the only real problem with your writing is that you need more punctuation to slow it down and break up your sentences. Report Review
Just one problem,
[“Good morning son” this was from a tall messy haired black man]
u might want to change the order there mate.
please update soon.
this is a really good story.
10/10 Report Review
i like! Report Review
lol liked that a lot. Report Review
lol cool. liked what lily did, and a cute twist having ron and ginny being twins. neat, post more.Author's Response: Thank You so much for taking the time to review my story. The thing is it will take quite some more time to post it as my computer crashed Report Review
I LOVE IT ,PLEASE UPDATE SOON ,I CAN'T WAIT TO SEE HOW THEY BECOME FRIENDS , YOU ROCK
Author's Response: I was blushing after I read your comment.Thank You. I will do my best to update as soon as possible
i LOVE IT!Author's Response: Thank you so much for your review Report Review
It was good so far, a few mistakes here and there, but theyre easily over looked.Author's Response: I am so glad that you find my story nice.But if possible could you please tell me what those mistakes are? I would really appreciate it as it would help me to improve my writing.Thank you Report Review
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