Thanks so much for participating in the challenge, I only apologise for the delay in responding!
Firstly I want to say that I found this piece very amusing, I think you played the dynamic between Ron and Snape really well and to great effect.
I like the fact that you chose one simple scene and played the whole story out within that small space in time; it makes for strong and effective writing. So congratulations for that.
My only comment would be to be careful of your tensing. There were a couple of occasions where you slipped from past to present and back again – it’s not a huge thing but it can be a distraction for readers.
Again thank you for your enthusiasm and I am glad you had fun writing this :D
Note: Now in terms of the results of the challenge, I had intended to notify everyone today but unfortunately have just run into a little blip along the way one of the entrants. As such I cannot post the results just now (it will likely be a few more days in which case I shall PM you all) but I did feel it was time to post all of the reviews. The reason for the delay is that I wanted to post all reviews at the same time for fairness really… that and a pinch of procrastination.Author's Response: Thank you so much! It really means a lot to me! I'm glad you liked it.
I should really look out for my tensing, thanks for pointing that out to me.
I really liked this challenge and I'd like to participate in more of them!
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