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Review #1, by Jane_Volturi Memories of Him

22nd July 2009:
Characterization:
Hmmm, this was ok, could have been better though, remember i'm just judging this from the flashbacks Ginny's having and exactly what's going on in her head. I found i could relate to the characters but at times i found they were ever so slightly off character, i'll elaborate:)

Ginny: Ok, so i've always gathered Ginny to be a hot-tempered, courageous, loyal Gryffindor who's heart has always ached for Harry, you've made this quite clear in this fanfiction, i do feel however you could have made her a little more upset, there wasn't quite enough detail on that part considering that was the main part of the story. I loved the way you descriped Harry from her point of view though, that was most definitley in character.

Harry: You most certainly stuck to his character very well. I'm just going from the flashbacks Ginny was having by the way. His whole description and dialogue was spot on.

Plot: This plot was rather uneventful, but i suppose that was sort of the point lol. I loved it none the less, the whole idea of Ginny remembering Harry who was now dead was brilliant, quite upsetting actually, i felt very sorry for her, judging by the high amount of pain she must have been going through during this fanfiction.

Mood:This had a rather down beat, upsetting mood to it, very emotional and melancholic. You carried that out superbly, and although some of those things aren't that brilliant to feel, i still enjoyed the fanfiction.

Grammar: Your grammar was very good, i couldn't spot any slip ups, everything made the perfect sense!
Spelling: Perfect, I couldn't spot any mistakes which was good
Punctuation: Perfect, not a misplaced comma in sight.

Descriptive Language: You did an ok job with this, though i still think you could have added a lot more detail, perhaps you could have thrown in a few metaphors in there too, to make it sound more interesting, or perhaps some peronification?

Paragraphing: Fine. Though there were however a few times where you didn't have to paragraph text.

Conclusion: Everything was good, you just need to work on your descriptive language and sticking to the canon characters. Things that can be very easily improved.
Rating: 9/10 (which is still good)

Goodluck in the future
Katiex

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Review #2, by hp7002 Memories of Him

19th December 2008:
hey! that was really really good! it says its completed. i hope not! its a really good idea (even though it doesnt go with the 7th book, oh well) i think you should keep writing it.

Author's Response: Thanks. :) That's really sweet of you to say. Unfortunately this was only a one-sot and I don't have any more to tell. Thanks again for the sweet review :)

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Review #3, by BeautyLoonyKeeper Memories of Him

12th March 2008:
Very nicely written! Well done. It was very nicely proportioned. 10/10

Author's Response: Thanks! I worked very hard on it.

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Review #4, by Draco1129 Memories of Him

9th December 2007:
wait is harry alive? I am cofungled

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Review #5, by hmrpotter Memories of Him

11th September 2007:
This is a sad but very sweet story.

Author's Response: Thanks!

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Review #6, by Quill88 Memories of Him

11th September 2007:
ahh, I think this story was soo good! I loved it!
seriously I am crying over here *waves frustrated with soaked tissue*!
I loved it, it is going straight to the faves!
why on earth haven´t you written more? get going!
10/10
and good luck with your next stories!
Quill88



Author's Response: Lol thanks soooooooooo much for the review! I'm actually about to send in anothe one-shot in a minute.

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