you have asked for a review on my review thread.
So here I am.
First of all I'd like to say I liked the athmosphere of your story.
It's a depiction of an emotion as the title says.
You did it well.
For a story I think it's too short and to tell you the truth I miss some plot or something besides the emotion.
But if you simply wanted to make us feel bittersweet that's okay as well.
wingsAuthor's Response: Thanks for your review. I was going for pure emotional atmosphere, and apparently I succeeded. Report Review
Lovely story!Author's Response: Thank You! Report Review
Nice piece !...
Poor severus…… I wish he could cheer up somehow…
Aww.. he’s so sad.
But great story !
and yea, u could do with the checking grammar stuff etc.
but i liked it !
Author's Response: About the grammar, yeah I know. Thanks for pointing it out though. I love it when people do that.
Thanks for enjoying my story. I've always seen Severus as a sad character, but I think he's cheered up now. Report Review
This was very pretty. There were quite a few errors including typos, grammar, and usage. You might want to go back, line by line, and see what you can find. Good idea though. Good song choice.Author's Response: Thank you soooo much for your compliments and for pointing out my boo-boos LoL! :D Report Review
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