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Review #1, by Ink Laden Quill Graverobbers

3rd September 2009:
This was definitely an interesting story. I wasn't really sure where you were going with it, but it had a funny/slightly creepy twist in the end. All in all, though, I enjoyed reading it. Good job!

Author's Response: Thank you for the review and I'm glad that you enjoyed the story. Ha, ha, nice pun *twist at the end*...I never thought about it, but it actually does, literally have a twist at the end.

I'm glad you enjoyed this.

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Review #2, by Bella_Portia Graverobbers

30th July 2009:
When Det. Singh asked why MI-5 was interested in their little graverobbing problem, I found myself wondering what Fox Mulder would have said as he prepared to commandeer a local investigation on behalf of the FBI.

I was drawn into the police procedural aspect of this story, with the wizarding forensics. The effect on me was, however, that it became more of a procedural, the little graverobber became more of the ordinary experience of a wizard detective, if that makes sense. In other words, as the mystery is solved by logical, credible and familiar means, the sense of horror is diminished. I mention this because I thought horror may have been the dominant effect you were after.

I think that for this to grab the reader as a horror story, it needs to be a little longer. Although the story is written from Harry's POV, you don't really get a sense of dread coming from him. The only person expressing fear is Mary, the forensic tech. Ron, likewise, doesn't seem too bothered.

I was thinking that the scene at the Haunted House might be a good time for Harry to recall who's who (or brief Ron). I may just be dense. (Probably!) But it took me 3 readings to realize that the creature holding little George was the old fanatic who killed his children. (BTW: would there be anything left save bones of old Taggart, who's been dead for 35+ years?) It also seemed to me that this might be a good time to introduce the idea that these creatures are not really Inferi; even in the short section devoted to them, they are clearly not behaving as Inferi.

It seemed a bit odd, having Fred coming back to life and acting very much as himself. It may have been the absence of explanation of the phenomenon. And, because he acted so like himself, I think it would be devastating for Ron.

I actually thought the line about Won-Won was kind of sad. Poor Lavender. Beyond the veil and still hasn't moved on.

I liked the Return of Conner. The virtues of firearms versus wands is the subject for a PM discussion -- personally, I'm not sold on them as a substitute for magic. It's a whole 'nother skill and far less versatile. (BTW, I'm surprised their laptops and Blackberries work at Auror headquarters.)

I think you have an amazing new world going on here.

Author's Response: In my defense, I will say that this is one of the first things I ever wrote for the site and it shows a lot of what I was as a beginning writer. If I were writing it now, it would be vastly different. The technology angle would be way toned down, with only the mobile and gun still in play. I have a reason why the technology works at HQ, but since it's no longer going to be part of 'Bodies at Rest,' I'm just going to gloss it over.

The virtue of firearms versus magic is something that will come up in 'Bodies at Rest,' and it is actually going to be part of one of the main parallel stories. I've had this story for Harry in my mind for a long time.

The Lavender comment was really meant to be dead-Fred yanking Ron's chain a bit. Ron's reaction to dead-Fread is one of the things I would change in the story. I was just learning how to show instead of tell and to tell a story through dialogue, so this story's a bit flat at times.

I absolutely see your point about the procedural element taking over the horror part and I wish I knew how to fix it, but I don't want to go completely re-edit this story as it marks a place in my writing where I was developing.

George Krupp's ability to call the Animorte from the grave is what allows Taggart to have flesh on his bones. Had George had practice and a wand, he could have made them look almost alive. Very horrifying to be dead, and still have a piece of your animus stuck to your body.

Harry knows they aren't behaving as Inferi, but at this point he has no sphere of reference for them. I should make it more clear that he knows they're not Inferi, but he doesn't know exactly what they are.

Ah, Conner. This is the same Conner as DFK, but it's not the same world. Think of this as a parallel universe to the parallel universe of DFK. I know Conner's entire history and would love to write a story of it (and have written part of it), but it would be way too political for the site. If you are interested in a synopsis of Conner's life, I can provide it. If you hadn't guessed he was Slytherin at Hogwarts with the trait of 'getting stuff done, but also advancing my own agenda,' without the Dark Arts end of it being so pronounced. He's definitely not one-dimensional.

I learned a lot from this work and DFK's early chapters about how to develop a story and show emotion. That's why I felt comfortable now in following it up. The CC that people had, especially for those two stories made a lot of difference in my development.

As far as wizard detectives, if you have a desire to write a noir detective, I have the name and profile for you, because I don't think I could write it well.

I think Fox would be boggled by the wizarding world, and this was meant to be a sort of X-Files thing.

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Review #3, by Labby Graverobbers

25th October 2008:
Wow, what an interesting and unique story. I love the action and the mystery of it and I love the muggle technology being added in. It’s pretty neat to picture Harry and Ron like that in here. He seemed to have a bit of fun trying to blend in. You did a good job of dragging me into this story… I like that it was a little case here, but it seemed much more than that… it had a lot going on at once – sorry, I’m having trouble explaining my thoughts here. I liked at the end there how Fred was able to give that little message to Harry. That was sweet. I enjoyed this story a lot, even if I couldn’t explain it very well. :)

Author's Response: Thanks for the review. This story garners really mixed reviews, so I'm glad to get a nice one.

I thought that a Halloween Auror case might be a nice little story and be interesting to some people.

I'm happy that the story's engaging enough to draw people into it and keep their attention.

You're right that there's more to it than that and I do have a novella length sequel planned for this detailing George Krupp's time at Hogwarts, but it's on the way back burner right now.

Thanks again, I appreciate the review.

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Review #4, by Lunicle Graverobbers

14th October 2008:
W.O.W. That was amazing writing and the plot had me completely sucked in. It was so suspenseful! I'm really impressed that you packed that much plot into a one-shot. It was really creepy too, but in the way it was intended to be, I think. ;) Really well done! I am glad I didn't read it at night though... guess I'm just not a big enough girl for horror. :D 10/10

Oh yeah, and I'm really picky about grammar type things, and I didn't spot anything in this! So well done on that too. Of course, that may be partly due to the fact I was totally sucked in to reading this. But I didn't see much out of place in your other stories either, so I doubt it./rambling

Again, amazing plot and amazingly done.

Reviewers, unite! Writers, write!


Author's Response: Hey thanks again for the very nice review. I pride myself on spelling and grammar and I just die inside when someone finds a mistake in one of my stories, so I'm glad that this is error-free.

This is a story that I really thought about and planned before writing, so that may be why it feels so tight, when I know that the plots of my hidden novella and my novel WIP are quite a bit looser.

I really wanted it to be horror with a darkly humorous twist at the end (pun intended).

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Review #5, by Karamaa Graverobbers

6th June 2008:
Wow, intersting story.
One thing you want to watch, though, is when two people are talking, like Harry and Hermione for instance, is that you don't overuse their names too much. If that makes any sense.
I also found it slightly intriguing that harry had a blackberry.


Author's Response: Thanks for the review. I have answered about the technology a lot in other responses, so I won't go into it here. I'm glad that you thought it was interesting. Thanks for the suggestions on dialogue. I have learned a lot since writing this story about writing and will re-write it at some point, and I will probably look closely at the dialogue at that point.

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Review #6, by harry_125 Graverobbers

20th March 2008:
good story
especially the lavender part
the other inferi kinda creeped me out though

Author's Response: Thanks for the review and kind words. LOL about Lavender's comments. Well, the problem is that they aren't really Inferi, but Harry has no experience with what they really are. It's meant to be slightly creepy, so I'm glad that I hit that mark.

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Review #7, by momotwins Graverobbers

14th March 2008:
Wow. Highly intriguing. I love that the Aurors have cover as MI-5 agents, that's brilliant. And using guns, good one there. I am confused as to how someone born in 1988 was in school with the trio (born 1979 (Hr) and 1980 (R and H)). Is this an AU timeline? Another point, JKR has said that Muggle technology goes haywire around magic (Hermione mentions it in GoF too) - there's an interesting article about it on the Lexicon called "When Magic Meets Muggle Technology." At any rate, extremely interesting story, although I agree with other reviewers that Fred as a zombie is disturbing :( Poor Freddie. Excellent writing, and I'm excited to see more of little George Krupp.

Author's Response: Well, the answer on the dates is: I simply screwed up, not supposed to be an AU timeline. I'm going to have to write it out and correct it, since George is the same age as Teddy Lupin. Thank you for catching it.

The technology point is something that I was aware of, but it's something that
Conner, the new chief Auror has a work-around for, as he wants to modernise the Aurors and use both magic and Muggle techniques.

Thanks, I always thought that Aurors would need Muggle covers or they would have to use way more memory charms than ever, especially with the proliferation of video web sites. It would be very easy to quash a video as a MI-5 agent, but not so easy magically.

Thank you for the nice review. I do intend to use George again in a future story, in which you'll see that Fred wasn't exactly an Inferi or a zombie, but something more.

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Review #8, by jinx_pickle_jinx Graverobbers

17th December 2007:
its a cool story, but Inferi can't talked i don't think

Author's Response: You are correct. What George raises are not Inferi, but that is what Harry thinks of them as since he has never seen or heard of the type of zombies that George raises. Look for George in a future fic for further explanation.

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Review #9, by seanos Graverobbers

6th December 2007:
I really liked this. I am writing something similar Special Agent Gordon about an auror in the FBI.

Not sure the ministry modernised that fast to now have laptops and blackberrys. Also Harry would have been made to qualify on pistol when he was issued with it. I like covering an auror as an MI5 agent - but Harry would have to dress like an agent - not in robes.

Finally the confundus charm causes temporary confusion. To have the desired effect on the policewoman Harry would have to use an imperius curse to force her to hand over the files followed by a memory charm.

Author's Response: Doh! Good catches. I'm surprised that with as much as this story has been read that your the first to catch the robes problem... In the movies they call that a continuity error. I meant to have Harry cast an illusion over his robes, but left it out.

As for the pistol, yes, Harry would have had to qualify for it, and he did. That scene will be shown in another fic I have planned. Conner has a great demonstration with comparing the internet to a divination spell for information gathering quickly also in that planned story. I just want to make it clear that not all the Ministry went with the tech, just the Aurors and a new dept. that Hermione is working with.

Doh, good catch again with the curse. Re-reading the story, I can see that you are correct and I used the wrong spell.

Thanks for your review, it's this type of CC that really helps.

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Review #10, by presi Graverobbers

25th November 2007:
i think this is the most amusing scary story i have ever read. I love it!

Author's Response: Thank you. This story seems to be a love or hate thing. Glad you liked it. I think I got the humour just right in it.

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Review #11, by EileenPrince Graverobbers

24th November 2007:
Really clever story ;D Love your writing style.

Author's Response: Thank you, I feel that I am finally developing my style. "The Dementor's First Kiss" was my first creative writing in about 20 years, so I think it shows some of my learning curve. This story had been plotted out and written in a rush over 2 days, so I thought it would bomb, but it generally seems to be well received.

It's interesting to me that some people really object to the technology, and some don't.

Thank you for your review.

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Review #12, by Shamoogrl101 Graverobbers

19th November 2007:
Ahhh, interesting. First i was alittle disturbed with Fred and all that, but i turned out to be a good little short on Harry's life beyond the 7th book. keep writing! Oh, and by the way, thanks for reviewing my story.

Author's Response: Thanks. A lot of people are turned off by the Muggle technology, which I can understand.

I believe in leaving review for stories that I have read, so you are welcome.

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Review #13, by war and peace Graverobbers

9th November 2007:
pretty good...
actually, i'm lying. i didn't like it, but i dunno why. oh well.

Author's Response: That's okay, not every story is for everybody.

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Review #14, by Firenze Fan Graverobbers

28th October 2007:
Nice ending! But I thought Inferi were only puppets. Also, why would wizards be using telephones and computers?

Author's Response: For the technology answer, please look at the other reviews for this story, as I have answered it before.

As for Inferi, you are correct, they are only puppets. What George raises aren't Inferi, they are something else, but Harry thinks of them as Inferi since he doesn't know just what they are.

George Krupp will be back in some later stories of mine and it will be better explained just what the dead he raises are.

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Review #15, by nyzshaitan101 Graverobbers

27th October 2007:
dude this wuz the best!

Author's Response: TY, glad you liked it.

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Review #16, by June Riddle Graverobbers

26th October 2007:
Awww so sweet

Author's Response: Thank you.

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Review #17, by MyronWin Graverobbers

24th October 2007:
A very interesting story, to be sure. I like the time frame and the fact that it shows Harry, Ron and Hermione at work. It shows good use of magic (love the bit about the photograph!) but I thought they relied too much on muggle technology. All the phone calls made it seem a little too much like an X-Files story. Don't get me wrong, I like the X-Files. I also liked the story. And the relationship between magic and muggles is an issue in my own HP project. In general, as a one-off, your story works very well. It was consistant with itself and it held my interest till the end. And it was very nice that Fred had not been forgotten. Thank you for your story.

Author's Response: The technology will be important when I do other Harry as an Auror stories. Thanks for the review, I appreciate the kind words. Glad people like this story generally.

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Review #18, by Rupertluver2012 Graverobbers

23rd October 2007:
I love, love, love it (:
Love it.

& It had me terribly scared at first.
little children coming out of graves is a little disturbing.
you wrote extremely well.
new favs, both the story & you.


Author's Response: Thank you for the review and adding to faves.

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Review #19, by aron12323 Graverobbers

23rd October 2007:
great story!

Author's Response: Thank you.

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Review #20, by The Pirate Girl Graverobbers

22nd October 2007:
That was excellent! Very creepy (in a good way) and funny. I like the little touches such as the boy being called george. You also wrote the ministry procedures and the characters really well!
This story is definitely one of my favorites!

Author's Response: Thank you, it seems I got the tone just right. As far as procedures, I actually forgot that they would not be able to apparate/disapparate from inside the ministry, oh well. Thanks for the review, glad you liked it.

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Review #21, by Burrow6 Graverobbers

21st October 2007:
Very nice! My first fan ficiton read, and I liked it very much.

Author's Response: Thank you for the review. Wow, your first fan-fic read. What drew you to it? Feel free to post on my author's page and let me know. Thanks for the compliment.

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Review #22, by kissedbyavampire Graverobbers

21st October 2007:

Amazing. Simply amazing. Very angsty, horrific and just long enough! The story line is great too, very original. I loved it! I can't wait to read more of this caliber!

But it was a bit odd that you incorporated so much technology, though it really went well, you know, didn't throw you off too much.

And props for having Harry being so funny (with the voices!)

1000.9 for sure! Forget about the ten!


*sniff* fred! *wails*

Author's Response: Thanks for the great review. The technology was introduced by Conner, the new Chief Auror. Harry likes some of it like the internet, blackberries, and gps, but hates guns.

Seems like people either like the phone humour with Hermione or hate it, glad you liked it.

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Review #23, by Imshaken Graverobbers

21st October 2007:
It's difficult to visualize Harry Potter carrying a revolver, blackberry and saying "Ta" to Hermione. The universe of wizards and muggles are merging in ways Rowling never imagined.

Other than that, it was a nice little yarn.

Author's Response: Harry really doesn't want to carry a gun, but it is a new rule for Aurors under Conner. He sees technological tools as a useful, quick way to augment magical research.

As for "Ta" that's just Harry yanking her chain on the phone. For some reason, I picture adult Harry having a fun relationship with Hermione that results in minor pranking, and always in strange phone behaviour.

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Review #24, by Pretty Purple Pelican Graverobbers

20th October 2007:
This is was great. There were some missing commas, but it didn't really bother me, because everything else was wonderful. I love that you threw in Fred's personality. Great job! :)

Author's Response: Thanks for your review. If you want, you can PM me or put on my author page where the missing commas are. I'm always willing to improve my grammar.

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Review #25, by slytherensangel26 Graverobbers

19th October 2007:

Author's Response: Thank you for the review. I'm glad people like this story.

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