i lov the story! u are a really good writer and have a good talent in writing..all the best.plz check spellings after writingAuthor's Response: Oh thank you so much! I really need to go back and check my spelling and grammar, i just haven't had time. Still that's no excuse. Thank you so much for the review! Report Review
sorry but this chapter is kinda stupid good story thoughAuthor's Response: You're entitled to your opinion. Thank you for the review Report Review
ok soo I really like this story...I tend to judge a lot but it was good. I think you should've read more the books because some things don't go with what the books say. Also grammar mistakes, I tend to correct a lot (don't know why I do it really it's annoying sometimes) so yeah there were many grammar mistakes thought I really liked this story :D keep writing!Author's Response: I know there were things that didn't match up to the books, I wish I could have stayed closer to what happened but I also wanted my own twist to be on things. And I know my grammar is bad. I have an issue with not going back and editing my stories. I hope one day i can go back through them all and edit it but that won't be for a while.
Thank you for the review and the comments! I'm really glad you enjoyed the story:] Report Review
hey a good story. i really liked it but you should have gad given it a more elaborated end. like would have talked about their future, whats changes occurs in everybody's life after the war and stuff. but good work and keep it upAuthor's Response: I wrote an epilogue! It's a one shot called A Lifetime of Difference, its on my page if you want to read it:]!
I'm so glad you liked it, thanks for the review! Report Review
I just love the chapie, to pieces.. Happy that ginny's parents know that she & draco are dating...Author's Response: yay! That's great:] Only a few more chapters left till its done! Report Review
love how the story is progressing.. great job!!Author's Response: thank you! Only a few more chapters till its done!:D Report Review
I love this story!! :) Keep up the good work, update soon please! 100/10 :DAuthor's Response: I am writing the last chapter at this moment so don't worry you will have it soon! I can't believe it's almost over. I'm so glad you like it, thanks for the review!!:D Report Review
your writing just keeps getting better and better!!
i just read all 20 chapters in one go!!
keep at it!
Author's Response: Thank you, that means soo much to me! I started writing this in 8th grade and now I'm a high school grad. I can't believe how far I've come. I'm glad me readers can see it too. It's almost done, the next chapter will be up soon!:D Thanks for the review! Report Review
So isn't this like my third post? Whatever. I just want to tell you that I love this fanfiction, so much! :D
It's amazing. And it's one of the best fanfictions on this site. So, please write more soon. :)Author's Response: Thank you so much for every single one of your comments, I'm trying to write as fast as I can but honestly I'm at a standstill kind of. I know where I want to go I just don't know how to get there. But I will work as fast as possible to get another chapter up:D Report Review
This is one of the best fanfictions ever. I love it so much!Author's Response: aw thank you so much, that means a lot!!:D Report Review
I know I've posted before, but I'll keep on writing.
This. Is. AMAZING.
Please write more soon, I can't wait! :)Author's Response: ahaha thank you for all of the comments. it means a lot to see someone so interested in my story!:D Report Review
Please write more soon, i love it.Author's Response: Thank you! I'm trying but I have such bad writers block:/ Report Review
Anyway, I love this to pieces and you need to write more. It's amazing. Love. It. Love. It.
Sorry, but more soon?Author's Response: ahah i get it:p thank you so much for the review! I'm so glad you enjoyed it, and yes, there will be more sooon!:D Report Review
This is one of the best fanfictions I've ever read! PLEASE, write more soon. (:
I can't wait to find out what happens.Author's Response: Aw thank you so much. That honestly means sooo much to me. Sometimes I get a little self-concious about my work and I truly appreciate the positive feedback. Thank you!!:D Report Review
looking forward to seeing all the questions u ask at the end, posted soon! love the detail about the jewellry that draco & ginny have to wear! (great that charlie & bill has a role in the story)love seeing the headmaster? i wondered who the seer is?Author's Response: They should all be answered in the next chapter, you'll just have to wait! But it shouldn't be much longer! I'm glad you enjoyed it, thanks for the review! Report Review
Awesome! Can't wait for the rest!!Author's Response: thank you!!:D Report Review
I Dunno if it's just me but the chapters seem out of order cause the last chapter didn't make sense and this one really confused meAuthor's Response: I haven't read my first few chapters in a while so i don't really remember what i had in them but i do know they weren't very good. However i swear they get a whole lot better. I started this when i was in 7th or 8th grade and now im a senior so i've matured and gained a lot more expierience/knowledge. Just push through to the next few chapters and i promise it'll be worth it:D!! thanks for the review, im gladd you told me what you thought. I will try and go back one day and fix everythingg:] Report Review
love it!!! love that draco show up!! what going to happen next?Author's Response: You'll just have to keep reading!! I posted the next chapter yesterday so once it gets validated you'll find out!:] Report Review
Great! Much better chapter and I loved the twist! I love how this story is progressing and I would appreciate it if you continued to write amazing chapters! Please can you get the next chapter up as soon as it is ready- no pressure because I know how hard it is to write a good chapter AND get it posted in time to please all of the readers! :)Author's Response: Thank you! Aw yeah i'm sooo sorry I take so long to post. I am almost done with the next chapter I'm just not sure how to end it:/ so once i figure out all that good stuff it will be up:D Report Review
So let me get this strait... Draco and Ginny are like... together right? Like officially, without a doubt together? ...Tell me more! XDAuthor's Response: ummm i never said that!;] Just wait, you'll see soon!:D Report Review
Even Karaoke at Hogwarts would surprise me! XDAuthor's Response: I know it's difference but come on, I could definitely see Dumbledore doing something like this:] Thanks for the review! Report Review
Okay, now things make a little more sense. You can rearrange the order of chapters under the manage stories page on your account, btw. I think you've written Ginny's reasoning and reactions to the changes fairly well. I liked how you pointed out that if she stayed in Gryffindor she would just be the youngest Weasley, whereas if she moved into Slytherin, she really had a chance to develop herself. That was well played.
However, I was really confused about Harry. In the first chapter you made it sound as if he was pining after Ginny, and now, on the way to Dumbledore's office, he's got his heart set (a little distastefully) on Cho - but is checking to make sure Ginny still has a crush on him? That could use a little straightening out. Another point was the sudden introduction of skipping grades... I'm not sure if I missed that information, or if you didn't mention it until Ron and Harry got back to the common room. There's a lot, lot of drastic changes going on so far, and it's getting a little difficult to keep track of what's going on.Author's Response: The whole Harry thing was one of my biggest mess-ups. When I wrote this chapter I didn't really pay attention to what had happened in the first one so I contradicted myself and it's just a mess. I never went back to fix it and i should but as I said in my first review response I really don't have much time.
I'm glad you liked Ginny's reaction and thank you again for this review. I do truly appreciate it:] Report Review
I think you accidentally cut out a big chunk of story in this chapter. But if I understand right, the surprise was that everyone was being resorted for some indefinite amount of time and Ginny was put into Slytherin? But why are the 'major' Slytherin characters still in Slytherin? The expectation would be that some of them would have been changed or chose to change as well. It sounds like a unique twist, but it would be much easier to follow with the explanation of how the switch is working.
Grammar wise, the most disconcerting mistakes are the capitalization issues (don't forget that the Burrow is a distinct place - the name of the Weasley's home!), homophones (to, too; their, there, they're; etc), and possessive/plural mistakes (Ron's ball is a ball belonging to Ron and noted with an apostrophe. The Weasleys are made up of 7 people and are therefore plural.). The only other consistant issue was dialogue format. There were (again) some capitalization issues, but there were also formatting errors and basic dialogue grammar errors. If a spoken line is followed with a he said/she muttered/whatever indicating the speaker spoke, the last sentence should be punctuated with a comma inside the quotations (unless it's a question, in which case a question mark is acceptable). Ex: "The cat was black," he said. If the line following the spoken bit is a complete sentence and unrelated to who spoke the dialogue, you can punctuate with a period inside the quotation marks. "The cat ran out in front of me." John threw his hands in the air.
To help sort out confusion over who is speaking and who is responding in some of these paragraphs, you might re-read and put actions that belong to a different character in thier own paragraph. I'm going to try to give you an example, because I know that is a very vague sounding trick.
"Well, I guess I just don't understand then."
Susie flipped her hair in Mary's face. "I suppose not." She smiled cruelly.
Mary turned her eyes down, unable to find anything else to say.
"Buhbye, now," Susie said, flaunting past Mary with one last triumphant hair flip.
Mary smiled as Susie tripped over the foot she'd stuck into Susie's path.
I think you've got a good start going. If you need any help or have any questions over the critique, feel free to pm me on the forums - my name is the same as my pen name.Author's Response: Oh wow I am astonished by this comment. I know my grammar is not great and i have some small plot holes. I'm both ecstatic and annoyed that you noticed them:p I love that you aren't just scanning the story but actually looking deeper into it. I started writing this story in 8th grade and now I am a senior and to be honest I truly wish I could go back and edit all of the chapters and fix all of my mistakes but i don't have the patience or the time. I've gone through 3 betas with this story, the first two stopped being betas after my first ten chapters and the third one just never did anything. If you are interested in maybe being a beta for me, let me know. I would love to have someone go through and help correct my grammar mistakes. I know there are a lot. Thank you for this review:D Report Review
I love this story and this chapter was great! I can't wait for the next one :)Author's Response: thank you, the next one will be out soon:D Report Review
i like this story alreadyAuthor's Response: im glad to hear that! Thank you:D! Report Review
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