I liked it. I'm gonna keep this review short. I think that having Gabe coming back is so good for the story because even though he disappeared for a chapter, we could see how much Melanie was different. There was worry to her and we like her like herself. So, I'm glad things are better now!

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So many twists! I think this chapter is probably the best so far because it has Mel as more vulnerable or trying new things, making her different. And I loved when Sirius saw her date and kind of bolted out of there. James is just so great as a brother figure of her own age. It's perfect. And I also thought the little twist at the end is a great ending for the chapter because it makes people want to come back for the next chapter.

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I totally have a little side of ignorance with Sirius's name on it because it's all his. He's so conceited and stupid, but I still love him as my favourite marauder. He's such a little arrogant teenage boy. That's why I love him and I loved how Mel and James slept in the same bed. It made me laugh because I always want to do that with my guy friends, but they think it's awkward. I don't think so, but I loved this chapter!

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I love how Melanie likes to take the initiative. She reminds me of how I acted with a boy I knew. And how Mel and Lily talk to each other is like my best friend and I talk. Her ex is like my brother too and it just made me smile when I was reading it. I think this is so well written and I think it's very nice how short the chapters are, but long enough for me not to be bored. Loved it!

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That was awesome! It's well written and is a great ending. The kidnapping was a little dramatic, but the plot needed something big to pull it off.

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AWSOME
SPECTACULIAR
that was such a cool story
i cant wait to read the next one
i loved the plot

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wow, that was AMAZING! i think the ending was perfect, and it gave me a real taste for the sequel!
you're such a great writer, it was great.
and also, you made it so realistic, because the perfect thing would be to have a happy ending, but it was just so great and realistic and FABULOUS.
oh and i love remus.
how cute was he!
pleas pleeease make more of him in the seuel?
can't wait for it!
10/10
x

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nonononononononoononoon! amazing chapter, as always. i love this story so much i want to streak.

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love the story so far but just thought i'd tell ya that Sirius had grey eyes not brown...sorry for being so picky but i love sirius.

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Awww, what a sweet ending. But it's weird - cos the pairings have Sirius/OC, doesn't it? Oh well, I don't mind. This is one of the best stories I've read in a while!

Thanks for writing it - and I'm gonna go find the sequel if it's up now :-)

-Chaps

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Ooh, Sirius is the hero in the shadows! What a darling.

Lucky ol' Melanie.

Really good chapter, I like where things are going so far!

-Chaps

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Awww, Regulus is a sweetie? That's a fabulous idea - and original too. Thank you for thinking of it.

I wonder what's happened to Gabriel?

-Chaps

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Aww, this is going to sound so pathetic... but I almost cried when I saw that Sirius was being a jerk-off about the beautiful comment. No guy has ever called me beautiful, except for this one guy, and I was stupid enough to let him get away... He called me 'Chanutiful' (my name's Chanelle) cos I called him Georgeous.

Sorry. I get carried away.

Anyway, great chapter! Loved it! Can't wait to read the next!

-Chaps

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Ahahahah, I absolutely LOVE this story so far, and I can't wait to read the rest!! You've got a lovely writing style too - very relatable and easy to read. I also love Tom Welling as Sirius. hot!
-Chaps

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WOW! Amazing Story! This is so good! I love it I really do. I have a list of favourite stories that I check to see if they have been updated and it looks like this story is about to be added to it! PLEASE update soon, it's great so far but I need more! Thanks and Good luck for keeping it going!

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Nice story, I'm off to read the sequel!

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Oh wow.
When I first began to read this I thought "Oh joy. Another story where the girl 'hates' Sirius and Sirius is in love with the girl and determined to get her to fall back."
But this one was much different and I'm looking forward to reading more.

If you have the time, I'm working on getting my one-shot validated if you have time to read it. Hopefully it will get valitated soon haha. I also have a different one-shot up already. Both are different writing styles, so I'd appriciate if you'd check them both out.

Thank you!

Author's Response: Thank you so much, and I'll take a look at your one shot

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What a nice story! I really like your writing style and, of course, the plot. Were you inspired by 10 Things I hate about you? Your story and the movie have some things in common which isn't a bad thing at all.
Can't wait to read a sequel, good luck with your new story!

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OMG! no no nononononononononononon NO! i hate the ending! no! how could you do that?!?!?! no! JK! oh well. i still love it to death! please please please please PLEASE! make a sequel son! please? until then, i will be checking back every week.or day...or hour.whichever.but OMG, i love your fanfic! please update it son!

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Lol! I love it! I cried a bit too, though.
so sad.and yet, so awesome and 10+!

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oh! I stil lurve it! Keep up the good work!

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still love it! on with chappie 3!

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OMG! I love it! (And its only the 1st chappie!)

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You are an amazing, talented writer. I laughed many times through out the story, the only thing was the missing brother thing?? It was confusing, didn't reveakl everything it needed too (not sure if that is for a sequel and I know the whole 5 chapters stink thing) But really good.

I HATE that I have to say I LOVED the ending!! I can't wait for the sequel, Sirius really screwed up and then the whole regulus, death eater thing. Touche. great ending. please write the sequel soon. A solid 10/10 (please tie up some of the loose ends in the sequel:)
-hpf14

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pleaz to a sequel
i will be waiting like a faithful
servant
not but still

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