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Review #1, by canyoucanoe2 Chapter Three: A Joining of Worlds

19th April 2015:
This is my favorite chapter yet! Love the Hannah Abbott twist! Good story!

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Review #2, by canyoucanoe2 Chapter Two: A Thoroughly Magical Place

19th April 2015:
You do a good job of introducing dialogue in this chapter! I was very surprised at Dudley's growth as a character, and am glad you included the explanation of his transformation.

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Review #3, by canyoucanoe2 The Beginning

19th April 2015:
It is so interesting that you delve this deeply into Dudley's fate! I had always sort of considered him a peripheral character, but am intrigued by the "fateful" back story you have given him :)

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Review #4, by rojely Epilogue: A New Professor at Hogwarts

6th August 2012:
just read it today 8/6/2012 enjoyed it added you to favorite list write more stories!!!

Author's Response: Glad you liked it!

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Review #5, by magicmuggle01 Epilogue: A New Professor at Hogwarts

9th September 2011:
In this review I'd like to thank you for sharing a wonderful story with the world. And what a wonderful ending. I think you should expand on this and do a sequel. Full marks once again and thanks again.

Author's Response: I may have to think about that sequel. Thanks so much for the kind reviews! I really appreciate you taking your time to share your thoughts with me!

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Review #6, by magicmuggle01 The Final Battle and Its Aftermath

9th September 2011:
Fantastic and to coin a favourite phrase of Ron's, BLOODY BRILLIANT. 100/100 and to move to the epilogue.

Author's Response: Haha, thanks!

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Review #7, by magicmuggle01 Chapter 10: Getting Adjusted

9th September 2011:
I'm just wondering that I think Harry will have a near heart attack when he finds out about all this. 10/10.

Author's Response: Hahah you might be right.

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Review #8, by magicmuggle01 Chapter 9: Finding the Ax of Coifi

9th September 2011:
Wow now things will really start to heat up. Another great, great chapter. And 10/10.

Author's Response: Thank you so much for all the great reviews!

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Review #9, by magicmuggle01 Chapter Eight: A New Hunter for the Ax of Coifi

9th September 2011:
I wonder how Vernon will react if he could suddenly do magic? Another brilliant chapter and 10/10.

Author's Response: I can see the look on his face when he finds out, and it still makes me smile...

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Review #10, by magicmuggle01 Chapter 7: Portal to the Past

9th September 2011:
What can I say but another brilliant chapter. Pity about Langford I rather liked him. 10/10.

Author's Response: Langford was my favorite part of the entire story. He is named for a great old man I visited for years in a nursing home.

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Review #11, by magicmuggle01 Chapter 6: Realizations and Progress

9th September 2011:
I knew there was something about Dudley. The fact that he could suddenly read the book shows he's special. Another excellent chapter and 10/10.

Author's Response: very glad you enjoyed it!

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Review #12, by magicmuggle01 Chapter Five: Dinner and an Unexpected Development

9th September 2011:
Love is in the air I think. And also I have a funny feeling that there is something special about the church. Another great chapter and 10/10.

Author's Response: Thanks for the kind review! I am excited to see what you think of the whole story!

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Review #13, by magicmuggle01 Chapter Four: New Friends and a Quest

9th September 2011:
I have a funny feeling that Dudley maybe the next worthy possesser of the Ax. Another 10/10.

Author's Response: No comment on that... Read on... :)

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Review #14, by magicmuggle01 Chapter Three: A Joining of Worlds

9th September 2011:
I bet that'll surprise Hanna? I like this new look Dudley that you've created. A great chapter and another 10/10.

Author's Response: Thank you for the kind comments!

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Review #15, by magicmuggle01 Chapter Two: A Thoroughly Magical Place

9th September 2011:
Excellent, sheer excellence. This is truly a fantastic chapter. Did you do any research into that history or dd you make it up? Another 10/10 and I must move on.

Author's Response: Thanks again. I did a little of the research. I took an incident from history (and a real place) that I was learning about in college (I am a history major), and incorporated it into my story.

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Review #16, by magicmuggle01 The Beginning

9th September 2011:
A nice start to your story. I loved the bit at the end with the ghosts playing headless hockey. 10/10 and to move on.

Author's Response: Thank you for reviewing!

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Review #17, by tomsgirl Chapter Two: A Thoroughly Magical Place

7th June 2011:
Wow, this was a great chapter. Honestly I don't recall if JKR has written anything other then the 7 books, especially a complete Hogwarts a History. However, they story of why Goodmanham is so important was wonderfly constructed. I'm excited to see Dudley's character changing, and am intrigued to see where it goes!

Author's Response: Thanks again! I'm thrilled that you're a fan. Goodmanham is a real place, and a lot of the story is technically based on fact. The destruction of the temple part, at least, was real, and the history I quoted I learned in a Medieval England to 1215 course. Thanks for taking the time to read and especially to comment!

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Review #18, by tomsgirl The Beginning

7th June 2011:
I'm excited to keep reading. It's nice to finally put an ending to the Dursely's story :)

Author's Response: Well thank you! I'm glad you seem to like it so far!

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Review #19, by Kas Epilogue: A New Professor at Hogwarts

5th June 2011:
I had just read the chapter and thought the same thing - what happened to him, this was AMAZING - it was so vivid and a great read, I couldn't stop reading!

I rate this 20/10 - 10 extra points for awesomeness

Author's Response: Well thanks Kas, I really appreciate the feedback! 10 extra points is extra appreciated! I'm glad that you liked it!

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Review #20, by Oriondruid Epilogue: A New Professor at Hogwarts

23rd December 2010:
An excellent story which I enjoyed a lot. Obviously it is not strictly 'canon' as Jo Rowling is on record as saying no Dursley ever had magical powers, but as an AU story it is very good.
The research on Saxon history is good and the idea of how the split between muggle and magical society started from that time is interesting. There are a few distracting 'Americanism's that jar a bit, e.g we Brits do not have such things as a yellow school bus, but except for those it is generally well written and well plotted.

Author's Response: Thank you for the kind words. Yes, as a Yank who has never been to GB, its tough to know exactly what would make sense over there. Thank you for the kind words, and for leaving a comment!

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Review #21, by dutchessbarbie Chapter Eight: A New Hunter for the Ax of Coifi

11th May 2010:
Very good.A few spelling mistakes but nothing major. One question or maybe two. 1)Who is Brevisar in relation to Salazar Slytherin? 2)What is the name of Dudley's wizard ancestor?

Author's Response: Brevisar is of no relation to Slytherin. He is more of a forerunner. As for Dudley's ancestor, it is a paternal ancestor (so on his FATHER'S side, but this unnamed person was just to provide a plot twist, making Vernon a wizard by default).

Thank you for reading, and for commenting!

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Review #22, by deep Epilogue: A New Professor at Hogwarts

13th April 2009:
thr r nt many stories with dudley as the main character bt u started well frm the point whr jkr left and built a good story

Author's Response: Thank you deep. I love it when readers comment on my work. Thanks for the note, and hope you check out my other story, still a work in progress...

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Review #23, by Bella_Portia Chapter Two: A Thoroughly Magical Place

14th February 2009:
First, I think your portrayal of Vernon and Petunia in this chapter was spot on.

Dudley's monologue was fascinating. I liked the details -- for example, his description of Mrs. Figg making him answer questions. The monologue cemented my sense of Dudley in his determination to change.

I liked the insight about the relationship between Vernon and Petunia.

He also was quite impressed with the new vocabulary . . . some sort of joke about someone's backside. -- This was a great look at Dudley's inner life.

I thought the historical material was extremely interesting. One purist note: your English rendering of St. Bede's work left out a word. Historia ecclesiastica gentis Anglorum = Ecclesiastical History of the English People.

Overall, very interesting chapter that really develops your main character nicely.

Author's Response: Thanks so much for coming back Bella! I love that you called the way I write Dudley as a monologue! To be honest, it wasn't intentional...

I am also thrilled that you like how I wrote Vernon and Petunia! Finally, I think I left out Ecclesiastical because I was going by notes from my history course, and I must have forgotten to write that down. Yes, I did base the background of my fic on a history course I took in college...

Thanks for the great review!!!

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Review #24, by Bella_Portia The Beginning

11th February 2009:
Hi, Gords. I wanted to participate in the Story Club, so here I am.

I thought this was a very fine set-up. Poor Dudley disappears from sight after the beginning of DH; and we never do find out how the Dementor encounter changed his Outlook on Life, or what happened to him afterwards. I love stories that fill in these gaps, and I think you do a fine job. (I read ahead before I came back to write this.)

I think Dudley turning into a bright boy, after all, makes a lot of sense. After all, there must be some inherited intelligence there. Lily was very smart, Harry's pretty smart, and Dudley's got a lot of the same genes.

The notion of them going into the "Wizard Protection Program" gave me a chuckle. So much of the canon wizarding world parallels and satirizes our Muggle institutions, so having the Dursleys go into hiding -- just like a trio of witnesses against the mob in government protection -- fit right in. All the way down to Vernon's new career.

Looking forward to more.

Author's Response: Hey, welcome to the story! Thanks so much for writing a review! I'm really glad that you like the story so far, and that you enjoy some of the magical muggle aspects...

I'm also really glad that you buy the Dudley being smart line...

Thanks so much for the review, and hope that you like the rest of the story!!!

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Review #25, by Pookha Epilogue: A New Professor at Hogwarts

11th February 2009:
The part with Dudley bringing the parents into the teaching really struck a chord with me. I think this is just the sort of thing that a good Muggle studies prof would do.

I must admit that I wonder what the Sorting Hat would say aobut this new Dudley...

I like the changes that occurred throughout the story with Dudley and his relationship with Hannah. Poor Neville...denied Hannah (just kidding).

I also liked that you had him learning to brew potions, as that's something that I don't think the ax would be too helpful with.

A very interesting and fun read overall. My main CC would be to work on presenting the characters emotions to us by showing us their reactions rather than just telling us that their upset, sad, etc. But, this comes with just writing and practicing.

Thank you for an enjoyable story.

Author's Response: Hey, you made it to the end! Thanks so much for reading!!!

I'm glad that you liked Dudley as a teacher. I always felt that with muggleborn students, the parents never really get invited to that world, so I thought a parents day and fieldtrips would be a cool way to change the relations. Because, to be honest, I think the wizarding young would love to go to an amusement park, they'd just maybe need to rent it out for a day so no one would wonder why these weirdly dressed people with sticks were running around...

And yes, poor Neville... I guess in my mind, she was destined to always end up with Luna, so I went in this direction...

I'm also glad that you liked Dudley having to learn potions. I just think that he'd need a rudimentary knowledge to get around.

In response to the CC, you're exactly right. I hope that I've been doing this in my new story, so maybe if you check that out you can see some growth in my writing!

I really appreciate the help, and thanks for the amazing reviews!


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