Oh wow this is really sad :( but beautiful :) Report Review
Finally. The review. Lol.
Anyway way for slash and I'm glad it's R/S, you know how I love them. Here goes for the official reviewlikeness...ahem...
There was a sombre, melancholy atmosphere to this which distinguished it and I think, as it was very short, this was the dominant element in the story. There was some good imagery and some nice portrayal of emotions, specifically Sirius's.
The only thing I can really criticize is the middle part, with the dialogue about Lily, etc. I had to re-read it to understand what was going on and even then I wasn't one hundred per cent certain. I think you could have led in and out of that smoother and more clearly.
Some punctuation mistakes, etc but overall very good grammar and writing style
So yeah, great story, I loved it. ^^ Thank you!
x Katie x
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