That was a wonderful chapter once more.
I could really see a lot more a Lila's personality shining through here, and I can certainly see where the title 'reluctant hero' comes in.
I like how you integrated Draco into this story. I think you characterised him very well, it's nice to see him portrayed not as EVIL for once. Thanks for that.
Great imagery once more, overall fantasic chapter. I think your writing has somehow improved even between these two chapters. Don't hesitate to tell me when you update, just post it on the thread :)
RoseAuthor's Response: Thanks again. I actually have the third chapter in the validation queue, so you got lucky. I will definitely let you know when it is validated. Hope you continue to read. Report Review
Hey there. I've finally come to review at last!
Firstly I'd like to say, that was really good!
At the start it did seem a little disjointed and at points rushed, but I know how difficult (well for me at least) it is to summarise things that have happened when you really just want to get on with the action. ;)
I thought you had wonderful imagery, I could see the room and almost er...feel the atmosphere. It was great.
It's interesting that you've made her father a death eater, I've never read a fic like this, at least not where they know.
It's a great idea, and you could/will go far with this story.
I love the spell, I'm terrible at coming up with them, haha.
Awesome first chapter, Lila seems like she'll be a really interesting character.
RoseAuthor's Response: Thank you so much! Report Review
A very well written story. As a fellow writer, there are a few points that arent necessary to the writing that would've been nice but all in all, i enjoyed itAuthor's Response: Thank you. I hope you continue to read. Report Review
I think that this is a very good second chapter. It shows that not all Slytherins sided with the Dark Lord, & that not all of them were cruel. I do hope you keep this story going, & update soon =]Author's Response: Thank you. I have always thought that the Slytherins had a softer side. Report Review
Pretty good. It is all moving rather quickly. There are a few grammer errors but otherwise the story is really good! I cant wait to read the next chapter. Please post soon!Author's Response: Thank you. I know it is moving kind of quickly, I wanted to jump straight into the story without a long boring introduction kinda thing. It'll be moving more slowly from now on. I knew there would be errors, I can never get them all. You're in luck, the next chapter is in validation now. Report Review
omg. big cliffhanger...
i absolutely love the feel of this story and can definetly see it being an exciting one.Author's Response: Thank you! I hope you continue reading. Report Review
this is Nor from TWF. Guess this is the best way you can identify me.
Anyways this story is pretty cool. Infact awesome... Youre doing a gr8 job... keep it going ^_^Author's Response: Thanks Nor. Glad you came from TWF to read =] Definitely will keep going. Report Review
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