please update soon! i Author's Response: This story is on hold, so I'm sorry: I don't know when I'll update. :( Report Review
IT IS SO INSANELY GOOD
I WANT SIRIUS
I LOVE SIRIUS
SIRIUS IS GOD.
xAuthor's Response: Thank you for this lovely review! :D You've made me insanely happy.. ;) This story is on hiatus, so unfortunately I don't know when I'll update.. :( I am thrilled that you like it, though. And yes, Sirius is quite God-like, isn't he? :P Report Review
great chapter. It does show James arrogance and his loyalty.Author's Response: I'm really happy that you think so. :) Report Review
This is a cute story, I'm enjoying it a lot. Where did you get the fantastic banner?Author's Response: Thanks! :) I got the amazing banner at the-dark-arts. Silv3r_ic3 made it. Report Review
I liked it a lot. And I like her attempting to learn Quidditch, and her whole family thing is neat.Author's Response: Thank you! :) I'm really glad you think that it wasn't too corny. Report Review
hurry up and update!!Author's Response: I've been really busy with school lately, so I'm not sure when I'll update. I'll try to make it fast, though. Report Review
keep this up its good!Author's Response: Thank you! :) Report Review
i think you should create a new record and do an even FASTER update. likee tomorrow? :D hehe.
i really like this story. it's really funny and a good plot.
pleasse update soon!
and i don't like how mean Sirius is being. :-/
3297982357 outta 10 :DDAuthor's Response: Thank you so, so much! :D I'm really thrilled you like it. Lol, I'm not sure if I'll manage to have it up by tomorrow, but I will try to make it soon. You see, I've decided to really work on this story and update much faster than what I've previously done.. :) Is Sirius being mean? I'll try to write him nicer... lol. Again, thank you! :D Report Review
of course u deserve a revies, silly! anyway, update soon and i love the ideas of this sotry! keep up the amazing work!
i rate this chapter a 10/10!!Author's Response: Wow, thank you SO much! :D It really means a lot to me. Report Review
I liked when James thought Davina fancied him, and she
let it slip that she fancies Sirius.
I also liked the bit at the end with her
finding out that James didn't tell Sirius.Author's Response: I'm glad you think so! :D Yeah, those parts was quite fun to write. Oh, and contrats on the 40th review! :) Report Review
I really liked the conversation
that the Lily, Alice, and Davina
were having in the library.
And how it ended.Author's Response: Thank you so much! :D I'm glad you liked their conversation - it was very fun to write. Report Review
I really love yoru story so far.. ;D ;) it's funny, hilarious even, interesting and easy to read. ^_^
how are you going to make everyone understand that she comes from a famous Quidditch family? (: will they send her something big, like, dunno, a suprise present, so everyone would notice? /maybe it could be her birthday soon, then her family would surely send her presents and it would be rather easy for everyone and especially Sirius to find out./
or will she simply tell him? somehow I don't think that's a very good idea, it might seem like she's simply bragging. :)
oh well, enough with my ramblings.
I hope you'll update soon! ;)
10/10Author's Response: Thank you so much for this great review! :D I'm so, so glad that you like it. It was kind of my intention to make it an easy read, as I don't normally write humour stories... It's great that you think it works ;) I hadn't really thought that much about how she was going to tell Sirius about her family, but thanks to you, sapnjotaaja, I'll make a big deal out of it. :P Hehe. Anyway, it won't be in the next chapter, but hopefully soon. I'm actually updating right away (the fastest update in my fanfiction career), and though it doesn't include much Sirius, I hope you'll enjoy it. Again, thank you for the rating and review! :D Report Review
i love it!
update faster please!!!Author's Response: Great! :D I've actually written 1400 words of the sixth chapter already... I think it'll be up pretty soon. It will be rather long, though! :D I hope... Report Review
It was fabulous.
I like Devina's denile, and
Linda's dare.Author's Response: Aw, thank you! :) I'm so glad you like it. Report Review
It's a really great story.
I really all three girls already.Author's Response: Thank you!! :D Report Review
Awesome, and hilarious. Personally I can't wait till anothe update!Author's Response: Aw, thanks!! :) I'll try to update soon. Hopefully next week... We'll see. Report Review
It is great so far! I hope you update soon!Author's Response: Thanks! :D The next chapter is on its way - I'm so proud of myself for almost having another chapter ready when posting... :P Report Review
you havnet updated yet! this isnt fair to us readerss! update soon PLEASE.Author's Response: I am sorry!! I really will try to update soon. It's just that I have lots of other things on my mind as well. The fifth chapter is almost done, though. Report Review
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Great job. I found a couple mistakes at the top. For example, I'm guessing that when you wrote 'loop-sided' you meant 'lop-sided'. And another was when you said ...'he'd barely said 'to' words to her. It should be 'two'.
Overall, great story so far. Keep up the great writing. 9/10Author's Response: Yeah, I did mean lop-sided. Oh, and I'll change the two/to thing (tommorow :P I'm so tired right now).
Thank you so much for all of your reviews! it means a lot to me that you take the time to do is. It helps me become a much better writer. :D Report Review
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Great job on the flow of this chapter. The beginning had a few spelling mistakes. You spelled thing like 'think'... I'm pretty sure you meant thing? And you spelled though like 'trough' again. But other than that, this chapter was well written.
I liked how Davina feigned hurt and got Sirius concerned about her without even trying to. Great job and now I'm off to the next chapter...Author's Response: Thanks! :) I'll fix the spelling mistakes... tomorrow, I think. It means a lot to me that you're pointing them out. :) Report Review
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Another great job on this chapter. I only found one spelling mistake; you spelled though like 'trough' at the top a couple times and I noticed it in the first chapter as well. And I found one typo where you spelled else like 'lese' when the girls were walking back from the trophy room.
But I really liked this chapter. I especially liked the interaction between Davina and the Marauders before her two friends work up. Also, I liked when she started going through the alphabet and completely forgot about the Marauders and everything around her while trying to focus on what came after 'g'. That was funny. I immediately though, blonde. But, just be sure not to show too many blonde moments because than it'll get old and it might start to offend readers that are blonde. I'm blonde and I'll tell you that I don't get offended by that stuff because it's all funny until it starts getting overused in a story.
Also, another great job on descriptions. I liked how you described Sirius' eyes. And the flow is still running along smoothly. Well, I'm off to the next chapter...Author's Response: Thanks for pointing out the mistakes! I'll fix them as soon as I get the time.. :)
I'm so happy you liked the chapter. Ah, Davina may be blonde, but she do have her smarter moments. Sirius's presense is just messing with her head a bit.. :P Don't worry, I have many blonde friends, and I don't think they would like me very much if I make too many blonde-jokes.
Thank you! :D Sirius's eyes have always been one of my favourite things to write about xP Sad, I know. Report Review
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Great job on this first chapter. I thought you did a great job with the description of each girl. I like how they're all in different houses. It shows House diversity. Overall, the chapter flowed nicely together. I'm off to review the next chapter.Author's Response: Thank you so much for reviewing! :D I like the fact that they're in different houses as well... :) Oh, and I'm glad you liked the flow! Thank you. :) Report Review
Nice! Though, there was one spelling error (that I saw, anyway):
"He had barely said to words to her before,"
"He had barely said TWO words to her before,"
yeah... and I think you spelled "lop-sided" wrong...Author's Response: Thank you for all your reviews! :D Oh, and you have no idea how grateful I am - thank you so, so much for pointing out the mistakes. :) (The to/two-thing was just a typo, though... ;)) Report Review
I love that!
Not that she fancied him, of course.
:)Author's Response: :) I kind of liked that as well. I'm glad you did too! :D Report Review
Oh, yay! the dare came! :DAuthor's Response: I know! :D Report Review
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