He didn't love her anymore, nor had she ever loved him.
^But he says at the end that he DOES love her. I'm confused?
One thing you need to watch is that you use the right words. For example, you say "new" when you should say "knew", and you used the wrong "there/they're/their" a couple of times.
It's a very great and powerful story, but there are just some techincal/grammar things that should be fixed. I really liked that she realized that she didn't love him.
On another note, and I hate doing this, 'cuz I always feel horribly rude, but are you at TDA? I was just wondering where I could find you to possibly have a banner made. *sheepish grin*Author's Response: oh gosh thank you for pointing those! I didn't see them. I'm elated you think so! i'm there as COLOR!myworld ^_^ Report Review
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