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Review #1, by magnolia_magic Believe It Or Not

14th July 2013:
Wow, this was so powerful! I ususally shy away from stories about the aftermath of the war, because they just break my heart. But I'm glad I read this one.

I think you did a good job of touching on a lot of things grieving families would grapple with. Arthur is clearly struggling with his sense of duty as a father, and it's truly saddening to see him turn anger on himself in this situation. Because we all know there's nothing he could have done, but it's still hard for him to accept that.

The one thing that struck me as surprising was when he said, "I will love all my children unconditionally. Even Percy" as if there was some question in his mind about that. I've never gotten the indication that Arthur felt less love for Percy in the books, despite his mistakes. I really don't think it would even cross his mind to love Percy less than his other children. But having said that, I'm glad you chose to tackle these tough issues, as they lend a lot of emotion to Arthur's narration.

Good job with this! I'm so glad I read it :)

--Maggie

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Review #2, by Andra Apple Far Away

21st May 2008:
It's me again, and again I just wanted to say how much this affects me. You get the feelings down perfectly. I wish I had more memories of my dead brother Jared. And even in the days I feel down in the dumps, I put a smile on and pertend everything is just the way it used to be. But my family will never be complete again. Thank you, again.

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Review #3, by Andra Apple Believe It Or Not

21st May 2008:
It made me feel like I was going to cry it was so good. Seven years ago, one of my older brothers died and this feels just like that. I was only 6 at the time. Thank you for a wonderful story. Love is how we got through our sadness. You are a great author, keep writing!

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Review #4, by Ginny_Hermione Far Away

7th December 2007:
Oh, I did like it!! I didn't think of the song being used this way, but I loved it! I really liked the Cherrie Owls and the Lucky Charms. Lol. I liked how you took something as simple as cereal and turned it into a whole thing about how Ginny used to eat them with Fred. It was so sweet.

I really liked this story. It was so sad, yet so sweet at the same time. Amazing job! Thanks for doing my challenge!
Xx-Ginny-xX

Author's Response: Yeah, I can picture this song being used more for a romance where the other has left someone but I thought it was okay to use in this sense. Thanks so much! :) I love challenges, if you ever have another one I probably will do it.
Moe


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Review #5, by Bella_Portia Believe It Or Not

17th October 2007:
I thought this was lovely. The framework, consisting of the thoughts of this particular man as he contemplated the implications of loss, made a nice interplay with the lyrics. Your main character choice was great and, I suspect, not that common. I also enjoyed your wit -- Cheery Owls, indeed.
I repeat myself on this, but I think song fic is really hard. I seldom see it done all that well. You did it well.

Author's Response: Thank you so much! Cheery Owls took me a little thinking but I found it a cute play on our Muggle world - and a little controversy to the mood.
:) Thanks! Hope you continue reading the rest when I get around writing/posting them.


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Review #6, by ForgottenMarauder Believe It Or Not

17th October 2007:
Let me tell you, this was a very powerful chapter. The point of view of a father speaking/thinking about his loss of a son, in my opinion, is a very hard point of view to write from. Believe me, I've tried. I loved how you made it a point to stick in the bit about Arthur being old fashioned, which is precisely how I think of him. Exceptional Job. I can't wait for more!

Author's Response: :) Thank you so much! It was hard to write, yeah, your right. Father's are so complex. Thanks a lot, more will be coming soon! [especially with such a short queue line...but I do have other stories.]

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Review #7, by GriffinClaw Believe It Or Not

17th October 2007:
I love the concept of this story. The song worked pretty well, but the story seemed to be missing something. I wish I could put my finger on it, it just seemed sort of jumpy. I really liked it and can't wait to read more, but it just seemed a bit fast paced or something. A bit more detail might help it flow better. Mr Weasley questioning faith throughout the story was done really well. I love how he reached his conclusion and the ending was great. Having Ginny walk in not only proves Mr Weasley's point, but sets up perfectly for the next chapter. Really good job, I can't wait for the next chapter.

Author's Response: Thanks a lot for the review!
Jumpy, yes, I know, I cringed as I was editing it, I noticed that right away. It is jumpy but you have to remember that a person's thoughts can be all over the place and come out of nowhere. That's what I'll use as my defence. I will try to give the rest of the chapters more flow through it though.
Detail I can work on, I can add a lot of details to some stories and less to others, I'll work on it more, you'll hopefully see it in Ginny's chapter.
Thanks a lot :)


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