I THINK YOUR WRITING IS WONDERFUL! I do enjoy reading it. You have some spelling errors though. You are very creative!

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Awesome! Please write more soon!

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This one was good too, very funny :)

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Haha, nice chapter, I liked the beginig with George and Lee.

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Great story i love it! please write more, please!

Author's Response: its coming... lsowly.

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another great chapter. update ASAP!

Author's Response: yup

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Very good! Update soon!

Author's Response: kk

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Wow, George recovered from losing a twin quickly...

~Evie

Author's Response: yeah.

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Veeery cute! That is how Harry and Ginny are. :-)

Author's Response: YAY! *smile*

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I really like this, but I have refused since the first day I read the page of Fred's death to believe he is dead... i love him too much.

Sorry, I'm reeeally random. l. o. l.


The story is reeally good, btw.

Author's Response: it's OK, you wouldn't beleive how random i am sometimes, especially after eating blue smarties!

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Awww! I love Dumbledore. What he said was sooo cute. Great job, but maybe just work on capitalization and puncuation. =-)

Author's Response: sorry, i know.

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haha...that was great. keep up the good work.

Author's Response: yay! thanx!

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This story... it has awful spelling and grammar. Perhaps consider re-checking each chapter to ensure minor faults. There seems to be no direction in this story. Nothing very exciting. Oh and I don't think Harry should get an Auror job just like that, I think he would still need to go through a couple of months or a year of Auror training. But, I find it humorous and cute. 6/10

Author's Response: yeah, well i was gonna do that, but i found out that he joined the auror dept. in 1998 which was the same year as the abattle and i couldn't think how else to do it. sorry about hte spelling and grammar.

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that was great, just great. please update soon

Author's Response: will do

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Awww... I loved it! This was just awesome!

Author's Response: yay! thanks. this is my favourite chapter i think.

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I finally have something to say: you need a beta. You have many spelling mistakes, which a beta would fix. Toodles!

Author's Response: what's a beta?

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Who knew he'd have to search for his own girlfriend?

Author's Response: ???????????

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Hmm... I wonder...interesting...

Author's Response: i know. hehe LOL

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Well that was... interesting.

Author's Response: sarcastic?

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that was very interestig.

Author's Response: ta. xxx

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Awww... One thing: you said Remus Lupin was a beloved wife...

Author's Response: yeah, i know. in exam week i'm gonna update them all.

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a) Critical evaluation.
1) Your grammar is atrocious. It was difficult reading, barely understandable.
2) Your actual plot, if there really is one, is ragged, and not really interesting.
3) The story, although short, isn't interesting yet.
4) Your "explainations" of things could be better. You cut short a lot of things that many people that read these are going to think "Why should I keep reading?"
5) Characters are not... true to cannon. Do you really think Harry would *want* to divulge anything to reporters? More than likely, if you've read the books thoroughly, you'd realize he avoids reporters like the plague.


b) good things
1) There seems to be some direction you're going in, but it's unclear as to what yet.
2) Add more filler material. Like, explaining the "story" of how Ginny and Harry got together. You did that fairly well, but also, the "pensieve" memory, as you may or may not know, Harry doesn't know how to place his memories in a pensieve. Maybe add something of him actually learning how to do so.

Overall, I think this story looks as though it's a first attempt. Not proofread whatsoever. But it shows promise. I don't claim to be an authority in writing, but for me, it was a difficult and boring read. Sorry to lay this out so bluntly.

Author's Response: thanks, i guess.

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i am surprised they got away so easily.

still very sweet...so 100/10

Author's Response: what do you mean got away so quickly?
thanx anyway!

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Mmm you said that remus is a beloved wife
he would be a husband
unless tonks was kinky or something

Author's Response: yeah, i know that one! when i get the chance, probs in exam week, i will update the chapters.

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wow!its amazing. i red all of em now but im lazy and havent comented on em all.
luv ya!

Author's Response: that's ok ri!

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