Ooooh a cliff-hanger.
Lol hey I'm DV!
I just read your story. Well the first chapter. Wait thats a bit obvious as I'm reviewing it. oh well.
Anyways I liked it and I thought it I would review coz its annoying when people read stories and don't review them.
Ok as for the story. I really liked the plot so far, it's intriguing and you don't give too much away so I want to read more. my only constructive criticism was that the writing (like your style) was better at the start because it was really descriptive and then at the end its just listing the conversation. if that made sense ??
It was a prologue, so I forgive you for it being short lol, but now you have to post more chapters !!!
Oh and also I clicked your story because I love your name. I see you are addicted to the Twilight Series as well. Sigh, Edward Cullen *dies*. :)
OKie dokie thats about it, send me a msg if you wanna talk more, I joined here about a month ago and I need a friend to talk to. God that sounded slightly pathetic.
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