Good use of French phrases throughout. Nice work, eh?
PalomaAuthor's Response: Thanks. I tried to make my French as accurate as possible - I had quite a bit of help from online translators seeing as Spanish is the only foreign language available at my school, lol.
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Oh this was great! i love your wriing style. please update soon!
i'd appreciate it if you'd take a look at mine. thank you and keep writing!Author's Response: Thank you for the lovely review. :) I definitely will check out your work, dear. I can't wait to see what you have. :) Report Review
Shea.this was such an amazing write. One thing I love about Luna Lovegood is that eveything is tranquil, soothing. This story was heart breaking but I was still at peace by the end of the story. Amazing!Author's Response: awww, thank you so much. All those compliments mean A LOT coming from you. Thanks again. :) :) :)
p.s. GET YOUR BUTT WRITING!!! :) :) :) LOL, just thought I'd add a little friendly reminder! :) Report Review
Hi, I didn't know you write femmeslash fictions, too. ^_^ I was so glad when you posted this in my review thread! And of course I had to add this to my favourites... :)
Just one little correction before I start: It's actually “vous êtes une déesse, l'amour or mon amour”, because a noun in French can never stand alone by itself. It must have a determiner like "mon or le/la" = "my/the" in English. ^_^ But anyway, you couldn't know that. :)
I like the whole plot you have created here. Your description is adorable, I envy you! I think the only character I can't write about is Luna, because she's so complicated to describe, her actions, and her terminology are so strange and out of this world. I could never manage to write a story about her without making her OOC. I think you did a wonderful job to write this story in Luna's POV. She was really in-character! :)
Poor Neville, heart broken and disappointed that Luna fancied a girl. Selene is a wonderful OC, intelligent and just adorable. She could really be like Luna's soulmate. I thought when Luna waded into the water that she'd kill herself. Goodness, what was I thinking! *cough* I think that Neville would be most likely disappointed and hurt, but turning Luna down as friend, was a bit too much!
Anyway, great job!
-MitchAuthor's Response: oh, thank you thank you thank you so much for such a sweet review. I'm seriously blushing here. thank you! and thank you for adding this to your faves. it really means a lot to me that you liked this so much.
and thank you for the correction. I only take spanish (which I'm not even that good at) So I really appreciate it. :) Thanks for preventing me from looking like even more of an idiot than I am! LOL!
And I'm really glad that I depicted Luna with some accuracy. Of all the characters she's definitely the hardest to write, but she's also the most fun. I had an absolute BLAST writing her.
Oh I know. Poor Neville, I even felt bad for him when writing this, lol. :( And I wrote him turning her down as a friend because that left it open for a sequel where like ten years later I'd have them meet and become friends again. I don't really have any inspiration to write the sequel atm, so it may never get written. Just know that he didn't REALLY drop her as a friend. Well, I mean he did. But they kind of need each other's friendship in a way. LOL, it's really hard to explain in less than a thousand word one-shot!
Oh, no no no! She'd never kill herself when she's got Selene!!! lol, but I could see where you'd think that that's what she'd be trying to do. I was just trying to give her a Luna-ism. Seemed kind of a very Luna-ish thing to do when I was writing for her, when depressed, embrace nature and chillax in the water. lmao
Anyway, thank you thank you thank you. I don't know what else to say, honestly. This is probably one of the nicest reviews I've ever received. So a very sincere thank you is in order. I'm so grateful for this wonderful review and I really appreciate it.
Thank you. :)
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WOAH. I did NOT expect that when I clicked the link. Daring, very nice :)Author's Response: Oh, wow. thanks a lot. :) :) :) Report Review
Well, I have to say that wasn't something I expected at all! You've surprised me once again, Shea! I thought first of all it was a Luna-centric fic, then a Luna/Neville fic. well I was pretty far off the mark wasn't I?! I've never read femmeslash (just guys for some reason) but it was good! I liked how you convinced me that Luna did actually really like Selene and it wasn't just an angsty confused teenage crush.
I loved the way Neville started with a random question when it's normally Luna that does stuff like that.
Your descriptions were really beautiful - I particularly noticed the ones of the skies for some reason, they really stood out!
And I also like how Neville doesn't hate her for liking a girl, he's just hurt. He does say "A girl, Luna! You ditched everything I was offering you for a GIRL!!" which at first I thought I would have changed, but now I think he's saying that out of shock and because he's hurt, more so than as an insult to her sexuality (which I couldn't see him doing).
Anyway, not something I expected - but definitely a good read!Author's Response: wow, thanks. I'm really glad you liked it.
Yeah, I meant for him to say it more out of shock and anger than anything else. I can't imagine him being intentionally hurtful towards her.
Yeah, not alot of femmeslash out there... thought I'd try something unexpected for a change. And quite frankly, i think that this fic is actually my favorite. It was definitely the most fun to write.
Yeah... the sky descriptions. I think I might've actually gone way overboard with those. hehehe. I just wanted the image I had in my head to come to the reader as vividly as possible. So, the result was a bunch of otherwise meaningless descriptions of the sky. lol.
so anyway, thanks for reading and especially for reviewing.
-Shea Report Review
Oh wow! You finally made it! Congratulations!!
First, it's my lazy bottoms that never bother to read fanfic and leave out a review. But the time you pointed out this fiction, I think I should reconsider things... I certainly heart the descriptions you did here and there. I love descriptions, for me that's the whole point to make us feel like we're in the scene. It's my bliss reading thick paragraphs with plenteous of words.
The slash is about LUNA!! I love her character, you fleshed her out well, I really could read the lines of what the Luna Lovegood would say. You write in a beautiful, flowing, descriptive style. I absolutely love the plot of the story. Light, simple but that's just the bit of subtlety that I like. The reason this fic is great is that, it's a type of fic that could be read over and over again and it could fit in any mood the readers was into.
And maybe it's just me, but I'm having huge fondness reading paragraphs where Neville is talking. Or whatever that's involved with Neville. I like his character, very unique.
Overall, I absolutely love it. Your first attempt on slash is not that bad! Great stuff! Hope you'd write more stuff like this. -sniggers-
-FrankAuthor's Response: Wow, Frank. This is probably the one of if not the nicest review I've ever gotten. Thank you. Thank you for everything.
I'm smiling like and idiot right now, and I think my ego might have exploded. LOL!
It was fun to write, so I'm really glad that you enjoyed it. And I appreciate you taking the time to read and review. :) Thank you so much!!!
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