I can't see why this hasn't gotten more attentionas a story. It's really lovely.

"The way she looked at him when they were young, before the world got in the way." This is beautifully written and it explores the mind of a character that I usually wouldn't do much thinking about, but who you've opened up a bit for me. That's one of the things I love about fanfiction in general. :) But anyway, back on topic...

I love the memory, and the entire idea of Snape seeing Lily's eyes as being a mirror into himself.

You should write another Snape oneshot. I'd love to read it. :) Ta ta!

Author's Response: Thank you so much for your feedback! Snape has always really fascinated me, because he has such depth.

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I thought that it was beautiful and really well written. The best bit was when Severus cursed Lily.
10/10
;D

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Excellent story! Love it!

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It was very interesting but oh, I think his reformation would have begun when Lily was threatened by Lord Voldemort not before that otherwise he would never have related the prophesy to him.

Author's Response: Hm...you do bring up a good point there...Thanks for reviewing!

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wow...lost for words here. that was beautiful. Your description, how you portrayed Snape's emotions, and the whole bit where Snape curses Lily...I could never have thought of that. I loved this line:" 'No, not cast,'he thought. '...for I am already there.' ".it was just so perfectly worded. And congratulations for winning the challenge, you really deserved it. 10/10

Author's Response: *_* Thanks so much for the review, I really appreciate it! Oh that was one of my favorite lines as well.

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This is a good story. It shows that he was ashamed of what he had done to everyone and especially what he had done to Lily. Overall, excellent

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Hey there, hun!! :)

What an excellent representation of both my challenge and the character of Severus Snape! You really did a lovely job with this piece. I liked it from the very beginning with your beautiful descriptions, but I think the memory towards the end really pulled things together.

My only suggestion is that you think about adding something at the end to wrap things up. You kind of leave your reader hanging just after the memory, and it seems as though you never consciously return the focus back to the man in the beginning (Snape). Otherwise, this was a really lovely piece!

Thanks so much for entering it into my challenge!!

xoxo

Author's Response: Thanks so much for reviewing! I had such a hard time with this piece, mainly because Snape is a new character for me to write. But I guess it isn't called a challenge for nothing!

Oh I'm glad you like the descriptions, I've been trying to use more detail in my work.

Hm...I think you are right! I'll have to go back and see how I could bring the focus back to Snape.

Thanks again! And thanks for issueing such an interesting challenge!

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Hey ChellDaBelle1030 aka LadyBelle from the forums here with your review. Wow! Your descriptions were great no awesome and this fic made me feel so much sympathy for Sev its unbeleievable. Excellent portrayal of Severus as well. All in all, a job well done, 9/10 :)

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