Reading Reviews for Loneliness
7 Reviews Found

Review #1, by andiebunny Last Night

5th November 2007:
Nice first chapter, but I think the sentences are a bit to snappy and factual, such as the first one :Ginny Potter 24... I think I get what you mean, but it needs a bit more description. Nice cliffhanger, I can't wait to read the next chapter!

Author's Response: thanks for the advice

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Review #2, by kandib293 Last Night

1st November 2007:

Author's Response: thanks i fell so bad i've been so busy i haven't had time to write

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Review #3, by LoopyLooneyLunaLovegood Last Night

15th September 2007:
I like it alot! *adds to favorites*

Author's Response: thanks :D :D :D :D :D

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Review #4, by anonymous Last Night

15th September 2007:
well it's pretty good, the start, but your punctuation could use some tuning offense

Author's Response: thanks

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Review #5, by Severus my hero Last Night

15th September 2007:
The story is not bad, however you should make your quotations a little more prominent by putting them in the next line; this makes it more convenient for the reader.

Author's Response: great tip thanks

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Review #6, by HarryGinnyFan18 Last Night

14th September 2007:
Hey! I love it. I love this banner. Is Harry going to be ok? How many chapters are u in this? 100-100! Jackie. hugs kiss UPDATE R.S.P.

Author's Response: i 'm not giving anything away i don't know how many chapters though i will do an epilogue either way

i made the banner :D

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Review #7, by kiwigirl Last Night

14th September 2007:
not bad. it's apparated, not apperated. just a side note. alittle bit repetitious, maybe try to come up with different 'names' for characters, and not say said as much, maybe sighed, or cried, or shouted.just more variety. over all not bad.

Author's Response: thanks I'll look at it first review thanks

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