Nice and intriguing beginning. We didn't get to see people's reactions to the casualties of the final battle in canon, so it's nice to see that. Harry is quite in character, I think, a bit lost as to what to say or do and feeling slightly guilty, as usual.
I'm glad that Ginny finally hugged him. You have got me intrigued about how this Claire maybe, perhaps an old girlfriend of Remus?
Nicely done. I think you have missed the odd comma or added a d to surprise but nothing major at all.
Good story so far.Author's Response: Thank you for this very nice review.
I'm happy that you found Harry to be in character as I was afraid to write such a major character.
Claire, hum, she might be an old girlfriend.... but not of Remus. I'm glad you pointed her out.This story will partly revolve around her and her story so I wanted to introduce her in the first chapter even if we don't really see much about her in the following chapters.
Thank you for the grammar thing. I've read countless time my chapters but they just seem to come out of nowhere (feeling helpless !)
Thank you again and I'm glad you're intrigued. Report Review
I really like the story!!Author's Response: Thank you, I'm happy that you like it. Report Review
Good. I have an eerie feeling about this new girl. What house is she in? I suspect either Hufflepuff or Gryffindor. Anway, yeah. Love it.Author's Response: Which new girl, Alainn or Valentine?
Both girls are in Gryffindor. But I agree with you they both fit Hufflepuff as they are very faithful to their friends. But they have also other qualities as Gryffindors that you'll see later.
I'm glad that you like it. Report Review
GOING BACK TO SCHOOL? Ron would rather die than go back to school, and who's going to be the new DADA teacher? Please tell!Author's Response: Yes I know but Ron wants to follow Hermione (boys!!!). As for the next DADA teacher wait for the next chapter ^_^ Report Review
"Instead there was a nice silver fountain representing all the magical creatures equal to each other in perfect harmony."
You wrote this, and I can't help but ask WHICH magical creatures they were... Cenataurs, maybe threstals and unicorns? I'm still reading this so please respond to this!Author's Response: When I wrote that I was thinking about the three magical creatures (wizards, goblins and elves) that were in the first fountain. Thank you for pointing that out. It would be better for sure in centaurs, unicorns, werevolves, vampires, etc. were also included. I will change it later.
For now, you can imagine that all creatures that have a mind (what we will call thinking creatures) in the magical world are represented in the fountain. Report Review
Who is Claire Collins? Is she related to the Creeveys? Sorry about these stupid questions; I know they'll probably be answered in the next chapters but on another note I like this story.Author's Response: Claire Collins, humm you'll see later who she is ^_^
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