Beautifully written! I love how you can write from not only a males perspective, but also a females. A lot of writers do not posses this skill and it causes the depletion of the image that the story creates. If i were to give any feedback i would say go deeper into the characters emotions and expressions. I would love to FEEL how Rose feels when she realizes she is lucky. Or more exponentially, how Scorpius feels only being able to follow his father; would he feel contained or pressured or what??? This will set the tone of your story and make the reader more attached to the characters.

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oh
seriously, you should make a sequel! this was a good story, a bit scary considering if Scorpius is in fact the killer. A bit tragic but with a refreshing twist. Dont think ive read another story that was like this one ;)
great cliffhanger if i may say so hehe

But what happened to Rose? :o

keep up the good work, im looking forward to reading more of your stories :)
~ M

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I think this was enjoyable, though short. I really like the element of surprise. I had no idea it was going to be going in this direction. Maybe you could slightly allude to what he had done in the section where he's in the manor? Even without that, I still like it!

Author's Response: I wasn't quite sure the way it would go when I made this really. I just had a sort of main idea and built around it. It turned out to be really short so I made a sequel, called Uncertainty to an Extreme. There are going to be flashbacks eventually in the sequel! I'm glad you liked the story and thanks so much for the review!

Seth

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I like how you set this up. It's an interesting look as to what happened to everyone after Deathly Hallows. I really like how the POV switches to include multiple situations and everything. However, this seems a bit short and not fully developed plot-wise for a one-shot.

Author's Response: Yeah, this story is rather short for a one-shot. The thing is, it was my first try at a one-shot, you know how you just wanna see how you do with something you've never tried before?

So, I know the plot isn't fully developed but I've created a sequel that will hopefully answer the questions about the story in general.

Thanks for the review!
Seth

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There is a lot of things left unanswered in this. That isnt a bad thing, personally i am a huge fan of cliff-hangers, so good job

Author's Response: Thanx a lot for the review!!! I usually don't write short fics like this so it was kinda hard for me to make it all fit. Glad you enjoyed it.

Seth

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