That was really good. You've developed the voices for these charaters very well!! If you don't want to update this story because you are working on other things then you can just change it to a one-shot it would be fine as it is. Good job!!
xoxo~Lex 9/10Author's Response: I am planing on updating. I have been working on THe Wreck because I wanted to finish it, its been over a year since i first posted it so i wanted to finish it. I shall update this story soon. Report Review
It's pretty good, only one problem that I found.
They act so much like students.
Like using terms like "going out" and the like.
And the lingo for the era is a little unbefitting.
Other that that it was interesting. I liked the ideas. I think that I shall fav it.Author's Response: Thank you, I do have a probalem about saying the terms going out and all that. I mean I do live in the 21st century, but I will try and fix that. I knew that it was going to happen. Report Review
nice story could use more details thoughAuthor's Response: Thanks Report Review
omg this is good keep writingAuthor's Response: Thanks Les Report Review
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