I LOVE IT! I think it's really sweet.This is going on my favorites list:) Report Review
That was really good. it wasnt much of an actual story, more like a summary of her life but i think that is what you were going for. good job, i could tell the fathers love for his daughter. Report Review
Beautiful - simply beautiful Report Review
It was nice and sweet. U should write a nice novel some day as well! Report Review
i was very touched by your story, yes, you're great at making Arthur's idea of Ginny seeing nothing is always mentioned in the books,
very good! Report Review
AWW, that was so cute and sad. Are you writting more? Thst would be so kewl.
10/10 Report Review
awe that was sooo sweet!!
i really liked it, and its the first story i have read with ginny and athur... but i loved it... just a couple of mistakes... but overall it was good!! =) Report Review
I thought this story was well written and flowed well, wish it could have been longer. Please write more. . . . . . Report Review
I like the images you create in this work. However, there are a few flagrant errors that should be brought to your attention. The main one is that you are inconsistant in the underlining of 'little'. Sometimes you underline 'my little', sometimes 'little' and the next space, etc. A quick read-through before sending this off could help prevent this occurance next time.
One other thing: "She was fifteen years old, had gone on dates, and had first kisses [ . . .]"
Um, how do you have more than one first kiss? Be careful to watch out for mistakes like this which can utterly change what you mean to say and confuse the reader.
All in all, nice fiction for a first story! I especially loved the bit with Ginny dressed in Molly's old ball gown. Author's Response: Yes, I know I made a lot of mistakes and a I realized this when I read it over. Thanks for the review though. Report Review
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