aw cute chapter! plz update! lol right now would be good lol :)Author's Response: thank you will do soon Report Review
this is really good! i no how it feels to get very few reviews! but dnt worry this is really good! plz keep writting...lolAuthor's Response: thank you i will try and continue soon i have writers block lol Report Review
I really liked that chapter but there were a few mistakes in it,
First I think you meant to say Slytherin 'seeker' not Slytherin 'teacher'.
"Two weeks after the match was hell for Gryffindor all the hopes of the quidditch cup going to another house was going to another house was squashed." I don't think that sentence makes sense!
I think it would be a good idea to get a beta reader. Also you may want to make your chapter a bit longer. However I did like your story though, it will be interesting to read your take on Tonks's life. Keep up the good work! Report Review
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