Finally got to my 3rd kid. I wonder if I will finish giving these reviews before the next NaNo session..
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This was one of that stories that just make me loose the notion of time. I swear I was just reading and reading and didn't even realized when got to the bottom of it.
It was fascinating... amazingly written, believable and kept my interest all along.
~Ramona Report Review
Hi Unwritten Curse!
Ah, such yummy darkness! What a wonderfully twisted story...perfect for Halloween. I really, really enjoyed this. Voldemort's initial reaction to Bellatrix's arrival was brilliant. Her transition from wild, powerful madwoman to--quite literally--the kicked dog, was seamless. And you do write insanity extremely well, without any trace of tired stereotypes or awkwardness.
I was also happy to see Voldemort draw completely away from Bellatrix at the end. He is, I would assume, incapable of loving another human being. Witnessing his temptation, however, did give his character remarkable depth in this fic.
Lovely work, all around. I'm so glad I read this. Take care and have a Happy Halloween!
celticbardAuthor's Response: Yummy darkness. I love that. Exactly what I was going for, really! I'm rather drawn to darker plotlines... I'm not entirely sure why. So glad to hear that you think I wrote insanity convincingly. It's always been an intriguing subject. And to hear that I gave Voldemort depth - wow, thank you. What a compliment! And from someone I admire so much, that means a lot. (:
Anyway, thank you so much for your review. So sorry it's taken me ages to get back to you! Report Review
Amazing, haunting story. Your characterization of Bellatrix is spot-on, and you actually made me feel for her at times. Voldemort was written impeccably as well, in character and believable despite the fact that we're told that he supposedly cannot love.
*10/10*Author's Response: Wow, thank you so much! :) I totally appreciate all you've said. This was difficult to write, yet wonderful at the same time, and I'm so glad you enjoyed it! Report Review
I love Bellatrix, I just think she's such an interesting character, and we don't get to read enough about her, so, needless to say, I was pretty excited to see this story. Even though it was only a one-shot, and there's only so much you can include in one chapter, I think you really gave readers a nice look at not only Bellatrix's crazy personality, but also her (super creepy) relationship with Voldemort. I liked that part about him being not allowed to love--that felt really realistic to me, and also explained why there was tension between the two of them, but no one ever acted on it. Great work! I loved your creativity. If you ever want to write more about Bellatrix... do not hesitate to act on that impulse! :)Author's Response: Oh my goodness, you really are too kind!
Thank you, thank you, thank you! :D Bellatrix is one of my favorite characters, and it's amazing to hear that you enjoyed her characterization. She's definitely dark, but so intriguing. So many layers, such depth!
You know what, I just might write something more about her. Once I get some of these other WIPs finished... Heh.
Thanks again! Report Review
i want voldy love!!!
chrissyAuthor's Response: Erm, thank you? Haha. :) Report Review
absolutely amazing in every way. you have captured the characters of voldemort and bellatrix amazingly and with great colour. once again...it is absolutrly amazing...i could almost feel her excitement when the dark lord freed her.Author's Response: Thank you so, so much! Your praise means a lot to me. (: I'm glad you enjoyed the story! Report Review
This is great! You've definately captured the complete insanity of Bellatrix, and at one point I was a bit alarmed at: "Lucius’ yells sent waves of joy crashing atop Bellatrix’s head." However, it fits her character perfectly.
Voldemort is well characterised too, but I thought he could do with some more speech.
Props to you :)Author's Response: Thank you for your kind review! This was such a difficult one-shot to write, but I had a lot of fun with Bellatrix's character. I'm thrilled you think I've captured her personality. (: Report Review
That is an excellent story. I think you really captured Bellatrix in it.
Makes you wonder -- could Voldemort be hiding affection for her?Author's Response: Wow, thank you so much! And yes, that is certainly something I've wondered about. Can he truly be as heartless as we're led to believe, or is there something more? (: Report Review
Jo from eHPF here, I thought I would check out your Bella/Voldy one shot to see your take on the ship.
I loved the imagery of this piece, particularly the beginning, it really set the scene. Your writing is quite powerful.
I think you characterised Bella well, though she almost seemed too innocent when standing before Voldemort, but then again love can make you feel that way.
I wasn't too sure about your characterisation of Voldemort at first, he seemed a bit out of character with the 'almost' apology and the way he showed emotion towards Bella, but I liked the way you made him suddenly snap out of it and go cold towards her as he realised he was showing weakness.
It was definitely interesting reading someone else's take on the ship and I think you wrote this piece well.Author's Response: I'm so glad you stopped by! I'm definitely planning on reading your story as well. Hopefully this weekend. (:
For some reason, I pictured Bella as being softer when she was around Voldemort, almost tender, whereas she is maniacal and whatnot when she is apart from him. Unrequited love can really break a person down, so I see that as adding to the many other outside influences that have driven her mad over the years.
I really struggled with how I wanted Voldemort to react; I'm still not entirely satisfied with it, but I'm glad you liked his sudden realization of the weakness he was showing, and his return to the cold person we all know him as.
Thanks so much for the review! I really appreciate it. (: Report Review
Wow, this is brilliant! The descriptive bits were really evocative and I thought you wrote Bellatrix and Voldemort really convincingly. And Lucius, too, was brilliant. 10/10Author's Response: Thank you! It was difficult to write, but I think that's what makes it so rewarding when I hear compliments like this. (: I really appreciate all you've said, and I'm thrilled you enjoyed it. Report Review
Loved it! It's deliciously dark and diseased in Bellatrix's head. Bravo!Author's Response: What a wonderful compliment! 'Deliciously dark.' :P Thanks! Report Review
wow...that was pretty...hm intense lol. I really loved it. Your right it does get you thinking. Brava Brava! yet anither truley remarkable story as always my dear!
~Nicole (witch child)Author's Response: Awh, thanks! (; I'm glad you enjoyed it and that you stopped to leave a review. Report Review
WOW. That is the only word for this. And that doesn't even come close to covering it. Not at all. You write Bella and Voldemort beautifully. I love this so, so much! Immediate favorite!
1052572570462546701/10Author's Response: Thank you so, so much! I'm so flattered right now, haha. (: I'm glad you enjoyed it, and thanks for favoriting! Report Review
Wow... that's all I can say.
You truly captured Bellatrix's deranged mind and turned it in to a beautiful (albeit disterbing) and poetic oneshot.Author's Response: Thank you! It was difficult, but I'm glad I was able to pull it all together. (; Report Review
That was brilliant. You wrote with such eloquence and truly captured Bellatrix' obsession and Voldemort's fear. It was a pleasure to read. Keep writing.Author's Response: Thank you so much. (: I really appreciate all you've said, and I'm so glad you enjoyed it. Report Review
wow that was intense. Very intense.Author's Response: Heh, thanks Eva! (: Report Review
Wonderously dark and delightful!
I love stories like this! Great language and imagery throughout.
(sounded like a teacher then...argh)
Loved it! : )Author's Response: Haha, thank you! I'm flattered. (: Report Review
I absolutley love the character Bellatrix. So deep, complex and passionate. I've never really read a convincing story with Bealltrix but this was amazing! Brilliantly written and magnificently depicted. Ahh, I just adored it! I hope to read more of your AMAZING work soon! Many thanks, Becky xAuthor's Response: Thank you so so so much! You flatter me! (;
I'm working on a Next Gen. story, but who knows when I'll be ready to start posting it... haha.
Thanks so much! I love reading your reviews. (: Report Review
wow, like thats the only word i can use right about now..just an absolutely incredible story (for lack of better adjectives). I really enjoyed how you made it so that the Dark Lord still had loved her, but he wasn't caring like almost at all.. he was still as he was described by J.K. Rowling. Truly a great one-shot!!!Author's Response: Thank you. I admire J.K.R. so I try not to deviate too far from what she has told us. It's a compliment to know that I haven't. Report Review
This was the most incredible piece of writing. Wow.
I had glanced at other reviewers' comments, and noticed that some had cited your language; so I will not. But your word choices, language, descriptions -- superb. Also chilling.
The way that you grasped and portrayed Bellatrix's inner life, her devotion -- it was so well thought out -- or, rather, so well felt-out, so consistent, so incredibly right. The expressions of her moment to moment experience was right on (running out of words here).
And when you got to the end, and the crux of her moment with LV -- that was super.
Altogether, it was an excellent story, beautifully written, that ended on just the right note.
There was a quietness in the way you portrayed Bellatrix, a this-is-how-it-is quality, that was wonderful.Author's Response: Oh my goodness, I am so flattered right now. Thank you so so much. (: I don't know what to say except I'm so glad you enjoyed it, and wow, haha. Thanks! Report Review
I thought this was awesome.
Are you writing any more for it, or was it done?
I really liked it.Author's Response: Well, this was just going to be a one-shot, but I may write something else down the road. (; Thanks so much for the review! Report Review
Ooh, I really liked this. It was very believable and very well written. It was interesting the way you wrote Voldemort. With feelings yet still cold and uncaring, if that makes sense.
It was written so beautifully. Your description is absolutely stunning. There are so many sentences that are just amazing. Bellatrix is one of my favourite characters so I'm glad you did her justice. You wrote her perfectly.
Everything about this story was amazing. I love it.Author's Response: Wow, thank you very much. I'm so glad to hear that I did your favorite character justice, and that you enjoyed this one-shot. (; Thank you! Report Review
hey well done that was a tough plot to write to. I think you captured the tensions really well though, the insight into Bella was great and the conflicts within Voldermort himself was tactfully approached- not making him seem too human yet hinting at feelings for Bella,
great effortAuthor's Response: You've got that right. It was very difficult, yet very rewarding when I finally managed to get it to work. Thanks so much for the review, it really means a lot. (; Report Review
Hi there, Kimaru-Sama from the forums here!
All i can say is wow.what a beautiful piece of writing.This is the second one that I've had to review from this challenge and they are both phenomenally written! I don't know what to say first!
The sheer description is breath taking. You have a very good writing style and it was so easy to get pulled into this! Bellatrix's characterization is flawless. I liked this part:
It was the only way to keep that terrible sound from pushing her sanity closer and closer to the edge of that deep, black hole.
Little did she know, her sanity had fallen into that deep crevice long before she had come to Azkaban. And truth be told, Bellatrix loved it there without even knowing where â€˜thereâ€™ was.
and this one:
But for a fleeting moment, before the arrival of the summoned Death Eaters, the Dark Lord allowed her to place her hand against his chest, so that she could feel his heart beating. He was colder than she had imagined, but when his hand gripped her arm, a warmth like none other she had ever felt shot under her skin like a drug. All she knew for that one moment was incandescent ecstasy.
She was free.
May I also say i loved the quote at the beginning =D, wonderful work. So beautiful. You get a 10/10 from me! and on my favs list. *hugz*
kay~Author's Response: Thank you so much! My smile is seriously stretching off my face at this point. (:
Bellatrix is one of my favorite characters. I love how dark she is, but I also love that she has a passion that most people would view as a good trait if that passion weren't for the darkest wizard of the time. Heh. So I'm glad I got her chracterized alright.
Thanks again! I'm so glad you enjoyed it. Report Review
Ah, this was the first sentence that really caught me. It's beautiful: The pale woman reached out a skeletal hand. It emerged from the shadows like a snake, slithering through the air. Oh, another lovely sentence: The world was an open book of lavish sensations. You have a way with descriptions and I really like your style. It's unique and very intriguing way of writing. I just can't seem to stop quoting... this is marvelous: She watched him as he gazed out the window, snake-like fingers grasping onto the sill as though it was his sole source of balance. Ah, I'm truly enjoying this read. Your words are magical. ^_^
This was a great story and even if it felt difficult to write... it seemed effortless, beautiful, enchanting. I think this was marvelous. Although, I found the sudden: It was imperative that the Dark Lord did not love. a bit odd. It felt too... abrupt, somehow. Other than that, this was perfect. Very very good one-shot. And wow, your descriptions really are marvelous. Excellent work.Author's Response: Haha, thanks. I enjoyed the quoting, because I got to see what you enjoyed most of all in my fic. (; I'm so flattered right now.
Ah, that part. Yes, I see what you mean about it being abrupt. I may fix that later on. I was just trying to justify his change in demeanor, but I should probably make it more subtle. Thanks for pointing that out. Report Review
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