Hah, I got that one right! (evil laugh) Severus is back!
Placing bets on which chapter Dayanara kills moldy-Voldy. Oh, this one's gonna be a good one, Fire! Problem is, this may overtake your Sirius story in it's appeal. I'm wondering if the erotic undertones will continue throughout... (hoping so) What a great story to be reading at this time of the year, as Halloween creeps ever closer, the nights grow cool, and the winds begin to tumble the fallen leaves across empty farm fields and bleak stretches of pavement under an Autumnal moon.
--JimAuthor's Response: Snape is definitely back! I couldn't write a story without him in it! I love the guy too much. As for Dayanara...good lord I want to write a story just with her. She's evil personafied. I seriously think she'd give Voldemort a run for his money. There's no denying that. Do you really think it'll overtake M of SB? The erotic undertones will definitely continue if I decide to continue to write this one. It's definitely creepy. LOL! I'm glad that you're enjoying it. As always, thanks for the review Jim. Report Review
Okay, Fire, it's time you 'fessed up... what else do you write outside of Harry Potter fan fic? You are far too good to be held in check by the bonds of the TOS.
I thought I had come up with all the superlatives in my vocabulary for your Sirius story. The writing in this story has a delicious edge to it, that makes me think of drops of blood dripping from the vampyric canines of someone having just fed on the flesh of an unfortunate, yet gullible victim. It makes me think of Tim Curry in his roles of Dr. Frankenfurter, or as the Lord of Darkness in Legend.
Don't you just love the start of a new story, when you can actually taste the juices of your creative ideas, and the words begin to flow, and you don't dare stop... This new story of yours kicks into gear so quickly with that luscious opening scene, full of wonderful imagery, and the promise that things will be, as they should have been in the books, if they had been written for adults.
As usual, your dialog is wonderful, and it's refreshing to have Ron as a main character, leading (or being led??? LOL ) the story.
Whenever I read one of your stories, I know for a fact that the pacing, the dialog, the characters, and your story plot will be top notch.
Okay, enough for now. Well done, Fire!
--JimAuthor's Response: Honestly I don't really write anything outside of HP. I haven't had an original story idea in months and its driving me nuts. LOL! So instead I keep thinking up HP ones until a plot bunny overtakes me. It's definitely different than M of SB. With a vampire and Voldemort back, it makes it more evil than the other one. I'm glad you liked the imagery and the opening scene. This is definitely adult HP. Not for the kids. LOL! As for Ron, that was unexpected even for me. I never expected him to be the one leading the charge but its nice seeing him being the strong one for ones. I'm glad that you enjoyed it. Thanks for taking the time to read and review, Jim. I do appreciate it. Report Review
Hey there fireceltiephoenix! I've come to review, obviously. :p
This is another really different kind of story. I mean that in the nicest possible way. You've got an interesting idea; it's something I've never read before. I'll be interested to see what you do with this and how things develope.
The only CC I can give you is to not include the letter two times. We've already read it once, and to be perfectly honest I didn't read it the second time. *blushes* It really wasn't necessary, unless by not reading it the second time I totally missed something. ;) Which knowing my luck, is probably what happened.
Anway, really interesting start. Your style is distinct and good for reading. Nice job. :)
nana_banana_xx3Author's Response: Hi, Nana! Thanks for stopping by. I do appreciate it.
It sounds like you'll be back for updates. YAY! I'm glad that you're finding it original and unique. I try to do that with all of my stories but the Time Turner Series is especially close to my heart. So I'm trying something new with both this one and the Murder of Sirius Black. As for CC, thank you for letting me now about the repetition of the letter. I thought it would help kinda see the subtle hints in it but maybe it was too much. Don't worry...you'll see what the letter means by the end of all of it! LOL! Thank you for saying my style is distinct. That means a lot to me. Thank you for taking the time to review! Report Review
That was fantastic. Very descriptive. You portrayed Ron and George very well. Can't wait for the next chapter! 10/10Author's Response: *claps hands* I was SO hoping I played George and Ron well. It's hard to capture canon characters and keep them intact yet give them your own spin. But I'm glad I could for you. Please continue to check back for updates. Thank you so much for your review. Report Review
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