ooh! I like it! post another soon!
Adrienne Report Review
When r u gonna write more? This i really good so far if not a little to explanatory. Juts try to tone down how much explaining you do aboout the past and add more actual plot! Report Review
Just a few things to say....
A fight began between the two, as Harry\'s gaze shifted between the two.
-This sentence seems very akward. It would be better if you said something like \"A fight began between the two as Harry\'s eyes shifted between them as they exchanged quips.\"
I have a feeling the Voldie *will* escape and Harry will have to curse him back to the 40s....:D
Sexual tension between the trio. I like that, Ron saying \"Why don\'t you kiss me?\"
A new student. Whose last name happens to be Evans. I\'m not daft...:D
Over all, a good opening chapter. Report Review
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