AU is Alternate Universe. Good story! Report Review
Love how you have Harry living in Godric's Hollow. I thought it was cool that you put Teddy in there. And love the way Albus jumps up and runs to his dad. Also loves when Ginny tells Harry she's pregnant when he say "since when" I crack up laughing. Love it so far. Report Review
What a warm moment. It is absolutely beautifulAuthor's Response: :D Report Review
Very cute! Multiplying balloons - just what every parent wants! :)Author's Response: :p Report Review
Uh-Oh, having the baby. Just got interesting I hop you update soon. Nicely writtenAuthor's Response: :p... just wait till ron picks the name... Report Review
Hi Kaleigh. As a professional editor, my first and only piece of advice on this chapter is don't trust your spell checker. If you spell a word right, but it's the wrong word, the spell checker won't point out the error. Otherwise, a great start to the story...more later.Author's Response: Thanks for the advice! I try and watch that, but sometimes i'm not that attentive :) Report Review
intristing story so farAuthor's Response: thank you, i think. Report Review
i little choppy with hermione going in labor its was oh yah ron i'm having the babyAuthor's Response: she was trying not to panic. Report Review
Cute story! The kids are spot on in personality according to how I had imagined them!Author's Response: Thaanks:) Report Review
I enjoyed reading it! I'm looking forward to more!Author's Response: I should have another one up soon :p Report Review
Pretty good. Altough, Harry seems a little too... girly.Author's Response: Interesting.. Report Review
I liked it! :) Great job!Author's Response: This is my fav. chappie of the story.:) Report Review
I love the idea. Although I would like to see more of a reaction. If she has been pregnant for six weeks, he should flip out. You know? Make more drama. 10/10Author's Response: Looking back, I was was actually thinking the smae thing. But, Im too lazt to change it. Thanks though! Report Review
I Like Your Fiction, and the Family Dynamic. Keep on keeping on!Author's Response: lol thanks Report Review
Sorry Honey I Don't know. very well written. I like the story.Author's Response: Thanks :) A few people answered. It stands for alternate universe:) Report Review
Write more! Your story is sooo good!Author's Response: Thank you :):):):):) Report Review
i can see your not planin on changeing the ages of the kids but i was wondering why it is based on facts from the book u gave them all random agesAuthor's Response: Okay, well they should be the rigth ages, and ive spent nights and nights going over this in my head, but it is going to take a lot of time that i dont have, and, well, just for the sake of the story, just they way i want it to go, they have to be those ages. But I promise the rest is based off the books, okay? Report Review
was good but u realy should think bout re-doing james's age it would make more scence coz if hes at hogs that would make teddy like 19 so him laying on the floor and getin told off 4 been up late is a bit odd. the lil kid al is sweetAuthor's Response: Thanks, but im not really planning on changing their ages. And teddy in this story is only like 3 or 4 years older than him. I guess you could say that everything is going off of the epilouge, just the epilouge would we shorter than 19 years later, alrighty? Report Review
i like it but i have a question wouldnt harry notice if she was 6 weeks pregnant she mite be a little bit big idk i have never observed this stuffAuthor's Response: i dont think so, and she was in bed.but thanks Report Review
Not a bad chapter. Got a little confusing with the characters talking going back and forth. Nicely writtenAuthor's Response: thanks Report Review
i think u r abit of on the age with the kids. James and Albus are only todlers when lilly is born. if i'm right Albus is only a year younger then James and lilly is bout 2 or 3 years younger then Albus. Also Rose is the same age as Albus and Hugo is the about the same age as Lilly. The chapter is also a bit confusing. i'm not sure who is going to hogwards and who isn't. i hope this info will help you! other then that i like the way the children acted and how they behave!! waiting for the next update!!Author's Response: thanks, sorry i know its confusing, James and Teddy and ros and fred are going. And i know im off on the ages, but for the purpose of this story, i'lll say it again, they are different ages. Report Review
hey but arent rose and albus the same age ?Author's Response: yes, but not in my story. Report Review
umm James is only FOUR years older than Lily not 11. but otherwise okAuthor's Response: Yea, I know. Report Review
At first I thought it was the forth baby but then I read all the reviews. pretty good. 8/10Author's Response: thanks Report Review
That was alright. I don't think it was one of your best chapters though. I did like the part where James said that Fred takes after him and Teddy. It made me laugh. Some of the sentences don't need their own line, though. "'You know what, I think he takes after us.' James whispered into Teddy's ear. Teddy chuckled just as the whistle blew." That can all be one line, like so. You don't need a space in-between the dialog and the action. There are a couple other parts like that as well. But I'm really confused. James shouldn't be going to Hogwarts if Lily wasn't born yet...and neither should Rose. James would be around 3 years or so older than Lily, and Rose goes to Hogwarts when Albus goes to Hogwarts. I think Teddy still had one year until he went to Hogwarts or he was just starting his first year when Ginny would be pregnant with Lily, because he's about 7 years older than James or so. If you work on those things, I think it could add to the chapter a lot more.Author's Response: Thanks for the feedback, i will try to work on the dialouge, as , once again, i was in a hurry. seems like i always am. As for the age thing, I started writing this story on a whim, forgetting about the ages, so just bear with me there. Thanks:D Report Review
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