I think that this story is FANTASTIC! I love that it's written in Teddy's persepctive there aren't very many of those. Great job!!
xoxo~Lex 10/10

Author's Response: awww. thanks soooo much!! I'm reall glad that you liked it :]

thanks again for the review!!

~emily~

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Hey there, hun :)

This just a really cute story. I actually got a bit misty eyed. *blushes* I think the thing that gets me the most in stories is ending friendships. The idea of school ending and friends drifting apart just really kills me. I suppose part of it has to do with the fact that I've only got three more years at the school I've gone to since Kindergarten. I can't even imagine what leaving all of the people I've known since I was five years old behind will be like.

But anyway, you did an overall good job with this. The relationship between Teddy and Victoire was simply sweet. I loved that small parting kiss. It was just as should be, I think.

The only critque I have is that you've a couple of minor spelling errors. Nothing that can't be fixed with a quick read through though, so never fear! Nice job!

nana_banana_xx3

Author's Response: Thanks you so much for reviewing! I'll look over this and edit as soon as I can!!

Thanks again :]

~emily~

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Hey! I really like this little one-shot. I can tell you're writing from experience and I know exactly how poor Teddy feels, since I just graduated and it's so hard to keep in touch with the people you used to see every day. The relationship between Teddy and Victoire is really sweet, I like that they were kind of shy around each other and then she ended up kissing him on his birthday. (Seems to be a common birthday present in the HP world, doesn't it? ;) ) The only criticism I have is the mood of the story - it starts off sad because Teddy's kind of lonely, and then it goes into the flashback, and then after the flashback all of a sudden Teddy's wildly happy about his friends and his romance. You're probably really confused now haha, sorry ... I guess what I'm trying to say is, I don't know what the focus is. Is the focus on the friendships, or is the focus on the love of Victoire? But like I said, I really like this story, it's a very sweet and uplifting kind of story (my favorite kind!). Great job! :)

Author's Response: You didn't confuse me! I know what you mean... The focus was supposed to be more on the friendships, and then I kind of changed gears at the end... I see how that would be a little odd :/

thanks so much for the input! I'll have to look this over again...

thanks again :]

~emily~

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Hmm. Nice. The ending about friends seems out of place... your flashback was about romance, you should have made it to romance THEN friendship in two paragraphs.

Other than that, it's very cute.

Author's Response: thanks for the input. I'll definitely change some things around :]

thanks again,

~emily~

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I really like it. You're insights on what tends to happen after graduation are sadly correct and well written about.

Author's Response: I'm glad you liked it. This is kind of written from experience, so I'm glad that you think its well written :]

thanks for reviewing!

~emily~

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