I love it! Normally, pick-up line stories can get oh-so-corny but yours didn't! It remained romantic and original the whole way through! Great job!Author's Response: aw, thank you. that's so great to hear :) Report Review
Most awesome Pick-Up line fic ever! I mean, I've seen some done, but usually they turn out slightly corny and not well written but not only was this unique and funny it was just brilliantly described...and fantastic!
Loved the jealous-friends
penAuthor's Response: thank you very much, i really appreciate that! Report Review
Hahahahaha. That fanfiction had me dying of laughter.
Which is kind of unfortunate since I'm babysitting, and it woke up my nephew. It was totally worth it though. :) Great pick up lines!Author's Response: oh thank you so much! i am so incredibly happy to hear it!!! Report Review
This was really amusing:) Any chance you'd write another one-shot or a short story to follow up on this one? I would most certainly read it! Just something to think about;)Author's Response: maybe... idk, doubtful... i like this piece and also kind of hate it, so it makes it rather difficult on me... Report Review
HAHAHAH!! OMG I LOVED IT!! that was halarious!!Author's Response: very glad to hear it, thank you Report Review
hahaa..another one of ur one-shots that i cant believe i didnt review because it was AWESOME!! i loved it!! all the pick up lines!! ahaha...
o and i super duper love this part...i dont noe y but i thnk its just sweet and funny!!
"Lily eyed it with confusion before she finally found the card in the card.
What would you say if I were to ask you out to dinner, tomorrow night at seven?
-The crazy psycho serial rapist
She laughed as she read the message quickly grabbing a quill and a piece of parchment.
The body is made up of 90 water and Iím thirsty.
I assume you can find my address on record, Potter. "
i think i love it because of how he signed the card!! ahhaa..Author's Response: ooo thank you, i was rather fond of this one so glad to see you were,too! Report Review
So, It was.enjoyable. Bland, and also they meet at HOGWARTS if u had to know.
I just didnt like it very much.
3/10Author's Response: once again, if yu're going to critique my knowledge of HP, then you may want to read the story notes, such as the fact that it is AU, as in ALTERNATE UNIVERSE!!! Report Review
oh this one is cute. very funny too. haha. i was;t expecting that. it si different and i like that. haha. I love corny pick up lines they make me laugh
10/10Author's Response: yay! i'm so hpapy to hear that, thank you. Report Review
aw!! theyre so cute.
nice :) 10/10Author's Response: lol, happy to hear it. Report Review
This is such a cute story!!! I really enjoyed it!!Author's Response: yay, so happy to see that Report Review
that was good!
it was so different and witty
loved it.Author's Response: lol, i deff had fun with this one, and i'm glad that you did, too Report Review
lol. i liked it. cheesey pick up lines are always the best. well done.
Dilys :)Author's Response: yeah, i have quite the affinity for them, too Report Review
Such a cute funny story. Loved it, thanks
xxxAuthor's Response: thank you, that's so kind of you! Report Review
This is so hysterical. I love the lines you used. They really add color to the story, even if they are so cheesy. I adore this, I do. Thanks for writing something cheery in a dark and dreary world, cosmopiltan411, thanks for brightening my day.Author's Response: lol, thank you, you have no idea how much it means to me to read that wonderful review!--truly brightens MY day/ Report Review
That was effing cute. 10/10Author's Response: so happy to hear that as it was my intention! Report Review
It's so funny because..
WHO IN EARTH DOESN'T ADORE PICK-UP-LINES!?!?!?Author's Response: lol, glad to hear it, thank you! Report Review
You've been happily added to my favourite authours list :)
The only issue I have is that you seemed to have picked up some stereotypical englishy words and over use them.
Like bloke, shag...pillock in another story, bloody berk in another... I've lived here all my life and have heard very few people say any of them. The day you use "Plonker" in a story will be the first day I cry at fanfiction.
No just kidding ;)
Anyway, especially when compared with "totally kicked ass" it sounds a bit odd. Oh, and "mom".
Right, I've read this review back...it sounds mean...Please don't think I'm being mean! I really do love the stories- why else would I keep reading them over?
Yeah I'm going to go now.Author's Response: lol, well as far as colloquial English is concerned that's all my beta, he likes to brit-ify my work a bit since i tend to sound very American, sorry if it bothers you, though, most readers like it, actually...
thank you so much for the honest review, i do appreciate it Report Review
haha, i have to try one of those pick up lines soon lol. great story.Author's Response: lol, thanks Report Review
hahahaha i like the many weird hilarious pick-up lines throughout the story it was very cute, i like how far off from JKR it was. not even in her timezone reallyAuthor's Response: a bit of AU can be fun lol Report Review
amazing story! nice departure from the traditional l/j story at hogwarts. right upto when he said his name, i was soo sure it was sirius, nd then he says "james potter" nd m lyke come again, what?. lolAuthor's Response: lol, glad to hear that it was a surprise, that's always a cool thign to hear!
i'm so glad you ewnjoyed it and thank you for reviewing! Report Review
Funny! I really liked it! It was sweet in an odd sort of way. A little different in sorts too. Keep writing! :7)Author's Response: lol, glad to hear it, thank you for revviewing! Report Review
That was cute...I love it. I love pick-up-lines they are so fun to read and those that you used are a few of my favorites.Author's Response: lol, oldies but goodies, right? Report Review
That's so sweet... I love it. :DAuthor's Response: glad to hear it Report Review
tht was amazing!! tht was seriously a great read!Author's Response: very glad to hear that! Report Review
that was really good. It was funny and really really cute!! Great job!!!Author's Response: very glad to hear it, thank you for reviewing! Report Review
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