I loved it! Please update more chapters!

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It's amazing I love the way youwrite and the way you portray Severus

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so i just noticed when was the last time you updated, which is a real shame.
I guess no more updates??? :(
You had a really good story going, and it was really interesting. well i'll still give you a 10/10 ;)

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aw thats so cute.
despite the fact severus can be a complete ass, he can be sweet in his own ways. I just hated how he could just slap her without feeling any sympathy afterwords. We really dont see a side of him that will change our opinion of him, because its just been really small things so far.
anyways, its 4:43 am here, and i am hooked!! haha
you better update soon!!

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why don't you write another chapter i'll like to know what else is to happen

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Wow a gripping start - that was actually really good :D Lol - makes you think - brilliant (:

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omg.i cried.i cant believe it...i cried!!! that says alot cause i dont cry easily so bravo! Truley amazing! Truley amazing indeed!!!

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OMG YES! FINNALLY! SEVERUS IS GIVING HER A CHANCE! YAY! I'm so happah! keep it up!

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Oh, God, I want to read more!!! I love it!!! There's so many nuances to this that you just have to stop and think about!!!

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i love it =] as always
i love how its not all "ohmygod and then we blahblahblah" you know?

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I can't stop reading this! I love it! The more I read, the better it gets!

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I liked how Rose didn't understand why people would want to play in the snow, but Sirius made her come anyway. It was such a good way of showing Rose's character and why she needs Sirius. I'm actually rooting for Sirius in this story, even though I'm normally more of a Snape fan. And I thought that you wrote Snape really well in the last bit- he's so cold and furious and Snape-y(I hate it when people make him too nice). You have a really interesting writing style, too- kind of gothic, I guess.
I found a typo:
"he could have been asking about the pleasant whether"- should be the pleasant weather
Anyway, this has been kind of a long, rambling review, but overall I really liked this chapter.

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I totally think that his controlling behavior is a sign that he likes her, even though she obviously doesn't realize it. I love this, this is one of my favorite HPFF stories!!!

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Wow this story is sooo good please update!

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INTENSE! Very nice! once again though...i hope Sev and Rose can come to terms but thats just me. one of snape's fans! lol! :D I can't wait to read your next chapter cause i know it'll be Fierce! :D it's gunna be sweet! Your story is more addictive than chocolate to me!!! lol!!!
-evil_toothpaste

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I don't like it...

I LOVE it!! It's wonderful, it really is. You seem to have a talent for writing stories ;)

I can't wait until i read the next chapter. The way you've portrayed the characters emotons and thoughts is incredible! I love it!!!

Keep up the fantastic work!

xoxo Maxine

Author's Response: You're so nice, I swear my heart stopped when I read that first line. I was mentally preparing myself for a bashing before I read the next sentence. Thank you for your review, I hope you enjoy the rest!
-Jessi

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Don't ever allow yourself to be rushed for any reason. Good stories take time. Yes, it's frustrating, and I will no doubt be frustrated when I read the last existing chapter and have to wait however long it takes for the next one. Just keep doing what you're doing. You've the makings of a burgeoning novelist. Remember: JKR wasn't rushed; you shouldn't be either.

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Persistent devil, that Sirius Black. Again, the dates are a bit confusing, but no matter. This is become quiet exciting...and a bit scary. Your story has caused me to care about Rose, which is a sign of good writing. It's not necessarily a bad thing that it has taken you a lot of time to write each chapter--that's good writing too. Write, edit, write, edit--producing a good story is like childbirth. It's an often painful labor of love. I shall read on.

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Youth is so wasted on the young... Knowing Sirius, it's hard to tell just what is motives are. He may truly be interested in Rose, but she may be merely a challenge--a potential conquest that's giving him a run for his money.

As Miss Celie tells Shug Avery regarding the beatings Albert gives her (The Color Purple): he beat me for not bein' you. You've sort of illustrated that here by the way Severus treats Rose. He's nasty to her only because she isn't Lily.

Rose holds with her character even as she's binding Severus' wounds. She is hopeful for kindness, but when he shows her none, she blames herself for being to forward. You're doing just fine.

Author's Response: Wow, you're good. You're getting everything perfectly. I'm fortunate to have a reviewer like you that actually lets me know how they're responding to certain elements in the story, instead of a quick "Good work! Write more!". Lol, thank you!
Jessi

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Rose is a very angry young lady, as most abused and neglected people are. They are mistrustful of just about anyone, and if they're constantly criticized, they learn to condemn. Abused people are conditioned to believe the pain heaped upon them is their own fault and they just don't know how to take kindness as anything but mockery or manipulation. You're doing just fine, here. It's just that I have to believe that this is taking place in 1974, not 1968. It's the only way the numbers work...although Lily and James were born in 1960, so this should actually be 1977. Oh well, it's your story and I like it.

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I hope she kicks the snot out of him!

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I've no doubt these are memories Dumbledore hasn't sucked out of Horace Slughorn. No wonder Snape is so bitter--first, Lily, then an arranged marriage he isn't interested in. You're good.

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I think I like Regulus. I like this story. I shall read on.

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A couple of things confuse me, the first being the dates in the diary. It fluctuates between 1968 and 1974. It appears Rose is betrothed to Severus in 1974 in their 7th year, but September 1, 1968 carries on as if it were 1974, although it should have been their first year. The other thing is that Sirius should be the seventh year and Regulus behind him. Did I not read it right? Whatever the case, I shall read on because, except for a few grammatical and spelling issues (sorry), this is very good!

Author's Response: You did read right, and I congratulate you on being the first reader observant enough to notice my little time-line error. What happened is that when I imagined this story, I set the date of their seventh year as 1968, then, some source informed me the real date should be 1974 so I changed the first chapter and forgot to change the rest. I will go change it right away.
I'm not sure where I've written that Sirius is not in seventh year/is below Regulus but I would love to know in which chapter. Thanks for your help and review!
Jessi

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I also wonder why the Malfoys are arranging a marriage for Severus Snape. Compelled, I shall read on.

Author's Response: Don't hold your breath on this one. The answer won't come for several more chapters. Sorry.

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