hey i saaw that you want a banner made, i had all mine done at a site called 'the dark arts' all the artists are really good there and it only takes a day or two for them to complete one.

 Report Review

This story was so cute I loved it!!!

Author's Response: thanks! I tried

 Report Review

it was a good read...
but honestly you need to do a brush up with your hp data book...there were quite a bit of grammar errors...or maybe a lot...but nothing that cant be fixed...and the spells.TT__TT

needs to be beta-ed...asap

Author's Response: I know... i kind of just wrote it on a whim and then was talked into posting it - sorry

 Report Review

I really liked this story, it was amazing :) Well written, funny, capturing, just the right amoutn of drama - it was brilliant! One thin gyou could improve on though is maybe how much James and Sofia had. I mean, I know in this story their family was very rich, but I personally thought all those shoes, clothes, items - I just thought that maybe it was a bit too over the top.

But apart from that, it was a very good book, and I am going to now read the sequel! :D

Author's Response: thanks for the suggestion... i wanted them to have all that. i wanted the characters to have that background... plus i love shoes!

 Report Review

This story was fantastic!

I will be happy to make you a banner, I admit my banner-making skills are not as fantastic as some I have seen on HPFF, but I would like to improve by making other people banners...

Let me know by emailing newportangel@yahoo.com.

dream_obsession

Author's Response: thanks I will drop you a line soon

 Report Review

in chapter 6 u forget that remus was attacked by fenir greyback ( u seem to forget some info like that) but other than that i am really enjoying it so far

Author's Response: I didn't forget I just didn't feel the need for that information in my story. But thank you for saying something. If you see anything else you think i should have added let me know

 Report Review

gosh.i totally loved it.read all 14 chapters in one go.awsome.!!! keep goin !!

Author's Response: thanks

 Report Review

i really liked this. you managed to cram in so much action and so much drama into quite a short story without making it seem rushed or badly done.

the characterisation of all the main characters was great and your writing was really sound - well done. looking forward to reading your sequel - how exciting!!

Author's Response: thanks--- i like writing shorter stories that still feel like they could have been massive epics

 Report Review

go james & lily! what a nasty ending there though.

Author's Response: some times life's hard

 Report Review

i like the tying in of sirius' motorbike to your story, a nice touch.

Author's Response: thanks

 Report Review

sirius' speech to james was really well written. great chapter!

Author's Response: gracias

 Report Review

oh the drama! i liked the excitement of the dance mixed in with the tension of james finding out about sirius & sofia. hopefully he will come around once he works out that they actually care about each other!

Author's Response: family always comes around

 Report Review

kyle has a lot of gall thinking that sofia would go back out with him - what a chump! fortunately, sirius & sofia are terribly sneaky about their relationship. wth all of james' teasing though, i can see him being furious when he finds out about them!!

Author's Response: true that

 Report Review

oh burn, sirius! what a nasty thing to say. i am, however, assuming that he's just saying it because he doesn't want to get hurt.

the howlers were rather amusing!

Author's Response: he was a bit of a bleeding git

 Report Review

ouch, poor sirius. sofia's words were a bit sharp. good job showing their emotions!

Author's Response: thanks

 Report Review

nicely written, and james is going to hit the roof when he finds out. . . .whenever that is!

Author's Response: thanks

 Report Review

i like that you tied in severus' feelings for lily in this chapter. this was, again, well written.

Author's Response: i like taking a bit from the books and add then to my story

 Report Review

crazy happenings in this chapter!

loved the way james got lily to finally agree to go out with him, and also the scene with sirius & sofia - they seem really sweet together. i also liked the way you write sofia being such friends with remus & peter and not just the other two.

and as for melody using dark magic over a boy - what a hag!

Author's Response: merci

 Report Review

great character details, you really get a feel of each of them. your dialogue is good and i would only say that perhaps you need to go over this and check your punctuation, especially the use of commas.

good chapter all in all!

Author's Response: i know i write so fast sometimes to get the chapters out i miss some of the editing

 Report Review

good job on the characterisation on sofia and lily especially. sofia seems like a really interesting character and the whole chapter was quite well written.

Author's Response: thanks

 Report Review

I thought that it was amazing.
At first I thought that Sofia was a bit like a Mary Sue, but then seeing her emotions and trying to find the bits and pieces of her being non-proportional it made more sense.
I cannot wait for your sequel. =)

Author's Response: should be up soon

 Report Review

i love it! but please please please update to the sequel! and by the way is she going to die in the end...you know, since during the books he doesn't have a wife and all.anyway i love it!
Cheers

Author's Response: I think i might be taking a different path then the books--- its fan fiction right?

 Report Review

I love this story. The characterisation was really good and the cliffhangers made it really difficult to stop reading 10/10

Author's Response: thats so sweet! thanks

 Report Review

awww what a sickly sweet ending ;)
loved it!

Author's Response: gracias

 Report Review

ohhh...poor sofia!! =S

Author's Response: merci

 Report Review