the perfect mixture of romance, comidy, conflict, and anything else i cant think of, was put in it. it truely is a great story for ur first one. i hope to be just as talented as u in my own stories! ;D extremely well-done infinity out of 10!Author's Response: I'm so glad you liked it. I'm hoping to edit this, correcting the grammatical and spelling errors. But thank you for a lovely review! :) Report Review
I FREAKING CRIED!
I read this whole thing in about two hours straight, and I cried at chapter 17, 19, 20, and 21.
Is it a coincedence that it ends  on the year when the day.
When they were 21.
[Sniff, sniff.]Author's Response: Haha! Sorry! I think. And thank you. :) I'm so glad you liked it. It is a coincidence that it ends on chapter 21, yes, but now that you've pointed it out it seems quite fitting. Report Review
Frikkin awesome. I loved the end =)
Lily and James were happy just sat in that cold corridor, their hearts worn proudly on their sleeves.
But i gotta ask something...Ibn Abbad? Are you arab?Author's Response: I'm glad you liked it. :)
That's an odd question to ask. I'm not, but why? Report Review
Oh. My. God.
This was purely amazing.
I read it in one sitting, since I have a lot of faith in your writing. While the first few chapters were a bit slow, the story was so utterly romantic and heart-reching at times that I couldn't stop. The progression got stronger as we got nearer to the end, and I have to say, that whole scene with Hogwarts watching-it's (not so secretly) how I've always wanted it to happen for Lily and James. It was just...a legendary romance the way you wrote it. And I was thrilled with the way the side couples were developed. Surprisingly one of my favorite parts was your short epilogue note at the end. Especially, your last paragraph. It was rather touching.
10/10, and as always, amazing workAuthor's Response: :) I'm so glad you liked this! It's undergoing some editing at the moment, because there are some terrible grammatical mistakes. Thanks for the review. Report Review
I'd Lie is probably my favorite song in the world :) Great chapter!Author's Response: :) I'm not much of a Taylor Swift fan myself, but the lyrics in that song are beautiful. Report Review
I.LOVE..YOUR..STORY!! I'm so glad I found this. If I haven't [favourited?] this story yet, oh God, Merlin, Buddha, everybody in the world including the weak, the strong, the rich and the poor, I AM GONNA FAVOURITE BOTH YOUR STORY AND YOU AS IN MY FAVE AUTHOR!! 100 STARS LIKE I GAVE "A Twisted Hierarchy" (no it's impossible..)
P.S. - Your [summary?] really is dull without a banner. Go get one in TDA! (Or does it have a banner? I don't think so.)
Once Again, Your story is award-winning, not too much of every thing;just perfect, brilliant, excellent, outstanding, amazing, so cool, Very Good (nah, way better than that), absolutely perfect, It leaves me speechless all the time, and it is way much cooler than all I said.
God Bless You!Author's Response: Haha. Yeah, I've just got the banner sorted, hadn't realised it had been removed. :) I should be editing this to improve the grammar, spelling.etc It was my first story, so to hear that you enjoyed it means a lot to me, especially as I'm usually quite embarrassed by this. Thank you. Report Review
The reason why I just had my first review in this story, (which is.. already CHAPTER 11?!) is because your story is so awesome I read, and read, and read. Don't think I only reviewed now because it isn't awesome. It is. The best one so far. I love the way when at 12:00 a.m. sharp, VOILA! Their masks just disappeared into thin air! and the ending was perfect, just like in a fairytale. (I mean, it's like an ending!) haha.. haha.. Oooh... I'm hypnotized by your story + Fireflies by Owl City... @_@ great story! now, I'm dying for... the next chap.. chapter.
GOd Bless us!Author's Response: :) Glad you're enjoying it. Report Review
I've been on the verge of tears for chapters, and this one broke me. I'm sitting here sobbing and it's so sad, and I feel so sorry for Darcy and Remus because I love them. And poor, poor Lily.Author's Response: :) Thank you, and sorry! Report Review
epic. brilliant. though lily seemed very dense some of the time she rejected him so much then the one time he said "i'll bear that in mind" instead of "go out with me evans" because he had a GIRLFRIEND and she had broken his heart she was allowed to be all sad and he had to put himself out there again for her. thats my only gripe though, absolutely loved the rest of it as i do all of your work. thankyou!!! xxxAuthor's Response: Glad you liked it. I know what you mean, when I read this story I laugh and cringe at the same time, the planning and writing is so bad. I think what I was going for with all the to-and-fro was that relationships rarely work out the way we want them to. So while Lily wanted him to just drop everything for her, he couldn't, and she didn't know what to do. At the end of the day though, it was worth putting himself out there again, I suppose. I'm not sure if that makes sense. Thanks for the review! Haha. Report Review
great ending! 10/10 loved the whole storyAuthor's Response: I'm really glad. And thank you for your lovely reviews. :D Report Review
awww how sweet! sort of :sAuthor's Response: Haha, thanks. Report Review
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