This piece is really lovely. It is beautifully written, faultless.
I always thought that the one person Sirius would look for on the other side of the veil would be James. Your story shows that it could be Lily.
Congratulations on a wonderful piece of imagination. Report Review
*Sobbs.* SIrius is my favorite character. You have done beautifully with him. One negative comment: I think you should have had a little more about Harry in there. I understand that the ending should be focused on Lily, but after the 3rd paragraph Harry's gone. Sirius is a very important part of Harry's life, but I don't think you showed that.
Anyway, great job! (again) Report Review
So I don't think that Lily and Sirius ever had a relationship but this was a brilliantly scripted and well written story. The discription was spot on and on a whole this was very well executed and an enjoyable story. Report Review
omg! this is great! i cant think of anything you need to improve =P just keep up the good work. hannah xx
ps. love the piccy of patric dempsy in your banner :-D Report Review
I really enjoyed this story, Story, the relationship was well written and very enjoyableAuthor's Response: I'm glad you liked it and the relationship.
Thanks for reviewing. You've been quite helpful. Report Review
Aww, it was really sad but in a good way.
The twist at the end made me like it even more, and I really do like it.
xxAuthor's Response: Good, I'm glad you liked! Report Review
Aw! I don't really have much to say except that I really enjoyed this story. I originally clicked because the banner caught my eye, and I had never thought of Patrick Dempsey as a Sirius Black, but the longer I looked at the banner, the more I liked it. I wasn't sure what to expect with this story, but I loved the perspective and I absolutely adored the twist. Beautiful job!Author's Response: Well, of course the banner is amazing, it's Alohomora! I'm glad you did end up liking the story though! Report Review
Oh wow! Thats great- really moving!Author's Response: Good, thanks! Report Review
Sirius's love for Lily was an interesting idea but more about Sirius's thoughts on leaving Harry behind would have been good, IMHO.Author's Response: I'll keep that in mind if I ever edit this, thanks. Report Review
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