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Review #1, by Leola Rubio The Taste of Freedom

11th October 2008:
Mmm good job. I like Bellatrix as a character, but not many people write about her, so it's good to see :)

Author's Response: Thanks! The review is much appreciated.
~Sayla


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Review #2, by Sunflower The Taste of Freedom

18th May 2008:
wow.. beautiful really. Quite beautiful characterisation of Bellatrix, especially the very last bit:

Even as the pain rips through my body, I rejoice in the knowledge that it is he who watches me writhe on the floor of the cave. I welcome the agony, knowing that it his his magic touching my body. I will gladly suffer the torture if it means I can be close to my master.

That's SO Bellatrix. Beautiful. Voldemort is also portrayed to perfection in this one-shot.

One thing I think you should work on is making your stories unique. Give them a twist, make another title than My Name is Bellatrix Lestrange, which is a boring title that doesn't catch your eye as much as one that makes you think a bit over what the heck it's all about.

Give her something that is her, a tendensy she does or a term she uses, you need to make your story stand out and right now the story is incredibly well-written but nothing pops, it doesn't catch you, make your story memorable and not just the typical scene we all can picture.

A story like Liquid Sunshine by PreTeenWriter; the title says it all, you WONDER, and it's unique, it is made unique by one thing; liquid sunshine and there you have the title.

A one-shot needs something special about it and I think your story is one of the most well-written things I've ever read here on HPFF, but that's not enough.

Some others are Light Bulb Nudity by sixty and Do We Not Bleed by Daanana, Vermillion by OvergrownEden9 and Meet Me When It Rains by my voice rising.

Check them out, and it doesn't have to be much, but just have some sort of thing of originality; it can be a quote, a line, a character, something the readers will remember.

Also, get a summary; I nearly didn't read this because I had no idea what the story was about- yes a portrayal of Bellatrix, but it said nothing more and nor did the title.

Tres importante; if you don't have a summary people are already more likely not to read it.

A banner from The Dark Arts (link up in the Get Help bit under pictures or something,) would also help and although you don't HAVE to, it really helps. I'm sorry to say it but a lot of readers read the stories with the most exciting banners. You don't have to pay anything for a banner and there's an Up for Graps bit where there're a lot of beautiful Bellatrix-banners in. Maybe you have a thing against banners, but it's just a sugestion and it never hurt anyone to try.

All of these things will help you get recognition for your beautiful work.

You're such an incredibly talented writer, you just need to make the stories so undeniably yours.

All these things are suggestions and maybe you think it's below you to get a banner and stuff in order to get people to read your stories, but that's reality and let's face it; we HAVE to judge the story on something and the graphics certainly play a role in that judgement unfortunately as well as the summary.

Anyways, good luck, take care.

Author's Response: Thanks so much for the advice. And I appreciate the lovely compliments!

The first thing I have to respond to is the bit about the title. I'm so uncreative when it comes to titles! I sit up at night thinking about what the heck I'm gonna name something, and when I finally come up with a title, it's a crappy one that's a product of complete desperation. It's a quirk of mine, albeit a really annoying one. I'll do my best to come up with another one.

The next thing, about the banner. I agree that I should get a banner made. I was going to for a while, and then I was dunked under the never-ceasing flow of homework, piano practicing, horse exercising/tuning up for show time, and writing a novel I've been working on for ages. No one probably cares what I do with my spare time, but I felt like a reason was needed for my awful procrastination about getting a banner made. Again, I promise that I will work on it!

You're the best kind of reviewer. I appreciate the advice/compliments a ton. You've brought my attention back to the important aspects of writing a story!
~Sayla
P.S. I'll check out the stories you recommended.


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Review #3, by jennainloonyland The Taste of Freedom

25th January 2008:
ewww, bellatrix is creepy
yuck!

real good story though!
i like it! well written.

Author's Response: Aww! Thanks! And yes, Bellatrix is very, very creepy. *shudder*
~Sayla


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Review #4, by Celestria Aramanth The Taste of Freedom

21st January 2008:
I love this! A bit O Bellatrix always make me smile! Well done 9/10 for you! :)

Author's Response: Bellatrix makes you smile.... Okay. If it works, I guess.
Thanks for the lovely review!
~Sayla


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Review #5, by Rosettastorm The Taste of Freedom

21st January 2008:
OOOHH I didn't see that this was a one-shot thingy... I thought it was like A Difficult Life Of A Boy Named Brenan Potter, and was diffrerent chapters. Ah. Okay. yes great story... Kinda creepy... but good. *pokes penname*

Author's Response: Awww, thanks Rosie.

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Review #6, by tm_14 The Taste of Freedom

20th January 2008:
I like this. I've always been intrigued by Bellatrix's character, and this fic gives a seemingly accurate picture of what goes on in her head. Well done.

Author's Response: Aw, thanks!
I think I've said this before, but Bellatrix is my favorite character. I'd always wanted to write something from her perspective, and this was the first I got around to it. I really enjoyed writing it.
~Sayla


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Review #7, by harrylilyjames The Taste of Freedom

19th January 2008:
oooh... Bellatrix has a twisted mind- in love with the DarkLord *shudders*.
You wrote all the emotions really well... i would not of thought of something like this.
But i feel you need a little bit more description.
but it was a really really nice read... hope you keep writing. =D

Author's Response: Yay! Another good review!
I agree with you about the need of more description. I usually love describing everything, but I was trying to simplify this fic down a bit. I wanted it to be short and sweet. I'll keep that in mind, though. *taps head*
Thanks for the review!
~Sayla


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Review #8, by Katana The Taste of Freedom

18th January 2008:
You've succeded in showing me Bellatrix. However sick and distorted her mind may be, you were able to capture her perfectly in first person! I really like how you show the love and loyalty she has for her master. The only thing you could have included that might have made this even better (in my humble opinion) might have been a moment of that anger that we saw in the fifth novel. But then again, maybe not. Great writing. --Dhar

Author's Response: Oooh!!! First review!!! Yaay!!! And a positive one, too!!!
Okay, I'll be serious now. Thank you so much for saying such nice things! Bellatrix is actually one of my favorite characters, and her love for Voldemort has always intrigued/disgusted me.
Also, I agree. Anger would have been good. I might add something to the story in the future.
Thanks for your review!
~Sayla


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