i can wait for the next chapter please Report Review
I really like the story so far, I hope you don't give up on it :) Report Review
Hey! I love this =D It sounds good! Keep writing, k? I'll check back, I'm serious.Author's Response: Don't worry, this story isnt over! Report Review
Will you plz plz plz plz plz plz plz plz plz plz plz plz plz plz plz plz update?Author's Response: Thanks for the review, I will be updating soon! Report Review
I noticed this little typo thing:
her truck and owl
it should be trunk, but that was the only thing I noticed.
I like how you had both of their POVs in this chapter, as it's still like the introduction, but I think the next chapter would be interesting to read in Victoires POV. I like the little relationship they have going and the hesitant flirtiness, it's very cute. I just hope they can progress from that and turn it into something!
Great chapter it was very cute!Author's Response: Thanks for pointing out the typo, I'll have that fixed! Thanks for the review, I will update soon! Report Review
Hello! You requested a review of me forever ago, but I said I would do it so I'm here and I'm doing it! lol.
I like this story so far, it's a good start and introduction to build a story on. I like how you intorduced all the character's but didn't go into heaps of details about them, you know, let people build their own image and opinions of them over time, and over the course of your writing.
I like your characterisation of Teddy too, I had never thought that he would act like that, I always thought he would be loud, don't know quite why, but I did. But you make it work, and I think it works well. It's endearing to see him all shy and awkward, just don't let him fall into the cliche trap of becoming popular and confident all of a sudden.
I also love Will, I think that he will turn out to be one of my favourite characters and I love that he is Victoires twin, very nice twist.
Oh, I did notice this typo, and thought I would just point it out to you:
He had been in love with her since the end of his fifth ear at Hogwarts
It should be *year.
Other than that, I didn't spot anything, It was a great start so I'm going to read the next chapter!Author's Response: Thanks, I love your long review! I'm glad you like Teddy and don;t worry, I'm not planning on making him popular. Thanks also for finding the typo, I'll have that fixed. Report Review
This really has a lot of promise. Can't wait for more.Author's Response: Thanks, more is coming! Report Review
Awsome! Update soon!!Author's Response: Thanks, Ill update soon! Report Review
oh please tell me there will be more, i shall be the up most upset if there is not. i thought it was quite lovely. vrey fun and fresh.
i really do hope you go on, it was beautifully written.
x.Author's Response: Thanks for the review, and of course there will be more, never fear! Report Review
wauw amazing story! write more please! its great!Author's Response: Thanks for the review! Report Review
WOW! Your story is amazing! I love it and I can not wait to read more!
with love,Author's Response: Thanks for the review and the high rating. Report Review
hmm...I thought that it was really cute and extremely well written. The length was perfect as well as the dialouge. Great...no, fantastic job.Author's Response: Thanks for the sweet review! Report Review
I really like the chemistry between Teddy and Victorie. It's really good and sets the mood. I like the entire Weasley meeting. It was cute. haha. Overall I liked it. It could have done with a smidge more detail though, that's my only critism.
Great job. Merry Christmas.Author's Response: Thanks for the review. I will think about adding more detail to new chapters. Report Review
I like this story. Keep up the great work on it.Author's Response: Thanks, I will! Report Review
this is a cute chapter can't wait to read the next 10/10Author's Response: Thanks for the review! Report Review
Okay, this story is going into my faves. Yeah. It's really that good. So far.Author's Response: Thanks for the review! Report Review
Great story so far! No problem with the length, but there were just a few spelling mistakes. Great, anyways!Author's Response: Thanks for the review! Report Review
update sooner this time please?Author's Response: Thanks for the review. I will be updating sooner next time! :) Report Review
be careful, you will accidentally say 'Fleur' instead of 'Victoire' and it can get confusingAuthor's Response: ooops! I'll fix that! Thanks for the review! Report Review
I like how this chapter has let us see more of how they behave naturally around one another - well done, and I look forward to the next chapter! :)Author's Response: Thanks for the review! I'm glad liked the way I wrote them! Report Review
I really like this story so far its great Lol
Keep up the brill workAuthor's Response: Thanks for the review! Report Review
Yes, here i am! I really like this story a lot. I put on my favorites a bit ago,and just got around to read it. Good job. I think it's really cute how they're both in love with each other, yet don't do anything about it. Can't wait to see where this story goes, update soon please!!!Author's Response: Thanks for the review, I will update soon! Report Review
LOVE THE STORY!UPDATE!Author's Response: I will soon! Thanks for the review! Report Review
Lovely; That was very good! I love how you used so much detail in describing the Head Boy/Girl rooms. I can picture it all in my head. Please update SOOON, It was bloody brillant! Lol,Author's Response: Thanks for the review! I'm glad you liked it! Report Review
UPDATE R.S.P 100-100. ~Jackie~Author's Response: Thanks for the review! Report Review
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