James' middle name is Sirius not Serious...just thought id let u no...

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was this before or afte vageeta turned good. this is very odd.

Author's Response: Well if your following the plot of DBZ then he has just turned good, however I have not decided if I am going to use him yet. Keep in mind that I am turning Gohan's world upside down.

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i didn't know that koku and Chi Chi were dead? when did that happen?

Author's Response: It didn't. I turned Gohan's world upside down. Disregard the plot of DBZ unless I use any of it in upcoming chapters.

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"Albus Severes Potter, James Serious Potter"

Don't you mean Albus Severus and James Sirius?

Author's Response: yes, sorry. That was my first chapter of fan fiction, and my editing skills have improved since. The thing is I have no time to fix past mistakes

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You jumped right in there which is nice but perhaps you might want to help your readers build up speed :) Had a problem with Ginny being in pain at 5 wks Preg. This would suggest problems and is not normal. Eager to continue to read your story.

Author's Response: Thank-You for the advice. As far as Ginny goes, I know very little of the process of pregnancy. So I guess you'll have to forgive my ignorance *shrugs* Well, thanks again!

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wow this is soo cool!

Author's Response: Thanks!!! I'm working on chapter 6

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youve spelt britan wrong l0l like it though

Author's Response: Did i really? Sorry I'll fix that. Glad you like it

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oh boy this should be good!

Author's Response: Glad you think so, the next chapter is in validation

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ah yes siblings...James and Albus Remind me of my older sister and i..there were many stories she told me that scared me alot! i loke this..keep it going

Author's Response: Thank-you, glad you like it.

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I love stories with Albus and James I think they're soo cute when they fight,
Awwh this is great! "A git am I well that that would make you a-" lol hmmm what was he going to say?
Try going back and seperating the dialouge though, it would make it much easier to read!
Great chapter! Keep going~!
..i'm off to read chapter 2... :)

Author's Response: Thank-you!!! I will fix the spacing mistakes in this chapter. Starting on chapter 3 (I think) the chapters are properly spaced.

Chapter 5 ~in limbo

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omg! i love it!

Author's Response: Thanks for all the reviews. I will see if I can return the favor.............

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this is cool

Author's Response: Thank-you. Glad you like it

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I know you said Gohan is from Dragon Ball Z but since I have never seen it he is new to me. Keep that in mind and please don't assume your readers will be familiar enough with this character to have sufficiant back story to know what he is about. Nice chapter. Still enjoying the read.
Grung

Author's Response: I am aware of this. This will be posted to my upcoming chapters, but it wouldn't hurt to say it now. MOST INFORMATION YOU WILL READ ABOUT GOHAN IS FALSE. You will see more of this in upcoming chapters,most of my muggle-borns are or or related to famous people I highly respect, but to make them fit into my plot I have to change facts about them significantly.


Thanks for the review and support.

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I am enjoying your story. Not sure at all about what all the pain was but thats ok. I have children of my own and I guess I missed that part. The story reads easily and is enjoyable.
Grung

Author's Response: Thank-you for all the support. I'm glad you like it.






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Thanks for this chapter. It was very nice and I enjoyed peeking into Harry and Ginny’s world. Well done
Grung


Author's Response: THANK-YOU!!!!!!!!!! Your too kind.





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it was good, short, but good. it could've be a bit longer, but you did a great job with this chapter. keep up the great job on this story.

Author's Response: thank-you. yes it is short, chapter 3 (in limbo) is also short. I will try to make chapter 4 longer. Thanks again.

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this is a great job on your first fanfic. there's some mistakes here and there, but you'll get better as you continue writing. oh, you also mispelled james's and albus's middle names. Sirius and Severus. for future reference. other than that, great job. i look forward to reading more.

Author's Response: Thank-you that means a lot. Chapter 2 is 100% done I will try to post it later today.

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its good you spell some thongs wrong and its sirius not Serious

b+
~mady~

Author's Response: Thank-you for pointing that out to me. Glad you like it.

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