kay constructive criticism here:
i don't like the way lily can be demanding sometimes like when she didnt wait for an explanation, it works a bit but there's something weird about it
didn't think i'd say this of seeing another side to LJ but it is quite good, the best bit being the end, that sort of heartbreaking scary.Author's Response: i can see where you're coming from, this is a very old story of mien, so it's definitely flawed... thnak you for the critique.
Oh I like it!
You could do one that starts like this...but she's pregnant!!!
Dun dun dun!!!
There could be so many different endings...like...he sees her when she's pregnant and is like "oh crap, what have I done"
Or...she has the baby and James sees her walking around with it...
Hmm...maybe I should write one...Author's Response: lol, glad to hear that the fic turned out to be so inspiring :blush: thank you! Report Review
aww! this is so sad!Author's Response: yeah, i guess it is... Report Review
That was the most depressing thing I have ever read...in the most amazing way! :)
That was really really wonderful...I have no criticism for you.
AWESOME job!Author's Response: lol, that's some oxymoron there... i like it Report Review
Absolutely loved it!Author's Response: v. glad to hear it
thank you for reviewing Report Review
So welled up at the end.
Such a beautiful story, and so well handled. Life isn't always a fairytale, and you showed that so well. Loved it.Author's Response: exacty my point! thank you Report Review
that was extremely depressing, but very well written! i've been readin like all your stories lately, and i love them! your such a good writer!Author's Response: well i'm sorry that ti was so depressing, but very glad to hear that you thought it was well written lol Report Review
That was good but perhaps u could write more i mean u cant really leave it like that can u? i mean we all know they end up together and it was written very well... but i think a bit more would make ur readers alot more happpy! great story!Author's Response: well... they dont actually end up together. this story is about love lost adn how certain thigns can come betweeen even two people that are soul mates ever being togather Report Review
oh! how sad! i spent the entire thing thinking they would end up back together in the end, and then instead...well... this was really depressing. that might actually be an understatement. its that its already a sad story, but then the fact that theyre lily and james makes it even worse, because theyre normally such a sweet ship. and i suppose more importantly, we normally know that theyll end up together in the end. and in this, they never did! :'(
thank you for writing it though. just because it made me sad, and for that reason i will probably never return to read it, doesnt make it a bad story. just a really sad one, and the world is depressing enough as it is to get depressed by fiction. i suppose that makes this story good though, that it actually makes me sad, instead of just being vaguely nice, like a lot of fics.
anyway! thanks for writing this! ;)Author's Response: yeah i know it's really sad, idk what even led to it really, as im not sually one for the sa fics (reading them or writing them- unless they have a super happy ending). but i'm so glad that you liked it to some extent regardless, thank you for the super sweet review! Report Review
That was kind of strange. Lily and James have to get together sometime, don't they? I think you should write a sequel explaining, like, what happens.Author's Response: i may consider a sequal but as of now, no they dont end up together
i just... i wrote this fic as a play ont eh whole idea of james' confusion, one which is very common among fics, and every time u see lily forgive him, so i was wondering: what happens if she moves on? if being one another's true loves isnt enough Report Review
Aw! That was so sad! But really well done! Good job!
TessAuthor's Response: lol, very glad to hear it, thank u soo much for reviewing! Report Review
um this is great and all. but theres no harry. so. yeahhh. this isnt working out very well for me...Author's Response: lol, well in my defense it IS an AU fic, but the main reason for it was b/c i just wanted to try a fic in which they didnt end up together. u see so many fics where jjames screws up and she just forgives him, i wanted to try and see what'd happen if she didnt-- if she moved on w/o him Report Review
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