I remember that this was one of the first fanfics I have read. Thank you for writing this amazing story!Author's Response: Thanks for the sweet message! Though this story was written long ago, I am still proud of it, and I am so glad that you enjoyed it :) Report Review
sometimes... i just really hate Elle. I mean she always makes a dramatic exit and she DOES think everything revolves around her. So right now, i only feel a tiny bit bad that she was captured. But on a high note, me saying all of this makes the story have my attention, so that's a good thing.Author's Response: She is quite the love/hate character, but as long as it has your attention, I don't mind :) Thanks for the review! Report Review
its interesting because I read this story a couple years ago and remember it nearly word for word...
now I come back and its the same story, but edited, and words moved around :) it makes it interesting
ie now its "they purchased some food before going back to the hotel"
then it was "since neither were hungry, they purchased some drinks before heading back to the hotel"
the story is still amazing of course :)Author's Response: Yup, you're not just imagining things, don't worry. I edited all my stories for a couple of weeks, fixing sentences that didn't sound right, and adding and deleting passages here and there. However, nothing major was changed, and it's still the same story you remember. Also, there is a short epilogue now as well.
Thank for reading and for leaving a review, I'm delighted that you still enjoy the story!! Report Review
i thought cho was in slytherinAuthor's Response: In the books, as well as in this fanfiction, she is in Ravenclaw. Report Review
Harry deserves some love, but while Harry is hooked on Elle, I'm not. Yet. I don't think she's that interesting. But your characterization of the main characters is spot on. I'll keep on reading to see how the ships develop.Author's Response: Thank you, I definitely hope you keep reading. I agree, her character is hard to like at the beginning. Report Review
Well, it's cool so far. I'm amazed you have the dedication to go back and revise your 5 year old work.Author's Response: Thank you for reading! I never planned on revising this story, but I felt like since I spent so much time writing it, that it deserved to be updated a little. I hope you continue reading! Report Review
OMG that ending was so good! You did a wonderful job at writing this story. I must have read this story a billion times! It's the perfect love story (along with The Notebook and Titanic) lol but rather than that you are an awesome writer. Don't stop writing keep at it! Love you sooo much LoveSpell!! :). -RSAuthor's Response: Thank you so much, your review made my day! I LOVE The Notebook and Titanic, though I doubt my story can ever compare :) I'm so glad you enjoyed the story, and I hope you keep reading as long as I keep writing! Report Review
Hey there!!! I cannot believe you added something to this story. I absolutely adored the epilogue, even though it was a wee bit cheesy... but that is what a good story needs sometimes. Hope you're well xxxAuthor's Response: Hi!! I know, I can't believe I added something to this story either, it's been so long. I went back and edited the rest as well, it just felt like something that had to be done. Thanks for reading and for your lovely review, I've missed reading them :) Hope you're good too! Report Review
This keeps getting better and better! I forgot to comment on the previous chapter, but here is the main thing i wanted to put across about the chapter before; Dumbledore was EXCELLENT! I thought that it would be hard to capture his sense of humour without going overboard, but you did a fabulous job! I also love how Elle and Harry and almost as bad as Draco v. Harry. Almost.
Here is my one piece of criticism though, and i already know that it is too late to change it, but it could be a future thought (maybe xD)? I do not like the idea of Elle's ''special gift''. I only say this as in every story i read, the main character is always more superior in some kind of way. Normally with a special gift and whatnot.
Other than that though; completely awesome! :D Report Review
WOW. After spending a few months looking for a substantial fanfiction from Harry Potter, i have at last found this site and your story! I was originally looking for something about Draco as i hate it when people try to write their characters as 'perfect'. And i am extremely impressed with this story after only reading the first chapter as it shows the little imperfections and actually seems real unlike some others i have read. Will keep reading this no matter what! ;) Report Review
So far, I'm really liking this story! I don't care much for Harry/OC's but I have to say I appreciate it more than Harry/Ginny. Didn't it seem kind of rushed? Plus, Ginny was totally under developed! Okay, now I'm rambling...
Oh! I also had a favorite line! "Maybe he would introduce himself, he thought, while exiting the room in a rush, but not before catching one last glimpse of himself in the mirror. Ugh. Maybe not." For some bizarre reason that struck me as hilarious and I laughed out loud. Poor teenage self esteem issues! :P
Anyway, I hope this story continues on to be pretty brill like this first chapter was!
x Aoife Report Review
omg i love this story! and that is so funny how you put in a part about what really happened!! I feel sad that this story is over i have been reading it since me and my bf started dating! I have other stories though... :( Report Review
Like I said earlier, your plot line is terrible, but you write well, sorry for the harshness and such. Report Review
OH LOOK, ANOTHER OC THAT WILL OBVIOUSLY BE MORE POWERFUL THAN HARRY AND SAVED THE DAY.
HOW ORIGINAL. Report Review
U ROCK AT WRITING!
skils... Report Review
ah, I loved it; I couldn't stop grinning the whole chapter. You could even say I was a cat :) Report Review
I thought the name thing was cool, but only because the same thing happened to me when I was younger; Rachael -Rae. Good Chapter! Report Review
Thank you Jesus! (or, I suppose LoveSpell would suffice) You deviated from the book. One thing that I absolutely HATE is an OC story that sticks to the plot and conversations of the book, the kind where the OC would just steal or modify the lines already in the book (I already read the books, geniuses, I'm reading an OC fanfiction because I want to read something DIFFERENT!). Not only are you writing your own story, your writing makes the readers anxious for the story to continue. As I'm writing this review, I am so eager to read the next chapter that I just might stop writing the review in mid sentence and just g Report Review
Can you spell HOPELESS? Cause I can't. It's not your writing, it's Harry's reaction, Desperate and Hopeless, only two words needed. Report Review
Great introduction of Elle and descriptions of, well, everything.
I love your writing, again, I honestly do. I know, it's only the third chapter I've read but it's ten pm already, cut me some slack. Luv ya! Report Review
By the time I started reading this story you've finished it. Let's just say: YOU ROCK! The chapter was not short, most stories I read and write are really short. (Attempt to write.) I love how you've started out. Report Review
I like long chapters Report Review
love this fic! I can't wait to see what happens next.
It's always nice to have a new element in the stories, instead of
doing the same thing over and over again. Having a us girl in
Hogwarts does switch things up a bit :)
I would say keep up the good work, but the story is complete already Report Review
I love this story. LOL I have that curse too. So far I have two stories on here (I'm Not That Girl and The Ruby Heart) I hope you can check them out. In fact when I'm done this review I'm about to post the next chapter on The Ruby Heart. Love the story!Author's Response: Thank you for the review! I will try my best to read your story when I have the time, I'm sure it's wonderful! Thanks again! Report Review
You have amazing development and description, and the plot line is well-created.
Very well done!Author's Response: Thank you so much! Report Review
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