Nice, thoroughly enjoyed it. Though i think it could do with a little more elaboration. That last scene kind of came out of nowhere. Still, it was good :)
And wow, James is such a bum! Haven't read such a scathing portrayal of him in... ages. Not that it's a bad thing, it was just different.
Anyway, good job. Hope to read more from you.Author's Response: Yeah, I really just need to sit down and thoroughly revamp this story, I didn't spend as much time as I could have on this one.
And yeah, I like experimenting with different extremes of personalities every now and then :) It keeps things interesting.
I suggest checking out some of my other stories (they're more thought-out and developed, I promise!) if you enjoyed it :)
Thanks for the review!
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(This applies to the new and old story) First what you did right; the beginning was very well done and you described everything well. The pacing and speed were perfect. It was a really good story... until you wrote the ending. What happened? All of a sudden, Sirius is all alone in the Shrieking Shack, basically tells Remus's secret, and all of a sudden they start kissing each other, even though they barely know each others names? I'm sorry, but the ending ruined it for me.Author's Response: Thanks for the review! It's a realyyy old story that I wrote like... wow it must have been around 6 years ago now :X
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ummm.james likes lily lol!did ya forget?Author's Response: No, I didn't forget. It's just a story for if James didn't like Lily.
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Nice story! It's always a bit refreshing to see a James who is not obsessed with Lily. This was great!Author's Response: Thank a bunch! I'm always glad to get feedback for my stories!
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this is bloody brilliant ..
keep going with it..
cant wait to read more
.Author's Response: Thanks a lot for the positive feedback!
And this story is actually a one-shot; but maybe if I get some time later I'll make it into a short story or something.
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Oh! this is so cute! I love it! only a couple things I would change though, the soccer shirt from 1st year and why sirius was in the shrieking shack by himself. But other than those, It was awesome!Author's Response: Thanks a ton for the review!! ^^ Report Review
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